"The Prophecy of the Lions foretell that when the eyes are returned, and the ground is stained by the blood of kingdoms, The all seeing god shall return to claim the rule that was his." - Princess Celestia
Rainbow Dash. The awesome daredevil of Ponyville. Most days, she can be seen flying about high in the sky, without a care in the world. But her life is about to implode and come crashing down when her brothers visit town to tell her news of their mother, and give the young mare a jewel that their parents held most precious to them. But when the neighboring kingdoms of the Lions and Rocs begin invading Equestria, Rainbow begins thinking that her jewel may be the cause of the invasions and attacks upon the pony kind.
Chapters (5)
Dun dun dunnnnn!!!!
This story was great. There is just such a huge back story to this that I can't wait to see!
Both the structure of your writing and your plot-line were great.
I struggled to find many spelling errors. How many times did you re-read this before you posted it? Oh wait.. I can just ask you in 30 min. Cya in class!
This sir, is quite the amazing story
How does this story ONLY have 3 thumbs up? Come on people, this is gold on paper!
Crap.... Maybe I shouldn't be reading this on campus. I really don't want to start crying lol. Oh well.. Onward and upwards! Allons-y!!
Tears were in my eyes the entire flashback... This is just such a sad story. I just don't even know how to react...
One error
Though after about 15k words, you're bound to make a mistake.
“She was six years old. Your letting your anger get the better of you.
You're.. not your.
Keep up the great story, man. This is probably in my top 3 fav stories so far (based on quality/ storyline/ execution of plot)
Don't do it, Thundercloud. If I read that you do this next chapter I will call upon Pinkie to bring me into your world so I can kill you. Don't mess with Pinkie, you know that she can break the 4th wall at any time she sees fit.
You lied. You said I would cry during this chapter. >:o
I can't wait for the next to come out. :D
i find this premise interesting to say the least. ill read it later.
Hmm, interesting idea. I'll be reading this later.
PLLEEEEAAASSSSEEEE STORY DONT BE DEAD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! DOOOOONNNNNTTTT BEEEEEEEEEEE DDDEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAADDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Colour logic.