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Aaaand Twilight died, the end.
What? It goes on?
Okay, here's my review.
Many of the dialogue or examples weird people out that are here to read clop. They might be okay for a troll-fic but you CAN be funny without ruining the mood too much.
Also, describe the typical day of Equestria instead of just mentioning that. What if it is typical to have chocolate rain every two month?
Knowing Twilights tendencies from last chapter makes me wonder as to what Twilight did when she watched Spike's naughty videos...and if that dragon maybe was present at that time, willingly or not.
Now the good:
Aside from the weird comparisons, the sex-scene was kind of okay. Nothing too special again, as it lacked length (four foot's not enough, damn it!).
Can't think of much else sadly. See you next chapter.