I am Princess Cadence's Twin sister and I'd like to be an author here but my stories are kinda short
Twi has new girl problems. She has an easy shot at popularity and an even easier one as a former gloried outcast like trixie. Twi's boyfriend is dead and she still needs a date for the dance. Encircled in a world of drama Twilight learns the meaning of friendship, love, honesty, generosity, optimism, and loyalty.
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Well... this was rather hard to read, dood. When I read about Lisa (I guess a character Rarity and Sunset were reading about?) I honestly thought this was a trollfic, dood.
It might be my attention span being so limited but I could barely follow it, dood.
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I understand that when Sunset was reading a story it was quite difficult to follow, how do you wish the story to be changed so it is easier to read?
4589533 I can't fault you on short chapters because your author's description states you prefer to write them rather small, dood. I'd say get someone to look at it for you before you publish it because there were quite a few errors like double spacing and periods not attached to anything, dood. Other than that... not really anything else I'd change.
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Honestly too many capitalized words in the middle of sentences, odd spacing that makes it hard to read, A bit OOC if you ask me. I don't think Sunset is the type to say darling. I also figure that the death of twi's bf would be a big deal but it sure don't feel that way.
It's just a hard fic to read and the way it's all laid out only makes it worse. I wont downvote but trust me when I say I didn't like it.
That 'funny' story sounds utterly horrifying
I really hope that this is meant to be funny because it is to me
More chapters D: !!!