Luna has been depressed for a long time. And one day,she cant take it anymore. She is ready to end her life. But what happens when Celestia walks in.
One shot!
I am your ruler now. Deal with it.
Luna has been depressed for a long time. And one day,she cant take it anymore. She is ready to end her life. But what happens when Celestia walks in.
One shot!
whew! Had us worried there for a second at the beginning bud. Excellent one shot. Loved the feels and ending. A+
cute!
Good story. Though there are a few errors, I give it 9/10.
4540802 So, I have to ask; which errors stuck out to you the most? I did leave a lot of fragmented sentences in there [I find they sorta belong in some stories] aside from the improper use of "we're" in
S'what I get for proofing and drinking.
4558429 Well, celestia missed being capitalized. coco has an 'a' at the end: "cocoa", and there are a few instances with incorrect punctuation and merged words "likethis."
Nothing too glaring, but when you do your own proofreading....
4559745 Thankies.
Thanks for sharing, very emotional,
Wow, what an amazing fic! I really enjoyed it. Keep writing!!