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Nyes b0ss
Phew...first chapter of a story. Well, here we go. The negative comes first so you can skip it and go to the good part at the end.
You never mention where the whole thing takes place. Knowing where Twilight lives I can imagine it to be in the library but despite it having two floors and a bathtub, nothing was mentioned really. While I have little problems with futa-Twilight (and who know who else is a futa too), there is also little mention as to why they are that way in the fic. You see none of them in the show have anything dangling between their legs.
Also, why did you name your OC Bathsponge? Rainbowbob is a fan of sponges, I'm sure he wouldn't have minded.
Now for what you did good: Well, despite it being vague, seeing and probably feeling the sponge you gave to somepony else sounds like an interesting gift to have. Not sure how to use it non-sexually, but no one says that cutie-marks can't revolve around that.
I also like the idea of Twilight regularly jacking off to her friends and princess (although that only is okay in fiction).
Overall...while I have little problem with the fetish, it kind of lacked something. There were good points but with a little more polish it could have been truly enjoyable. Also, Bathsponge is a quickshot! Even Twilight (who had started earlier) finished later!