The Friendship Games are over, magic in the human world is once again under control (sort of), and Sunset Shimmer is looking forward to a nice, relaxing celebration with all her friends, both old and new.
Too bad she ends up stuck on repeat; living the same night over and over with no idea why and even less idea how to make it stop.
Forced to watch her closest friends live out the same mistakes again and again, Sunset must find a way to break the cycle before she herself breaks down... but is the solution as simple as it first appears, or is the wild Equestrian magic stirring in her soul a sign of something more?
Coverart compiled by my actual waifu (hands off, Sentry!) MelloReflections.
Chapters (7)
Pinkie's long party name was a bit more descriptive than light-hearted, but the dialogue between rainbooms and activities with shadowbolts were really characterful, pleasant reading, quite succinct too. I can understand Flash not wanting to date a pony from another world, and Sunset still being angry. Really like this so far.
This thing! I remember this thing!
Interesting happenings ahead, I think.
Shit's already about to get real, and it's fucking amazing.
Fantastic start! I'm really looking forward to what happens next.
So a Groundhog Day fanfic? Sounds interesting. I hope things will be okay with Flash and Twilight, that seemed sudden.
Oh boy, this won't end well.
An intriguing concept. Tracking!
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Glad you're enjoying it so far!
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I don't know if you've seen it, but 'this thing' remembers you too, and gave you a shout-out,
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I can say with complete honesty that there will not be nearly as much gore or as many changelings.
No promises about the weather vane,
Re: Groundhog Day; you might get a kick out of my wife's first attempt to troll me when I asked for cover art,
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Hold onto your butt; it's about to get even real-er!
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Glad to hear it! Your avatar is adorable, btw,
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I promise nothing,
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Hey, we can't let you have the only fic where Sunset gets in a bit of kickpunching,
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Welcome aboard!
7481305 My butt has been held on to.
That's a bad touch...
So, about a month ago, over the span of roughly a week, I read a story that was upwards of a hundred fifty chapters. The story in question was Warewolves' A Little Loopy. I've linked it for you there. It was a story about Sweetie Belle getting stuck in a time loop and attempting to get out before she goes insane. It was a good read, but the reason I bring this up is because this story seems to be about time loops as well.
The point of this comment is as follows; I'll get around to reading this at some point, but as for now, I can let it develop.
It is doing very well. I like this.
OOOOOHHHH SNAP. this is off to a roaring start!
wait a minute.
*levitates in a bag of unidentifiable snack foods*
Proceed!
Sunset flies off the handle (as usual), socks Flash in the face, learns he's innocent, and he's the one comforting her. Then they have a moment of being incredibly cute together. And some people absolutely hate this guy.
Hmm... Sunset really gunned that cycle. interesting to see how that interaction turned out, and boy despite potential reliefs, I smell tense things in the future here.
Awesome new chapter. Haven't read a sunset shimmer story this good for some time
Though we're only two chapters in, I already have a very high view of this story. You've done an excellent job with characterization, and your writing style is excellent.
Out of curiosity, which video game did Flash quote?
The characterisation is so on point with this; really curious as to where this story is going
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Ah, I haven't read that one yet. If you're interested in time loop stories, two classic ones 'round these parts are The Best Night Ever by Capn_Chryssalid and Hard Reset by Eakin. Both of these have been around for a while and are complete, so you wouldn't have to wait,
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Holy crap; I thought you were dead!
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Well I like him... it's kind of hard to hate Flash after you meet Vincent Tong; dude is so smooth he almost stole me from my waifu,
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Glad you're all enjoying so far!
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Oh... I actually just sorta made that part up... uh... let's see here... he got it from playing, uh... World of Wormcraft! Yeah, that's it,
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Fun fact; Vincent Tong also voices Prince Blueblood and Garble The Dragon (no relation to one Spike The Dragon, one assumes), two more characters that, as far as I'm aware, are generally not well-loved. I was going to use a big, smiley emote here, but thinking about it, I'm not sure if it's appropriate to have smiles for hate.
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I was aware; in fact my plan for the next time I see him at a convention is to insist that I have to give him a hug but I'm not allowed to tell him why,
7484293 In that case, I must compliment you on a good line!
Poor Flash, always getting the short end of the stick. While I'll always support Sunlight, the guy deserves someone.
Holy shit, you actually published this?
I didn't know!
(And by that I mean I don't pay attention to what anyone is doing, even the people I supposedly follow.)
I know I told you this before, but this part makes me really happy.
Yes! YES!
Bad. Ass.
Sunset: *punches Flash in the face*
Flash: "That was awesome!"
I'm hooked! You write the characters so well and details are short, but vivid. Can't wait to see what happens next!
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"Mean Girls" senses tingling.
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It only been like, three days, hoss. You're still on the ground floor as far as I'm concerned,
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*Twilight and Sunset stand side by side, regarding Flash Sentry from across the room*
Twilight: Handsome...
Sunset: But dumb...
Both: ... Acceptable.
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Good to see you, and glad you're enjoying so far!
And then a step to the right!
7489656 Put your hands on your hips!
It begins...
Heeheehehehe, hahahahaha, AAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!
Huehuehue~!
I'm excited.
So, the loop begins... I'm hyped for the next chapter.
7489682 And bring your knees in tight!
So it begins. I wonder how Sunset will handle things this time around? What will she do differently and what will be the eventual right thing to do?
I haven't not noticed this. ;)
Just will be some time before I set aside a good many moments to read it. Which, I suppose, has an added benefit of allowing more chapters to drop in the meantime.
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*slides over a box of popcorn*
you sound more hyped than me. OOH this is gonna be fun. how will this loop go?
Rocky Horror Picture Show. Put your hands on your hips and bring your knees in tight.
7489691 but it's the pelvic thrust really drives you insane!
Huh, so it's that kind of time loop.
Damn, that's just damn good.
WE HAVE ENTERED AN ENDLESS RECURSION OF TIME.
Man, I love time loop stories! This one's no different; I'm already hooked and waiting for more.
The descent into madness begins...
Round and round she goes, where she'll stop, only the author knows.
You're doing a good job with the time transitions. It confuses the reader, exactly as it should, but for only a moment before what's going on clicks in, just like how it's working for Sunset.
Looking forward to seeing just what antics the increasingly frustrated Sunset will get up to.
She's handling this well so far, and giving Calmly and Rationally Explain The Situation a go. Will have to wait until next time to see how it goes over.
Also!
I love little touches like these, just makes the characters feel human.
That song, when I looked at the title of the chapter I just so was going to call it.
so ya, called it!
God I love Rocky Horror, even if it is an extremely weird movie. Even with what dubious context the movie offers, the Time Warp scene is a big ball of WTF.
...oh, right, the story! I'm placing my bet on Sunset having to stop PonyTwi from breaking up with Flash. (Not really, but hey, why not?)
Ice cream? The best solution to ever broken and/or miserable hearts. By the way, I'm eating ice cream now.
IT BEGINS!
...Actually, if I'm reading this right, the loop is a lot shorter than I thought it would be. Just wondering, how much time does Sunset get per iteration?
Props for having Sunset try to explain what's going on right away.
Really, after what these girls have been through, just going: "Guys, weird magic stuff again!" should be enough to get them all onboard.
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) make at least a token appearance.
Glad you're on board, bubby! Don't worry, I'll make sure the Queens (you know who I mean,
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ENDLESS TIME,
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Wait, I'm supposed to know what now? (
Glad you like the 'loop-reset' transitions; that's exactly what I was aiming for with them,
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First time I watched Inspiration Manifestation and Rarity said the name of the ice cream I ran to the kitchen and made a bowl of Stewart's french vanilla with Cracklin Oat Bran mixed in, and HOLY CRAP was it delicious,
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We tried to convince our drama advisor to let us do a production of RHPS for the senior musical in high school,
We ended up with Little Shop of Horrors,
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... Like, just because, or are you using it as comfort food too?
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Yeah, the loop is just the one evening... maybe something like 7pm to Midnight, so about five hours? The exact amount isn't super-important to the plot.
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I know, right? I love that one episode of Stargate SG-1 where O'Neill tells everyone he saw and talked to Daniel (whom they all consider dead) and everyone just stares as him.
O'Neill: You guys don't think I'm crazy?
Carter: Well to be fair, Sir, with all the strange things we've encountered over the past few years, this doesn't really seem that far outside the realm of possibility.
Teal'c: ... I too have seen Daniel Jackson.
O'Neill: You did? Why didn't you say anything?
Teal'c: Why did you not?
O'Neill: ...
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Right. In retrospect that makes sense, I just sorta assumed she would have like a whole day. Not sure what gave me that impression.
Anyway, given what I know Sunset is going to have to do to get out of this mess, she'll definitely need to put those five hours to good use. Still, I'm sure you know what you're doing.