Well there weren't any glaring grammatical errors, but there were a lot of little mistakes. The story feels a little fast paced but I'm wanting to see what happens next so good job and I can't wait to read more!
Looking good. I don't usually have problems with spike/rarity shipping as they seem to fit into that category even in the show itself so I'll keep an eye on this one.
Its not marked romantic but its not marked dark its just..... sad....... what the hell am i getting myself into and wow is rarity being extra critical about everything, good news though its done in a way that doens't make it seem OOC a bit snobish but i'll live......... im still afraid
505289 Well know it says romance and tragedy so yay............. i guess. Fuck it at least it says romance i'll assume the tragedy will be played through well and again that summary
in the description change "to" to "too"
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Thanks, eveytime I write this it's like 1 am so any mistakes, I am sorry for.
Well there weren't any glaring grammatical errors, but there were a lot of little mistakes. The story feels a little fast paced but I'm wanting to see what happens next so good job and I can't wait to read more!
Looking forward to the next chapter. Chapters are quite short, but they got my attention. Looking forward to next part./
MOAR!
Looking good. I don't usually have problems with spike/rarity shipping as they seem to fit into that category even in the show itself so I'll keep an eye on this one.
501936 just trying to help.static4.fjcdn.com/comments/+_61a8ce1ccc9f1173f54e62d7706e3da3.png
Its not marked romantic but its not marked dark its just..... sad....... what the hell am i getting myself into and wow is rarity being extra critical about everything, good news though its done in a way that doens't make it seem OOC a bit snobish but i'll live......... im still afraid
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I tried to chande the description because I have BETTER ideas for the story... hehehehehe
505289 Well know it says romance and tragedy so yay............. i guess. Fuck it at least it says romance i'll assume the tragedy will be played through well and again that summary
um...more please
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I'm writing some now
still got me
First thing I notice. Some of the phrasing is awkward; and there are a few problems with punctuation, specificially around quotation marks.
So ponies get violent when it comes to baked goods?
So...there are dildos on the walls?
I need to read MOAR MOAR and MOAR!
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This makes Spikey Wikey sound mature.
runny toast and crunchy juice? WTF is going on over in that kitchen?
opposite day?!
4322410 it's sweetie belle's cooking, it makes the laws of physics cry