This isn’t a good night. I’m coughing every few minutes, Twilight’s in a foul mood, and we’re watching a Rarity-heavy episode. At least watching her transform Ponyville into something out of The Wizard of Oz is more interesting than her normal fashion antics.
Twilight throws a half-eaten apple at the TV. “Just once, Spike! Couldn’t you give her a normal gift just once?”
“I take it he gives her lots of stuff?”
“Tons. A week ago it was chocolates and ice cream, now it's a stupid dark magic spell book. Stupid Spike. Stupid stupid stupid…”
“Wasn’t he was just trying to help her?”
“Into an early grave, maybe. Ugh. Guess who had to clean up the whole mess?”
That’s clear enough from what’s happening onscreen. “How long did it take you?”
“Days. Almost every pony in town was right there too, begging us to work faster. Not Rarity and Spike though. No. Not them. Why watch their good friend work her tail off when they can make kissy-faces at each other on a park bench? Or wherever it is that they’re wasting time these days.”
This isn’t my first clue that Twilight has no romantic life. Now probably isn’t the time to bring it up. “They’re still dating? Even after that thing with the traveling writer?”
“I don’t get it either. One day they’re a couple, then they’re just friends, then they’re fighting… It probably doesn’t help that her parents give them flak. Rarity says they really want grandkids. If she marries Spike, they’ll be stuck waiting for Sweetie Belle to grow up.”
“How—”
“And I have no idea how their honeymoon would work; I don’t want to either.”
“I was just going to ask if they could adopt.”
“I guess. For now they’re dating 'in secret’, even though everypony knows. Every time she calls him her ‘friend’ I just want to scream.”
“I think you’re jealous.”
“Of what? The fighting? The useless gifts? No thanks.”
“It can’t be all bad.”
She sighs. “That’s still a whole lot of pain for a little crush.”
“I don’t think it’s a crush if they’re dating off and on. I’m pretty sure that counts as a relationship.”
Her ears fold back and she looks down at the couch. “Do you think he’ll move out?”
“And in with her?”
“If they ever get married, he’s not going to want to live with me anymore.”
“Would it really be so bad, having the library all to yourself?”
“Spike’s been with me forever. I’ve seen him every day since he hatched. He’s like… He’s like my little brother.”
“Would you want to room with Shining Armor now that he’s married?”
“Eww, no.”
“So what’s the difference? If Spike moves out, you’ll just have to deal with it.”
“But how? Don’t you have a hard time living here all by yourself?”
“By myself? How often do you drop in again?”
“I’m serious.”
“I don’t really get lonely. There’s always TV and the internet.”
“And studying, right?”
“Right, and studying.”
“I guess I do have my books, and my friends…”
“Don’t forget coming here to watch your own life on instant replay.”
“Speaking of which, we need to watch one more—”
All the lights go out. A second later, my next door neighbor’s drunken cursing filters through the walls. I stumble my way to the kitchen and peek out the window. Everything, save for a few distant city lights, is pitch black.
“Looks like the power is out for the entire block.”
She’s hovering in the air next to me with her horn aglow. “When does it come back on?”
“Whenever somebody from the power company comes around to fix it. It’ll probably be a couple hours at least.”
“Oh well. Even if we can’t watch the show, I can help you get things set up.”
“What things?”
“Your emergency supplies. I’ll give you light so you can get your candles. Oh, do you have more than one flashlight? Could I borrow a battery? I want to do some experiments on one back home.”
I step away from the window and sit down at the kitchen table. “I don’t have any emergency supplies.”
“What?”
“Sure it’s dark, but that’s okay. They’ll get the power back on eventually.”
She flies around the dark room and lands on the table. Her glowing horn illuminates her face more than anything else, and she’s aghast. “No emergency supplies?”
“So?”
She stomps across the table and leaps into the chair next to mine. “When are you going to start taking care of yourself?”
“Hey, that’s—”
“It’s everything! You’ve been coughing for weeks! Aren’t you worried about that?”
“I got some cough syrup the other day. What more do you want?”
A hoof prods me in the stomach. “You’re loosing weight, too.”
“How would you know?”
“How can you not?”
“Back off, just back off. I thought we were done with you badmouthing every choice I’ve ever made.”
She sighs. “This is different. This is your health we’re talking about.”
I cough right then. Oh the irony.
“I’ll get it checked out.”
She touches me again, this time on the shoulder. In my experience a hoof is about as comforting as a baseball bat, up until now at least.
“Please, Jake, please really do this. I don’t want anything to happen you. I… I care about you.”
I’m glad she can’t see my face. Whatever my expression is, I’m sure it looks stupid. For starters, we never touch each other, not since that time I touched her horn and almost lost a tooth. Besides, when did Twilight go soft on me? What happened to the days when she just complained about her show, ate my food, and left?
“I will, Twilight. I’ll make an appointment tomorrow morning.”
“Promise?”
“Promise.”
Hes going to die isn't he
And so it begins...
Awwwwww...and so Twilight's romantic intents start to come to the forefront.
A nice, subtle way to handle it.
Where was the equestrian games portion?
It's called a friendship, Jake. Better get used to it... where Twilight comes from it's as common as air or water.
4648611 Or as common as the atoms making up said friendship
4648586 Well, your just a bag of sunshine.
^^^ Is titled "equestria games." contains no viewing of equestria games.
Still Twi being the caring girl friends is cute. this is such a fun fic.
And so... it begins.
not bad, i hope he die not likeGodKiller55 thinks, this would ruined it for me, but thx that you go a little bit in the direction.
Is Twilight the reason he's sick? Some disease from Equestria he can't have any kind of resistance to because he's never been exposed to it?
4648586
Rule of drama.
He probably has some dramatic ailment like cancer or AIDS or cancerous AIDS.
He thinks he's fine, then BOOM cliche drama action and probably forced attempts at feels and romance.
#WorstCaseScenario
4648603
4648649 power went out, remember?
>Looks at the story tag and notices Romance
God fucking damnit.
A Romance subplot doesn't sound the greatest idea for this story now that I think of it.
The series started with Twilight's commentaries about her "documentary" episodes, and some of us came for it.
EDIT:
Oh wow look at how many people care about my comment. People must really love this JakeXTwilight ship. Must be their OTP if I'm getting 7 of them.
But then I look at some of the repliers' favorites and see they also like to ship other human OCs with Twilight.
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lol whatever. hate my comment if it makes you feel better.
4648811 could have waited for the power to come back
Jake works with vintage refrigerators and got mesothelioma from blue asbestos
4648824
The tags been there since the start, all aboard the romance train CHOOO CHOOOO!
4648824 speak for yourself please.
4648824
My thinking as well.
I'm wondering where those days went too.
Wait...
damn dude gets a cold and half the comments are about shipping them the other half are declaring him dead-man walking.
5 bucks says Jake is the next Augustus Waters.
4648586
Yep, he's a goner.
4648975
Couldn't agree more
4648824 Speak for yourself, I came here for the romance. It's about time that it began.
4648824
All I can say is see the note in the description; I don't really want to elaborate more for fear of spoiling something
Haha there's an ad for 2 free emergency blankets with something else at the end of this chapter...
4648647 I'm just one big fucking ray of sunshine aren't I
Eh, if this turns into a Lifetime movie where he has supercancer and slowly dies I'm probably gonna drop it. He could just have a persisting flu or infection though.
Calling it weight loss and coughing that's lung cancer right there.
4649105 Indeed.
4649100
Alright, but honestly I'm not gonna care about the romance. I've already said that really.
4648824 I couldn't care less about whether there's a romantic subplot. I just dislike commentators trying to direct the flow of a story.
Oh god, he's fuckin got cancer or something, doesn't he? Is this gonna be one of those "Love confession after you're on the deathbed" type of deals?
4649438
good for you.
But really though. After 2 years on being this site, I've seen so many HiE fics with HumanXTwilight shipping fics pass and go by that it's all just "Oh good, another one to add to the pile."
That's really just my problem honestly. Built up repetitiveness of the same thing over and over. And like I said before, I'm just gonna ignore the romance stuff if it'll stay as a subplot thing and focus on the commentaries that Twilight makes with Jake, but if it starts to get into my face I'll just go find another casual fic..
4649489
Pftahaha. That's way too cliche.
4649495 To be honest, that's all you really can do. I guess it helps that my main turn-offs for a story are mechanical errors instead of content.
My thoughts of this story(PRETTY DAMN GOOD)
4648949
I didn't really see that until one of my comments got 9 dislikes. I'm getting the itchy feeling that these pack of shippers are sorta rabid.
4649505 I know that, but it's starting to look like that's what's happening here. Either that or he's got pneumonia or something, and he'll be just fine. (Which is also a very likely scenario.)
4649516
Mechanical errors? As in parts of the story that contradict with each other?
4649528 That irks me too, but I meant more along the lines of spelling, grammar, and punctuation.
4649530
Oooh right. Those stories can be bad. Especially when you find that story that has a really good concept that you come to love, but then when you read you start to despair that the author isn't doing a very good job with his grammar and stuff and it just ruins the ride.
That's one of the worst things that can happen to you on this site.
4649542 Definitely. That's why I try to point a lot of inexperienced authors towards fixing up their writing.
4649554
Yeah, but sometimes I also point them to editors. Some people here would like to do that to and share the glory. I usually find that other people will point out more mistakes than you see in your own work.
4649576 Yeah, I have a guy that looks over my own stuff for that very reason. I rarely miss things, but I'm not perfect.
Why do I get the impression that this caugh thing will be something really serious? Like life-threatening-uncurable-deadly-disease serious?
4649590 not even published books are perfect, I have seen lots of 'the the' 'at at' 'too too' and so forth in published novels. I even saw the same paragraph repeated right after itself before.
4649495 out of all the romance stories i've read on this site, I have found the humaxtwilight ocxtwilight ones to be the best. it's the human/oc/fluttershy ones that make me cringe. i'm not saying there are no bad h/ocxtwilight fics and i've read several dry ones. but I usualy find the best story authors use twilight. I have also seen several bad RD ones. I rarely ever see AJ, pinkie, or rarity ones however. or atleast not ones where they are the mane romance ship.
would really like to read a few pinkiexhuman/oc ships.
as for rabid? *takes out a can of whipped cream and sprays it in his mouth* Rawr!
4649730
I've had a book...stop, mid sentence.
Not in the sense a word or a paragraph was missing, the whole...latter half of the book just wasn't there.
Turns out there'd been a printing error :-P
4649966 they printed half a book?
oh come on, stupid cliffhanger whyd you have to be invented now i dont know what he has but im gonna go with worst case scenario and say he has cancer of some form