Haunted

by Snowbelle

Chapter One and Only One

Author's Note:

This is my first story, so please feel free to leave a comment and provide any advice for me to use. Thank you very much and enjoy.
Also, I just noticed an error in my story that many lines that needed to be italicized and were not, but now it is fixed. I just took fixed it again. Please leave a comment if possible.

We thought back to the day, which was a thousand years ago, when the Nightmare Forces have taken control of us and our dearest sister banishing us to the moon for that amount of time, buts yet its been only a month since Twilight Sparkle and her friends released us from the Nightmare’s grasp. We find it that it feels so odd being the pony who we once were because for all my time on the moon from the time we were banished, we have been planning our return and taking down our sister then to wreak havoc upon those that served her and us. Just thinking back on it sends chills down our spine and leaves us with neverending nightmares for whenever we sleep. We looked around when strolling through Canterlot earlier today and saw that other ponies were not fearing us, or at least we thought they weren’t. Though, it makes me kinda happy that we are ourself again and we are not trying to use fear as a way for other ponies to notice us. We also noticed that other ponies are not shunning our beautiful night and it makes us happier.

After raising the moon, we hear a knock at the door and tell whoever is at the door to come in, then a low creak fills the room as the door is slowly moving open. Our dearest sister Celestia, who is the Princess of the Sun, walks in with a tired look on her face probably after exhaustion from watching the kingdom during the day and lowering the sun.

“Hello Luna, sorry if I am intruding but I just wanted to just check up on you to see how you are doing and to see how well you are adjusting to this place.” said Princess Celestia, who has a creamy white coat with a sparkling tropical rainbow mane and tail. Her crown and other royal accessories are off, probably took them off before going to bed.

We reply with a heavy sigh, “We are faring well, sister.”

She looks at us with a worried expression plastered on her face and then replied. “Is something wrong? You look...depressed.” We look out from the balcony on my tower kneeling on the railing as we stare out into the land. We try to choose our words wisely in fear of causing any guilt or regret.

“We feel like we are out of this time period. It has been so long since we had any interaction between another pony and it makes us feel like we don’t belong here and it makes us feel so lonely here in Equestria.”

We look back towards Celestia and she has this expression that is hard to describe. Is it regret? Pity? Sadness? Or is it guilt? We cannot tell because this expression is only a puzzle that doesn’t want to be solved. Her thoughts were tossing and turning like when its a sleepless night, just trying to formulate her next sentence that won’t cause anymore grief between us.

“You are no longer alone Luna, so please don’t feel like you are in outcast in society. I missed you so much and I am so happy that your back. Go and leave the castle, then have some fun, play around, pull a prank or two. There are always a few ponies out at night that are having fun. See you tomorrow morning and by the way, your night is more beautiful than the last time I saw it.”

Celestia opened the door with a loud creak and she slowly went down the tower steps while closing the door with her magic before we could finish my sentence. “But wait sister, what is this fun that…” Great, as we thought to ourselves, Now what am I going to do to pass the time?

An hour slowly ticks by and the clock strikes three in the morning, and its time that we do our hourly watch for anything suspicious happening outside the castle. We stifle a yawn and look at the city below our hooves and the land beyond. Nothing seems to be out of the ordinary but when we turned away, we hear a faint whisper in the wind. Luna…

“Who goes there foul creature? Show thyself to us!” We say with a bit of fear behind it because we recognize that voice all too well.

Luna...it whispers again into our ears and we see at the far side of my room, a shadow forming a being we know all too well. Our legs begin to shake at the sight of the shadow and we say with a bit of shakiness.

“No, this cannot not be! Thou were destroyed by the Elements!” The shadow was taking on the form of our fear; its coat black as night, its mane and tail becoming a dark nebula of evil, the armor appearing like they are coming from the very dark depths of Hell, its teeth getting ever so sharper by the second, and finally the eyes that have the power to pierce through your very soul.

Oh yes dear Luna…the evil shadow said. Did you really think you could get away from me that easily? We have shrunken down at the sight of seeing the one thing we feared the most. Nightmare Moon.

“How art thou even alive?! You should be dead!” We yelled at the apparition as it stands there, instilling fear that rocks the very center of our core.

Dear Luna, you do know that you can never escape from me. You know that you liked being Nightmare Moon because you finally got the attention you deserved. The ghostly figure of Nightmare Moon said with a sly tone of voice. We shake our head thinking that we are probably just hallucinating and that we are just dreaming, but the figure still stands there watching us with those serpent eyes.

“Why art thou here?” We say while trying to steady our shaky voice. “What is thou point of even coming here, because we want nothing to do with thou?” Nightmare Moon began to smile and show her sharp teeth as she started talking.

I have come to take you back where you belong. I know you feel like you are a nobody in a land where they hardly know you and most likely still fear you. You can get the recognition you once deserved and rule this awful place, and all you must do is come back with us. Her evil presence fills the air in the room and its making it harder to breath as every second passes. We try to breath in, but our lungs are finding it difficult to search for air and we say with heavy tone of exhaustion.

“Thou made us harm the ponies that we ruled and cared after for, and you also made us fight our sister and harmed her loyal subjects as well. We never should let thou find a way into my mind and have control over us.” A small chuckle came out of her mouth and it felt like poison to our ears as she began speaking in this slightly maniacal tone.

Who cares if you hurt a few lowly ponies, as long as they fear you then they will praise you.

The air has gotten to heavy for me as we slowly kneel down before her, gasping for air and the pain in our chest is getting stronger. Nightmare Moon smiles her wicked teeth in my face. See, you can feel the power I possess, and now this is what the other ponies did when they felt it for themselves. They kneel before my greatness and plead their allegiance to me, and now you can do that again as long as you come back with me so we take over this pathetic place. The pain in our chest was getting tighter, and its almost constricting us from the precious oxygen we need to breathe. The fear of going back is overwhelming us as we can hardly speak and we are on the verge of collapsing.

“We...shall not...join thou.” She laughs a bit and she kneels down until we are eye level with each other.

It does not matter, dear Luna because our time is coming and when it comes, a war will begin anew and we shall be victorious. This time, the Elements of Harmony will be useless against us.

Her laugh fills the room as it echoes against the walls and into our ears, the tears that we held in for so long begin coming down like waterfalls on our face. We cannot take it no more, we need air and we want her gone. The pain in our chest is excruciatingly painful and look around the room for an object, just about anything that will make her go away. I pick up the a flower vase using my magic, and we attempt to yell at her using the Royal Canterlot voice as we throw the vase towards the very fear that will continue to haunt us for a while. “GO AWAY!” The vase goes right through the apparition as the vase shatters into pieces and the mist of the Nightmare forces flows out the window. Her villainous laugh still echoes in the room and we are still chanting the words, “Go away.”

The door swings open with a loud bang and Celestia sees us on the floor curled up in ball, crying our eyes and shaking to no end. She rushes to our side and pulls us into a strong hug while asking. “What is wrong dear sister? I have not seen you like this since you were just a small filly.” Our body is starting to slowly stop shaking and air flows into our lungs.

“She was here Celestia, Nightmare Moon was here in the room.” We say to her in shaky breaths. “She is coming back with a plan and revenge. She wants to start a war and she will find a way to win.”

Celestia shakes her head, thinking that we have gone mad and says, “How can she do that? She has been defeated by the Elements.”

We stare deep into her soothing, warming eyes and say to her slowing regaining the composure that we lost, but still crying rivers. “No she is not, dear sister and she will never leave us alone.”

Comments

[SapphireSparks]

Nice story. Almost like a prequel to mine! :D

[Aqua Shimmer]

Okay. I liked it but you need to start a new paragraph with each new speaker. Besides that, it's okay.

[TheTrueDragoon]

That was good. If it's a first person story, you really don't need to describe Celestia the way you do. It just seems odd to me.
A way to improve it: Instead of saying she has white fur/hair/body (whatever) you could say:

Her white fur shined in the candle light.

Sounds more interesting since the reader (I assume) already knows what Celestia looks like and not so dull.
Otherwise, you did well.