What if you could get anything you wished for? Well, you'll never find out now.
Who leaves these genies lying around anyway?
Written for the Most Dangerous Game Contest, mostly to toy around with the 2nd person perspective prompt.
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You'll find, my friend, that in the gutters of this floating world, much of the trash consists of fallen flowers.
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Very cute little story. I feel you captured what it might be like in Pinkie's noggin quite well.
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Thanks!
I think I put myself in that state of mind a little too long. Not sure if that's healthy.
I wonder how those genies would react to the classic "I wish you would not grant this wish" paradox...
Eh, they've probably heard it before.
In any case, an enjoyable story of Pinkie forced to be un-Pinkie. Thank you for it, and good luck in the judging.
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I actually haven't heard of that paradox myself, hah.
Thanks for reading my story!
I found it to be a little disorienting to read at first, but then you revealed that the character (and the narrator, too!) was Pinkie Pie, and proceeded to do a seriously good job of portraying her and what might be going through her head.
I think the ending might have been a little more effective if there was a time skip followed by "You tried." As it is, there's still the possibility that Pinkie succeeded in not summoning all of the genies.
I liked this story, especially that comment about eating a ton of sugary treats to calm down. Good luck in the contest!
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I came up with the idea for the intro first, but actually wrote that chapter last. After finishing chapter 2 and getting in the groove, I began to realize, "this little prank... might not be as funny as it was in my head." I decided to do it anyway as an experiment, to see if it would succeed or fail. (probably the latter)
As for the ending, the intended joke was to switch from "stay perfectly quiet" to "stay perfectly still." Maybe I should've emphasized that more in the dialogue, since it wasn't clear enough. My fault.
Thanks for reading, and the criticism is much appreciated!
Goofy and cute.
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thanks!
RIP lmao
I love the red herring you set up with the “OC” tag and the suggestion of Anon in Chapter 1, when it turns out you were actually Pinkie and the genie was the OC
Edit: Camphor also qualifies. Still a pretty genius misdirection.