An old stallion is tasked by a mysterious god with keeping the fire burning in an old lighthouse. He guides the way for the ponies of Equestria's past, present, and future, both teaching and learning the simplest truths of life in the process.
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The comments are gone because of my fiddling with the powers that be (that is, removing chapters and reposting them after editing) a few years ago, when I had no idea of how Fimfic works. I don't remove comments willingly.
Edited and preread by the omniscient, omnibenevolent and omnipotent sourichan,
jeray2000 and JeffCvt.
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All right, I'll poke at the stuff you've pointed out to me just around tomorrow, but first. Thank you a lot for this review!
This is a bit much ^^ Even if I had people checking it out, it was my first published story, of course it had tons of mistakes.
Thing is, the characterization in this piece is very, very subtle. There are places Celestia is acting a bit more maturely, and is generally a bit slower. There are parts where Luna is being faster, a bit more rash individual, quicker to burst in anger or in tears. Twilight I’ve tried to make as thorough as possible in the few moments we see her. And Cadence I can’t write for heck. May she never appear in my works again.
It had been meant to be a minimalistic piece, but I understand how I did a bit too much to quite satisfy either style.
I’ll perhaps fix the style of this fic when I become a better writer. Someday.
That little piece of out-of-place humour was a part of his characterization. He isn’t the ever-careful philosopher who shoots aphorisms every single sentence. He stumbles, tries to be smart when he’s not, and often fails at delivering the right message.
Thank you also for the follow! And for the upvote! Though, if you intend on having the wheel roll and review another one of my stories, I'd rather you waited some time until I finish the one-shot I'm working on. I think it'll be far more to your liking than anything I have at the moment. All righty, I'll look through the pinpoints tomorrow, it's a promise!
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The only thing I could add to the last comment was on the "pristine white."
Pristine-white is used to describe a colour, and draw a correlation between old and young Celestia, and the alicorn at the beginning. It somewhat contradicts ragged, but I believe it should remain, mostly because ragged in this particular piece means to describe the state of her coat, not the colour. Despite the raggedness, the colour of the coat remained.
Thank you once again for the in-depth analysis, and the multiple typos and grammar mistakes you've pointed out!
Have reviewed it HERE.
A very lovely story but I think the sad tag would be more fitting than drama as there is very little drama involved, but certainly plenty of joy and sadness intermingled.
An impactful story.
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Corrected that. Thanks.
There is always something, someone, at the end of everything. Let this story be a reminder that even Equestria will fall one day. And that much like the world in this one, our world shall end too. With our own Lighthouse keeper leaving much like this one. All things end......