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Angel Song has always had a hard knock life, and is struggling. Until she meets this amazing young colt that changes her life forever.
Song of Inspiration Concrete Angel - Martina McBride
Warning: May make you cry harsh tears, possible thoughts of Suicide or thinking about how to move on in life.
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Wow......I felt huge heartache at the climax of the story.
And here I thought this was going to be about the Weeping Angels
Nice little story with a bittersweet ending. I liked it, but it seemed a little rough at places. The story just didn't flow quite right. Still a good little story regardless. Good job.
4792652 Can you tell me where it is rough or what you mean by it? I'm a little confused.
4794803 yeah, sorry. The dialogue was just a little odd. Not bad, just off. As I said earlier, it didn't seem to flow like a normal conversation would. It's still understandable, but it could be better. I suppose having no previous friends to hold conversations with would do that though. Does that help?
4795399 What I was trying to do was kind of have it off, because Drawn is trying to keep his secret away from Angel. What I'm trying to say is that Drawn didn't want to freak Angel out with her knowing that he was an angel. The ending ties it all up basically what I was trying to do. Is that better, or do I really need to change it so it flows?
4795523 Yea, I can understand that. I can tell it was intentional, but it still reads a little oddly. You don't need to change it, as it doesn't detract from the story, but I just thought I'd throw in my thoughts.
4795645 Okay, thank you for your thoughts they are appreciated; they help me improve as a writer.
4791904 No, sorry.