The Best of Enemies

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Because of a small mishap, Diamond Tiara and Applebloom must work on an school project together.

What will come of putting this unlikely duo into a pair?

A trade and collaboration with BubblyBathTub to help with their writing skills. They also made the Coverart, so a big thanks to them!

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Arkan0id

Arkan0id #1 · Jun 19th, 2014 · · ·

Nice story! Liked, favorited, and I'll feature it on the blog I work for.

Stellar Song

Stellar Song #2 · Jun 19th, 2014 · · ·

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Thanks a bunch! Just remember to mention BubbleyBathTub, the awesome author who contributed and made the cover art for this story.

Mattricole

Mattricole #3 · Jun 20th, 2014 · · ·

Kids get held back for being mean? Really? You know, I honestly was enjoying this fic at first. And then the Cheerilee deciding to hold DT back a grade came up. Kinda weird, but okay, step backwards but easily salvageable. But then you get to the next part. Diamond Tiara's confession and apology....wow. Rushed endings aren't good. You could have so much more after the Cheerilee scene. You could have had them not finish, so Cheerilee gives them detention. During that detention you could have slowly have them get along. Diamond Tiara would have second thoughts on Apple Bloom, like: "Maybe she isn't so bad after all?", and expand upon that. The best way I can describe this fic is "disappointing". The first two-thirds is interesting, draws me in, and excites me to see how these two settle their differences and becomes friends, but the final third just drops in quality.

Stellar Song

Stellar Song #4 · Jun 20th, 2014 · · ·

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Okay, ask Bubbley about the grade holding back thing.

But personally, if you consider what you just said as 'constructive critisism', I'd say you were wrong. Sure you pointed out the flaws and said how I could have corrected them, but you weren't exactly nice about it. And what you call a 'disappointing' story is simply the result of a collab between two authors through PM. I might have done it differently, but that's the whole point of a collab - to produce different material. This was just supposed to be a one-shot to help a writer improve their writing, not some sort of thoroughly thought out elaborate masterpiece.

I'll keep your advice in mind, but I advise you not to be so critical when giving your opinion - constructive critisism, after all, is a way to help the author improve, not to put their confidence down.

Orangecraz

Orangecraz #5 · Jun 22nd, 2014 · · ·

I just read this through, and I think this is a great story. There are a few things that I feel are problems though.

First, the issue that Mattricole pointed out. You don't get pushed back a grade for bad behavior, you get expulsion.

Second, the story seems a little rushed. I wouldn't expect a giant sob story from someone who is known for playing innocent and crying croc tears (in fanon anyway) to be believed. Even if the story seems legit. I doubt Applebloom would be so accepting.

The only other issues are minor spelling errors, the kind that Grammar Nazis would be glad to point out for you. Keep up the good work.

Stellar Song