Damn...

Holy shit that was good.

"The Princess is dead, Jim."

Wow, I knew Pinkie Pie was a bit crazy, but I didn't expect anything like this.

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great entertaining storyline.

Me gusta d^_^b

Ladies and gentlemen, Pinkamena Diane Pie's mind never even entered the building.

>>2064620646

Thank you very much

>>2071320713

I don't get this reference.

>>2072020720

Thanks! Chapter 3 should be finished within the next day or two

>>2072520725

Lol

Great job! I my self did not see any mistakes.  Sounds like this should be good.

>>2073120731

Hey websterwall! How is it going!

Great thank you. This is some of the best fan fic I have ever read.

>>2074520745

Wow seriously? You aren't just saying that cause we are friends right?

>>2072820728

The refrence is from the original star trek.

Leonard "Bones" McCoy often said it to Cpt. Kirk when someone died.

I'm starting to think that "Twilight screws up a spell" needs to be it's own genre now. I'm looking forward to see how this all turns out and seeing if 15 years worth of possible questions get tied up. Biggest question probably being: How in the world did Celestia die?

Pinkamena showing up actually was something I expected considering how something so little as what happened in Party of One triggered the change in her. Although I wasn't expecting her to be so far gone but then again it is a time frame of 15 years to deal with instead of the matter of hours like before.

The ending caught me off guard, then again......the story would have ended there with Celestia using her magic to bring the 2 back to their own time.

And Sweetie Belle acting like a punk? That's a bit too much. Would have been more logical if she just ran away without any arson involved to make her character more realistic.

I'll keep an eye on this fanfic.

>>2082120821

There's more to it that what Spike knows. Remember, there's always two sides to a story. *wink*

Me gusta

want moar!

Great update. Although I am kind of surprised with how Harsh Rainbow Dash is in this tale. I mean I understand she finally acheived her dream of being in the Wonderbolts and all, but...

Also interesting situation that Sweetie-belle's in and I do wonder if Twilight and Rarity can clear her name.

Also I do wonder upon whether or not Rarity and Twilight can make it back into the present to avoid all of this.

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great tale.

>>2153321533

RD is a complex character even though she doesn't show it on the surface. The type of pride that she has is a terrible leadership quality, but loyalty is a great one. Right now, RD is in the middle of a loyalty conflict between her friends and the Wonderbolts. On one hoof, she could help her friends but then probably lose her position with the Wonderbolts, but on the other if she doesn't help her friends, they run the risk of never finding what they are looking for. She was acted a little harsh because deep down, she felt that if she distanced herself, they wouldn't rely on her as much, and then she could go back to the Wonderbolts without conflict.

But that's just my take on it.

I'm still experimenting with her character.

>>2153321533

Also, thank you. I'm having a lot of fun writing this.

I'm curious now what really happened to Sweetie Belle since she claims to be innocent for the arson and whatnot. She mentions another pony but not by name which seems to be a little odd. I have to admit it's nice to see that Twilight isn't the only pony who can have trouble with spells. Rarity is probably in for a bit of trouble just trying to get to Cloudsdale let alone trying to meet up with Scootaloo without getting her into trouble. Hopefully Fluttershy will be helpful in managing that.

Hopefully we can get back to Pinkamena and find out a little more on what exactly happened there.

15 years is a lot of time and so much can happen in that time frame...

I like where you are going with this story!

pinkamenia? you think this is bad or creepy or something? HA! one word my friends....cupcakes...there i said it

>>2385823858

Psh. Cupcakes is so 'last year.' Fimflamfilosophy's reading of it made it funny

>>2388423884

Thank you for your honesty. I will definitely try my best to make it flow better.

wow im liking this

Good story you've got here, I'm not really one for fan fiction, but you've managed to snag me. Reminds me of Deus Ex Human Revolution a bit with the atmosphere, Pinkamena bit reminded me of the film Misery. I'm interested to see where this goes, the meeting with Luna, how exactly the world is surviving in a constant state of deep winter and moonlight.

That said, the whole thing with Sweetie Bell seems a bit of a tangent. I know it's probably leading up to a big revelation about sisterhood and all that, but when she showed up, I really just skimmed the part where she was involved. It doesn't read well, the dialogue needs tweaking to make it less wooden, and maybe after the story is finished (because if there is one thing I have learned as a author it is to not get bogged down with details in the first draft because otherwise the story will never get completed) you can go back and make her part in the future Equestria seem more important alongside finding out all the other mysteries.

All in all, good read. I'll keep an eye out for updates on EQD.

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SUPER PONY MIND FUCK!!!!1

YES THERE IS A FUCKING PROBLEM!

woooo hold your horses there twi

bitch move

rares mom has been dead for how long???????

not cool bro *goes to finish reading chapter*

>>2390223902

Are you alright?

btw i believe the reference was the story "CUPCAKES"

DO NOT READ IT

>>2392323923

I have. It didn't bother me much. I'm NOT referencing Cupcakes though.

I'm liking this so far, and eagerly awaiting the Luna chapter. When will the next one be up?

>>2392623926

When it's done. Lol. I have a particularly busy schedule but I do make time for this. I'll try and devote as much time as I can to this.

Pretty interesting so far. Time travelling always offers a lot of potential.

Great job. this is def a great fanfic

so far i like where everything is going

soo... if im getting this right belle pulled a bank job?

nice.

but i do have one question

THE GREAT AND POWERFUL TRIXIE?

Damiit rainbow why did you have to pull a sonictrollboom

>>2395023950 More like tried to, and failed miserably. Anyways thanks! I'm glad you like it.

>>2395123951 She is pulling the strings. Just kidding. I don't really plan for her to be in it. Her presence wouldn't and anything to the story other than a distraction. Sorry.

This is Excellent! More please!

Thank you for that story, i don't usualy read sad fanfics, this one is my first ever (also, i'm french, sorry for my grammar) I only wonder.

-How celestia died?

-I feel like something terrible happened to sweetie belle, i mean, the responsible is probably that mare from the mayor office, who claimed to know her.

-Something happened to Spike to, but i can't guess what...

Keep up the good work.

I liked everything you wrote except for the Spike/Sweetie Belle exchange.  It seemed rushed and stilted.

You've got a good start to a story.  You've got the characters down well, and I appreciate the relationships between Rarity and Sweetie Belle.

I have only one immediate question from my current place of ignorance: Are all of the early scenes necessary?  I sincerely hope that the answer is yes -- that they'll show up again later in the story.

Thank you for writing!

>>2408824088

Absolutely. *wink*

You're a wonderful writer for details, and for the characters.  And you're excellent at cliffhangers.

I love the subtle touches -- the cold winter explained at the very end.

I realy can see pinkie like this after having 2 of her best friends dicepear for 15 years.

It's an enjoyable -- but very sad! -- story.  I appreciate the changes that you've made to the main characters.

*smile*  The story has picked up with this chapter.  It's wonderful.  

Thank you for writing it so far; I look forward to reading the rest of it!

A Sad tag? Ohhhhhhhhh BUCK... Trevor does not foresee this ending well... *Swalows hard* Well, one has already begun the story... INTO THE FRAY!

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

>>2071320713 XD HAY! You stole my line! XD That's EXACTLY what Trevor was thinking! XD

Anyhoof... Yeah, kinda wondered, but... Can Luna not raise the sun? Or if so, can she just not get it close enough or something? Hrmm... Well, only one way to find out... WORDS! PREPARE YOURSELF! ONWARD, TO GLORIOUS BATTLE, WITH NO REGRETS! (Too late)

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

...sorry twi your clestia is in another castle

... Okie Doki Loki then! Trevor has made his decision! He shall continue to read this fic as it updates! There aren't enough time-fics out there, so one shall continue to read!

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

>>2386923869 to you mate others still find it somewhat scary...i think dash deserved to die to be honest

im excited for everything you have to work off potentially here... keep up the good work!!

this alicorn is impressed by this fan fiction

I love this, and am waiting anxiously for another chapter :o hope I can sleep tonight

At least it's not the moon that's gone. If it was the moon that disappeared then there would be no way of returning to the past.

Anyway, on the fic itself, I think you've done an excellent job so far. The characterization is very good and believable. I'm uncertain about the lack of communication that you are giving your characters, but I'm all for willing suspension of disbelief. There are plenty of reasons that could be attributed to why nopony seems to be telling the full story right away.

NOTE: SPOILERS

The only thing I didn't particularly like is everything occurring with Sweetie Belle on the monorail. I see no reason why Twilight couldn't be there when Sweetie asked about her sister, and Sweetie's reasoning behind it, that being one of fear, seems a bit contrived. Maybe if it were delved into a little more.

That, however, is my only complaint. The entirety of the story is brilliant, and I love being able to see Sweetie Belle explored and characterized. Doesn't happen that often in fics or in the show. Keep up the good writing; I eagerly await more.

...Now I just need to figure out how to save this page or navigate this site >_>

What a very good story! Love it.

THAT DAMN CAT!!!

I have to quote The Doctor here, "What...What...WHAT!?!"

Like the story but Raainbow is acting a little harsh.....

I LOVE THIS STORY ITS AWESOME! CAPS FTW!

SO SAD!

Keep up the good work!

How does it feel to have your story disproved by canon?

I think when Rarity and Twilight back in their own time, the story continues with Sisterhooves Social...

>>2515625156

Check my blog.

You win 1,000,000 Internets. Awesome story, cannot wait until the next part! But Fluttershy demands you write it quicker (She said it, not me!)

>>2523625236 I've seen lots of discussion on this recently, and while the whole Rarity's parents thing is obviously going to disrupt a lot of fanfics, don't let it discourage you.  That's the risk we all take when a show is still being made, and it still makes a good "alternate universe" story.  More near and dear to my heart is the doubt that's come up about Dinky being Ditzy's daughter, but there have been a lot of reasoned argument about this as well, that mostly go like this:

Of course Dinky wouldn't have been at a sisters' event, because they aren't sisters.  Dinky was allowed to use a stand-in, lacking an actual sister (as was Sweetie Belle for that matter, since she was allowed to start the race with Applejack).  So, there's still some life in this one, and I will address what they did in a side story to my fanfic "My Funny Sister."

That said, I've also had to take the position that the background characters get thrown into scenes so haphazardly, that if you're going to write about them, you'll go mad trying to account for every appearance, and are better off being able to overlook the less prominent times, since they sometimes even contradict themselves.

>>2542225422

Thanks. I kinda wrote that right in between commercials while the show was still going on. It was panic but now I'm calm about it. And it really means a lot coming from you. I love 'My Funny Sister' and that was actually the reason I felt bad about the Dinky and Derpy thing.

I'm not too heavily invested in Dinky yet, since I could just remove the two references to a daughter without hurting the story, or just leave it alone, since I never referred to the daughter by name.  The story I'm planning does require it to be Dinky, though, so I may sit on that a while and see how this plays out, though I do have an idea of how to mitigate it if necessary.

I haven't actually read this fic yet, but it's on my reading list, and I'll give an appropriately pithy comment and (high, no doubt) rating when I get there.

Congrats on getting this posted at EqD!

>>2568725687

Thank you. Same goes for you.

This is the cutest history I have ever read in my life

This is up there with bittersweet

PSH. Cupcakes. Sure. This obviously has nothing to do with that story.

And Cupcakes was a good story, just a bit farged up.

MOAR PLZ SOON

Can't Wait till the next part :D

Ok, finally got to this.  Very well done, nice flow to the story, and it keeps me interested.  Very few grammar issues, to the point where I don't really notice unless I'm trying to find them.  A couple of issues that you could easily address in future chapters:

If Celestia had prohpesied about what happened, why don't more ponies know about it?

If the sun's really gone, how does Equestria get any heat, and what's reflecting light off the moon?  If it's just stuck on the other side of the planet, then presumably everyone could go there.

And one last quibble, one that affects many fanfics: I see a lot of people use the term "fur," which isn't really correct.  Fur is hair that sheds seasonally, so it's better just to use "hair" or "coat."

Top-notch work here, as you've really got me guessing on which way several plot points will go.

>>2958729587

#1 - Just cause she knows doesn't always mean she tells. ;)

#2 - As the show has described, the princesses control both the sun and the moon and not the rotation of the Earth, meaning the sun and moon do orbit around the Earth. Second, it was described that the moon would need to "make way" for the sun to rise, so I'm assuming that means that they always have to be on opposite sides. If this is the case, the moon would always be in a perpetual lunar eclipse, so that would mean that the moon would have to be its own light source in Equestria. As for the heat, since the moon would be its own light source, it would also have to emit a certain amount of heat on its own. That, added to the heat of the Earth itself, would keep Equestria from freezing over (at least for a while).

Yes yes I thought of that already. :)

#3 - Thanks for the correction on the fur though. I would have never noticed.

Thank you for reading! I'm really glad you enjoyed it.

>>2979229792 I had also considered the possibility that Equestria is flat, and the sun and moon just cycle in a circle beyond the horizon.

>>3000230002

In one of the stained glass windows of Celestia's throne room, there is an image of a globe. I think you can see it in the intro song.

>>3003730037 Uhh sorry to interupt on your conversation but the moon gets its light from the sun. The light that we see is just a reflection of the suns light. You know if you wanted to get technical ... if thats ok

>>3430534305 I know. It's just that based off of what we know from the show, (Our Earth =/= Equestria's Earth) that may or may not be their situation. Really, all the laws of physics in Equestria are open to interpretation.

Nice little story. Waiting for more.

Great update as this could lead into a reunion with the other elements of Harmony ?

I mean just how can Twilight reunite the Elements in a future like this ?

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great storyline like this one. as  I cannot wait to see what you come up within the next chapter.

great chapter

A great continuation. I can't wait to find out what Celestia's secret may be.

TO SHORT!!

WHY MUST ALL GOOD THINGS COME TO AN END????

>>3676836768 The chapter or the story? Cause I don't think I'm even halfway done with the story.

Woo, another update. -goes to read-

Gogo McSqueakers. Yay!

Yeshness! Another chapter! 8D Please keep up the excellent work! Trevor has SO many theories right now, and needs some of them ot be debunked, so that one can announce the rest of the possibilities!

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

whenever they're is a fic labeled sad and there's pinkie on the story I cry(not in full emotion mode but a few sniffs and 1 or 2 manly tears, even though I am a girl...), I hate seeing pinkie sad

nice but i am sad pinkie is some psyco mentaly ill person

c'mon the answer is right infront of you!

>>3723637236 Pardon?

Well-written and very touching.

Thank you for continuing the story!

Wow this prologue got me hook so I'll read the rest of it and good job of hooking people to your story

MOAR!!!!

What a great plot. Executed very well. I am looking forward to any updates! I can't wait to find out how this unfolds.

I love this fic!

I AM FOLLOWING THIS!

This is prob one of my fav fics. Right up there with Upheavel and My Little Alicorn ^.^

NOW ITS TIME FOR MOR PONY

Ands the bestest for last!

HOLY FUCKING SHIT GUACOMOLEEEEEEEEE !!!!

You have no rights to do that !! Absolutely. No. Rights.

I hate you...

...nice writting though. I'll be tired tomorrow, all that because of you.

yes enough said

Yeah, View #6000!