WarHammer 40000: Dawn of Friendship

by PhoKingAzn

Chapter 2: Scorched Earth

Chapter 2: Scorched Earth

As the pod settle into the soil of the earth
The side Doors on the pod began to lower and a break of light went inside the cabin
Twilight and spike began to step out as the recruit attempts to walk cripplingly out
And in that moment, an explosion of gun fire erupted from a distance.
A DiMadDogz was shooting a RATATATA from a near by hill and was spraying towards them

Twilight instantly did a 180 degree turn and head shotted the DiMadDogz face with her Bolt Pistol.
The shot Exploded on the DiMadzDogz exposed skin and his blood and brain matter spilled all over him

"Hurry we must make to the Objective" said Twilight

Spike readying his Hand Flamer and his Staff at hand, he hurry along with Twilight.
The recruit Held his Bolter and started after them.

Just as the crew came up on to a corner of a hill
a covered position erupted with bullets, as they flew across twilight's face
In an instant twilight went back against the hill avoiding enemy fire
Holding her breathe thinking to herself she then She signals spike to hit the placement

Twilight casts a field slowing down the time the bullets flew
as spike runs out of the corner igniting the cover with napalm.
And In that moment same, the Recruit also comes out of the corner with his Bolter and sprays and prays almost hitting spike

"Hey watch it!" yells spike "don't be a derpy!"

So the crew continue on as they came to a clearing
The hills where shaped in a... horseshoe and bushes and trees were along the edges

Twilight looked back at them and said "This might be an Ambush"

A voice ahead replied "YAR IT IZ"
Another voice says "YOU STOOPID WETARD, U BOYZ WAZ SAPOZ TO SAPRIZ DEM"

"Burn them out spike" said Twilight calmly

Almost like natural instinct Spike, pulled the trigger and ignited the clearing
DiMad Dogz were screaming and running in the bushes

"GAHH STOOPID SPEHSS MAHREENS"

"MAI LEGS" "IT BURRRRNS"

Serveral DiMad Dogz charged straight towards them

"I STIL GONA TAK U DOW NA SPEHSS MAHREEN"

Instantly Twilight slowed time and to the recruits eyes everything was almost like a flash,
He saw blurry images on twilight everywhere, of twilight Using her Chain Hoofs To saw off an Dogz head, Using her bolter to put holes into the DiMad Dogz, and literally in seconds, all the remaining DiMad Dogz fell down.

"We are close to an outpost lets go" said twilight.

And they headed through the fire and the flames

Comments

[8-bit Bacon]

455300
lol none of the chapter ever rach 500 wordcount lol, anyway just make it longer this time. interisying story but preeeeeeeettttttyyyyyy short haha.

[PhoKingAzn]

455341

what i mean though when i was working on my story, my friend was over and he wanted to write another story that me and him had for a while, its about to be approved now for some reason i tried submitting it yesterday, took most of the day to write... the second story such weirdness

[Wubsy]

>>PhoKingAzn
Nice job, but minor grammatical mistakes.

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Would love to see more!

[PhoKingAzn]

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typing it atm, im taking your grammar suggestions atm

[Inquisipony Stallius]

No, from a technical standpoint, it is pretty bad. Capital letters sprinkled in at random, switching back and forth between tenses, substituting punctuation with line breaks. I could only stand to skim it, and I could still tell that it didn't have a whole lot going for it in the pacing, prose, character or plot departments.