(2nd Person Romance Story starring stoner "you" and Twilight Sparkle)
It was the night of the Harvest Moon Music Festival when you met Twilight Sparkle, a lovely mare, just after a little fun to offset all the stress in her life. You hit off really well with her and you can both feel a spark, but you wonder what you did wrong when you wake up in your hotel room with some missing memory and Twilight nowhere to be seen.
Author's Note: Alright people, let's get this out of the way. Clover. Yes, it is pretty much marijuana in my story. Coffeebean was the one who came up the concept and I'm using it for my story. It's not just there for fun, it will have an impact on relationships with multiple characters. Second off, this story will have a very sensitive matter at the heart of the story. I can't tell you what, simply because I hate spoiling a story. But remember when I said this is going to be an emotional rollercoaster? Think of one of those super coasters that have like sixty loops and spends half the time upside down. But I assure you, it will still feel like one of my stories, having happy, funny, sad, and romantic parts to it.
Pretty good.
I'm pretty sure the 'stoner' role will fit half of the worlds populace that read this
bravo
Any idea when the next chapter will be up? This is fantastic!
This was fucking hilarious, it was smart, it was well written, it had good grammar, and it had great situational comedy. I love the choice in music as well as the portrayal of two stoner ponies as well as the whole Hunter S. Thompson reference. I hope the rest of this is just as funny. Need MOAR!!!
I bet Twilight is confused as all hell, SNAKES!
That or she thinks we/Smokey did it to her, in which case she's probably
I like this. I will await patiently for more.
I just finished watching Fear and Loathing again when I came across this. You could not have had better timing if you tried.
more MORE, damn creeper i love your work and after the one with applejack i have been waiting ages for this one and i love it so far
Also... if Dead Dragon is a reference to a similarly-named techno artist... you win my love.
>:3
I bet Twi said something like:
"Enough is enough! I have had it with these motherbucking snakes on this motherbucking chariot! " while in the taxi
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Heh, Danke.
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It may be a little while... The next chapter will be a little long. Maybe half or 3/4 the length of this.
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Thanks for all the love, it's great to hear. I just hope everyone can stand the emotional rollercoaster I have planned... >.>
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You're almost right. There's another detail to it that I'm not spoiling.
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Hopefull, I'll have it next week. I have a Biological Anthropology paper I need to write. >.>
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I could have posted it while you were watching Fear and Loathing.
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Thank you for reading! All this praise just wants me to write more, like right now.
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It is. :3
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Lol. Bloody snakes on this bloody plane. :P
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I'm hoping for more Fear and Loathing quotes/references. Like, I'm pretty sure it was either mescaline or LSD that made twilight go into "It's a goddam reptile zoo" mode.
Excellent work as usual my good highly-explosive chap. Please continue with the third chapter.
20586 I'm not experienced in Secon-Person perspectives. Only first and third.
My best being Omniscent style works. I applaud you in being able to incorporate the reader into the work.
But i'm no stoner, so i ain't know shit about nothin'.
Okay, just got done with the archive binge. Think I'm all caught up with your stuff.
Wow. Just, wow. This is really, really good. Not just this story, but the entire series. You've got a knack for setting up a realistic premise, tossing a few characters in, and making something really enjoyable to read. I mean, I tend to skim when you start getting really intimate, but, man, you're good at this.
Great job, can't wait to read your Fluttershy story.
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LSD. He took the blotter acid while in the car and started tripping more as he got further into the hotel.
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Uhh... You mean third. Prologue, Chapter 1, THEN Chapter 2. I got a plot diagram set up and have written out some of the events.
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Heh, thanks. I actually used first person omniscient for the longest time and it worked out pretty well. Second person, however, has taught me how to narrate a story without a real story teller.
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Thanks man. If I get any more praise, I'm going to need a bigger head. And just for you, and anyone else reading the comment section, I'm going to let you all in on the premise for my Fluttershy fic. Here goes: You're a romantic novelist staying in Ponyville to get into the setting of your latest book. You and Fluttershy get to know each other more after a chance encounter at the library and really hit things off. You both even like to write. The twist? Fluttershy writes more... erotic material.
It's always the quiet ones. :P
Holy dickballs, this was AWESOME.
Seriously my favourite fic right aufter "My little Dashie". And that only because I shed a manly tear on it.
It is just SO well written and feels SO intimate I can't help but smile at every other paragraph, either because it is hilarious or because it is just so cute.
You, sir, are made of 60% awesome and 50% literary skill, making you 110% cool.
Keep this up!
*brohoof*
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xD I knew there was a reason I watched you.
*hugs the Gent Creeper*
I read this while i shampooed my hair with herbal shampoo.
Three bags of clover… Two sheets of Tokey’s blotter acid… A quart of vodka… Bottle of hard-cider… Ten pellets of mescaline…Wait. No, nine pellets.
Fear and Loathing in Las Vegas – Wikipedia
I see what you did there!
I love how you draw people into the protagonists view point. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Lmaoshtmsfoaidmt or laghing my ass off so hard that my sombreraro fell off and I dropped my taco!!
this is such a good story plot,
cant wait for more
take youre time for the story
Bloody good job on this mate, can't wait for more! Stoned Twilight was hilarious, hell the humour in general was fantastic. The characterizations were all awesome with the stoners reminding me of some of my mates and Twilight being..Well Twilight! All in all smashing job!
Another well-written chapter. Keep 'em coming.
Damn it, now I want another chapter NOW!!!
Stop making such entertaining stories, you're making the rest of us look bad. That being said, I love the canon universe you and Coffeebean have created because it's fun, well written and doesn't subscribe to the norm. For one thing your OC's aren't whiny annoying pissants who get shipped with the obvious
or Gary/Mary Sues. Their pretty consistent and don't come off as intrusive and their interactions with established characters seem natural. I think I speak for everyone who enjoys both you and Mr. Coffeebean's work when I say thanks for taking the time to entertain us.
As for the film version would be directed by Edgar Wright(Hot Fuzz, Scott Pilgrim, Shaun of the Dead) and Smokey should be played by James Franco from Pineapple Express. Emma Stone as Twilight Sparkle and Nick Swardson as Tokey because we need to hate him when we first see him so that when our protagonist decides to beat the shit out of him the audience can laugh and not feel bad for the character.
Peace Out, dude.
Not...updating...FAAAST ENOUGH!!!!!
Sir, I am yet again amazed at your ability to convey emotions without bludgeoning your readers with cheesy drama. Sure, your storylines might somtimes be a little bit clichée, but really, after "Freudian Slip" I realized what still made it so unique and likeable: You achieved what so many cheesy TV-Shows have failed to do for years now - you have compelling, fleshed-out characters who react believeably to dangerous and unfamiliar situations.
You really hit that soft spot that lets me care about the charater's motivations and fears. Very, VERY well written and with some true weight to it. I wonder how the two of them get out of this mess...
Anyway, for the next time: Write faster. Or hire trained monkeys to help you. Or something. The waiting is killing me every time.
sooooo goood.... i really like your angle... keep it up please~!
Once again, you churn out quality stuff like an assembly line of good fanfiction. Simply astonishing.
I like the complimentary yet similar interaction between the narrator and Twilight. Believable and adorable. I look forward to more.
Also, "tetrahydroclovinol". I don't know if I want to applaud or punch you in the face for that one.
Today, just a simple MOAR!
I love this fic. Plain and simple ^_^
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Applaud him, seriously. He has a direct line to the funny-section of my brain. Those little details really help in the worldbuilding and make for an interesting read, having me constantly chuckling or at least smiling over all the silly little details.
Really masterfully done. Can't wait for more updates, although I am still hoping you announce something about a sequel to "Love Triangles". I mean we saw them in Swing running from the shark, and now we know they have a sleepover with Spike. It kinda makes me think about what Applebloom said to the lifeguard in Epilogue...
me gusta
very very good
I just wanted to say thanks for all the feedback and love you guys have been giving me. I'll try to get a new chapter up as soon as possible, but I'm thinking about doing the next chapter of My Little Serial Killer first now. I've got something awesome planned.
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Don't worry about it dude, it's about quality not quantity. Not to mention with all the high profile games coming out this month, your fans can find something to do to pass the time between updates.
After a bit of thinking, the only, ONLY criticism that I have is that this is the earliest openly admitted "I Love You" yet in TGC's stories. I'm not saying it's bad, but any earlier and you'd be running into bad romance fanfic trope territory.
(Of course, in the situation presented, the main character might have said it first and foremost to calm down Twilight and reenforce stability to the situation, while he may have felt it too and let it slip out to help)
Do I smell a story for Spike??? I don't know, but it would be pretty damn good...
Gah. So good. Great work, as always.
Also, Spike story hint? Hmm.
Holy shit, this could very well be one of the BEST fics I've ever read. Especially love the FLILV reference in the prologue. I'm definitely liking the imagery, plus you made sure to follow the #1 rule of a second-person story (always leave the character description ambiguous). I wish I had more hands, cause 2 thumbs up doesn't even begin to describe it.
Loved the part with the doctor. Everything they said was something he hasn't had happen before.
personally i want cellestia to find out and just tear the shit out of smokey - or tokey
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She should send Tokey to the moon. Everything is really his fault. Smokey is innocent. Only thing he did wrong was be friends with a jackass.
awsome this is going to be a interesting story
i'm not a stoner but i seen alot of movies, book's or seen other's to understand what's happening
hard for what just happend 
and now i'm laughing
keep up with the good work
a really good story i'll be traking it and i'll be a fav
You amazing person! Applause from me, I look forward to the next chapter.
Also, GODDAMMIT TOKEY!!! TO THE MOOOOON WITH YOU!
and the herd is pleased, you may live...for now.
And now, I sign off.
Godspeed you magnificent bastard-BlazingShadowBrony