The platitudes of insanity only give respite to the edgelords.
Big Mac is just an ordinary pony from Ponyville. He works at the family farm, Sweet Apple Acres. Keeping the peace at the farm can be a hassle at times, especially with the Cutie Mark Crusaders running around and his sister being a fundamental element of friendship. Though one day the Crusaders uncover something that changes everything.
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I am intrigued.
Twilight is going to freak out when she hears about this and I can't wait to find out what Applejacks reaction is going to be.
Erm... complete? Really?
I see that there's a sequel, but this seems like an abrupt place to stop...
Oh well. Not bad, but it could use some polish. The chapters are short and imagery is light. The transition from this secret magic place in the Everfree Forest to Sweet Apple Acres again happened with a single sentence, when a paragraph break would have worked better. Little things like that.
5662489 Well it's good to see that someone's still around to keep me up to task. I'd have to agree with your criticisms, the trouble to most of it is that I write in bursts, and stuff tends to get muddled. Not meaning to justify why it's that way, just explaining it. I'm trying to fix that issue, plus a whole host of others that are detrimental to my writing.