It seems like a horrible idea to assign a manipulative courtesan to help a guilt-ridden war mage. It seems even crazier to pair a insane dominatrix with a veteran plagued by nightmares. But remember, love always appears in the unlikeliest of places.
Read both the chapters… I'm rather impressed. This is a whole new direction for this site. I wanna see how far this sh*t goes! By the way, isn't it 'Lace's Arc' now?
4472629 Holy how fast do you read? . And well yes it's technically Lace's arc now... but we wanted to make good the impact of her name reveal so we decided to use "Chans's" arc instead.
4472712 Thanks a bunch . It was... really random. Obviously I did my best to update in a certain amount of time, and have my co-author the awesome Comet Burst promote the story on his blog (as did I), but I honestly never imagined this . The featured box can be quite random at times.
Lured here by Comet Burst...must say, I look forward to seeing where this fic goes. Little weird for me though... Black Lace sorta reminds me of my sister. It is...offsetting, to say the very least.
4472630 I know how you feel, man, I tried that once too. Hit the recent update box twice a day with the same story, I actually think that's a mechanic the site has to prevent bigger writers who are able to crank out chapters in an hour. Just imagine someone's story reappearing in the box in between a 24 hour period. It's unfair.
4472888 Official Reply: This story is by no means based off any real persons and any resemblance cannot be held accountable to the story authors.
Wait that just sounds downright creepy, here's my actual reaction when you said that.
Bwah? That's just... a weird coincidence. Comet and I both had an equal hand in designing her... though Comet knows her backstory details+ motivations better than I do. I just set up the framework for her.
4473005 Me and Comet and currently prepping and writing the 3rd and 2nd chapters respectively. I'm afraid updates will still be on a monthly basis since, well you're getting double updates every time (Lace and Sheets's chapters are published at the same time), and both of us need to work on our own personal projects.
4473078 It was a combination of me and Comet brainstorming. We'd already picked out her descriptive characteristics and were thinking of a more suitable name than just "Chains" her original name. We're not sure who suggested it first. I will admit I was thinking of black lingerie when the name was picked and thinking how well that fit as it was kinky enough to fit her character, with enough elegance as well.
4473177 Good news, we've basically laid it all out. So there will be a happy ending and so far we think its realistic enough to work in a fictional setting.
4474002 Indeed. You'll find out that once the Rehabilitation Program's details are revealed that the crash and burn potential would have probably doomed a large section of his story if it weren't fictional.
What I do like about writing this story though is that while it is fictional, there's a real weight and depth to the romance I'm writing and I enjoy that greatly compared to other shipfics and romances I've read on fimfiction.net. Screwed up characters draw pity and when screwed up characters find love when the stakes are so high, well its the best kind. I hope we're going to be able to provide that experience for you all as well.
was a bit skeptical when i read the discription but seeing as this is a collab with comet burst, who's work i tremendously enjoy, i gave it a try. and i haven't been dissapointed. i like the story, the writing and the characters. can't wait to see more
4475223 You can bet your ass (geddit) that they'll be tension, intrigue...and lots and lots of sexy teasing. And we'll have two more very interesting mares to the OC party.
“But you don’t. How could anypony possibly like being considered as some sex object?”
There probably is something they like, there would have to be for ponies (or people) to do such things. Either the money, or perhaps the illusion of being wanted (I say illusion, because what they think they want and what they actually want might not be the same).... who knows.
I look forward to seeing where this story will go.
Amazing, this seemed to be an interesting idea that felt far beyond te usual things you would see on the site, and one that took place 300 years before the begging of FIM? Nice! Mideval equestia with all the rampant consorts and cortesians, i always loved this kind I political drama, and in the beginning we get the results of te project, and I cannot wait to see the result, and I caught the line about the "House Armor" heheheh, we are talking about Twilight's family here, this is very very interesting, and your style is well defined with well developed charecters, and I am drawn in by such deep charecters, good job. And I really wanna see how Scarlet Silk met Celestia, sounds like a fun thing to read, a like and a fair ire for you, sir, good job.
Love it! So far so good. Unique take on things. I'm loving that you and Comet Burst both took some realistic views on where each character would be and what they would have to deal with on a day to day basis. It's not all sunshine and rainbows, but not all terrible evil things either. Looking forward to the next update.
I have to ask, from how the chapter titles are written as "chains arc" and "sheets arc" I get a feeling that it's gonna be like two different stories in the same universe. But I would really like to have Winding Sheets and Black Lace to interact to each other at some point.
Black Lace interests me, I can't wait to see what Paladin Golden Lance is like, but Chains might be just the type of mare he needs since she'd be tough enough to keep him in line until it became habitual for him.
4562480 I'll talk it over with Comet, but the idea is the two separate story arcs would allow for people to choose/cover all of our audiences preferences and give it flexibility, at the same time catering to each co-authors own preferred character. Hence, we didn't plan any direct interaction between the two, but I'll talk it over with Comet.
4562596 I'll say nothing and ask you to see the next chapter when it comes out :P
Well interestingly enough... this plot is a combination of realilsm and a fat lot of fantasy. This program cannot happen in real life. The risk elements are too high (you're putting two unstable people together...). At the same time, particularly for Sheets's scenes which involve a lot more politics, problems (exposure to nobility and all that), I've tried to instill and go into the details of high society, particularly the social danger element.... while some people prefer to go dagger in hoof conspiracies, the subtle out of favor and 'attention'/approval seeking is far more... realistic and subtle, but just as dangerous.
At the same time, I, while writing the political scenes took into account that this is Equestria, a usually utopian society and thus there will be 'good families' or good groups of ponies.
As for the characters... if we printed the skype conversations that Comet and I had over our characters/respective mares, what motivates them, what they want, what they like to do, their fatal flaws (), we'd probably be able to cover an entire stadium... like a world cup stadium. We really wanted them to be very... well not human, but developed to the point that they had greater depths than just being labelled 'heroine'.
Read both the chapters… I'm rather impressed. This is a whole new direction for this site. I wanna see how far this sh*t goes! By the way, isn't it 'Lace's Arc' now?
4472629 Holy how fast do you read? . And well yes it's technically Lace's arc now... but we wanted to make good the impact of her name reveal so we decided to use "Chans's" arc instead.
you know this is in the featured box right?
4472689
I just found out.
I've been featured. OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG. YEEEESSS
BUt hopefully they'll come because its featured and stay because its good
4472702 lmao Lucky bastard! But I am really happy for you! Congratulations
4472712 Thanks a bunch . It was... really random. Obviously I did my best to update in a certain amount of time, and have my co-author the awesome Comet Burst promote the story on his blog (as did I), but I honestly never imagined this . The featured box can be quite random at times.
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4472719 Well good Luck with your Popularity. You might just need it lol
I normally skip pure oc stories, but this one actually seems interesting
4472630 http://mirrors.rit.edu/instantCSI/
Lured here by Comet Burst...must say, I look forward to seeing where this fic goes. Little weird for me though... Black Lace sorta reminds me of my sister. It is...offsetting, to say the very least.
This story...
I LOVE IT!!!! ANOTHER!!!!!
Black Lace...an interesting name, for an even more interesting character.
4472630 I know how you feel, man, I tried that once too. Hit the recent update box twice a day with the same story, I actually think that's a mechanic the site has to prevent bigger writers who are able to crank out chapters in an hour. Just imagine someone's story reappearing in the box in between a 24 hour period. It's unfair.
4472808 Well I needed that
4472758 I'm good at that.
4472888 Official Reply: This story is by no means based off any real persons and any resemblance cannot be held accountable to the story authors.
Wait that just sounds downright creepy, here's my actual reaction when you said that.
Bwah? That's just... a weird coincidence. Comet and I both had an equal hand in designing her... though Comet knows her backstory details+ motivations better than I do. I just set up the framework for her.
Oh, this is finally here. And featured too? Nice job, boys. Been keen for this for some time now.
Here, have some tokens of my esteem.
4473005 Me and Comet and currently prepping and writing the 3rd and 2nd chapters respectively. I'm afraid updates will still be on a monthly basis since, well you're getting double updates every time (Lace and Sheets's chapters are published at the same time), and both of us need to work on our own personal projects.
4473078 It was a combination of me and Comet brainstorming. We'd already picked out her descriptive characteristics and were thinking of a more suitable name than just "Chains" her original name. We're not sure who suggested it first. I will admit I was thinking of black lingerie when the name was picked and thinking how well that fit as it was kinky enough to fit her character, with enough elegance as well.
4473177 Good news, we've basically laid it all out. So there will be a happy ending and so far we think its realistic enough to work in a fictional setting.
4473647 Much appreciated
4474002 Indeed. You'll find out that once the Rehabilitation Program's details are revealed that the crash and burn potential would have probably doomed a large section of his story if it weren't fictional.
What I do like about writing this story though is that while it is fictional, there's a real weight and depth to the romance I'm writing and I enjoy that greatly compared to other shipfics and romances I've read on fimfiction.net. Screwed up characters draw pity and when screwed up characters find love when the stakes are so high, well its the best kind. I hope we're going to be able to provide that experience for you all as well.
4474210
As long as there's more, I'm happy!
awesome start, cant wait to see where it goes
also, THIS WAS JUST POSTED LAST NIGHT?! amazing
was a bit skeptical when i read the discription but seeing as this is a collab with comet burst, who's work i tremendously enjoy, i gave it a try.
and i haven't been dissapointed. i like the story, the writing and the characters. can't wait to see more
4472702
But you've been featured before. =P
Well, as for the story, it's really good. Lots of intrigue, lots of tension. I'm looking forward to the next chapters. :3
4475223 You can bet your ass (geddit) that they'll be tension, intrigue...and lots and lots of sexy teasing. And we'll have two more very interesting mares to the OC party.
4474753 It'll go places.
4474905 Thanks! I really love working with Comet and he's a great writer. We're really glad you're not disappointed.
i love the idea... moar please
I find this, intriguing
Okay, at first I was like "I don't know...."
But now, I'm like "Oh HELL yes!"
Great job guys! Continue this pleeeeeeeaaase!
MOAR
I love it. L-O-V-E it. I demand more. More I tell you. MORE.
Interesting, so far.
There probably is something they like, there would have to be for ponies (or people) to do such things. Either the money, or perhaps the illusion of being wanted (I say illusion, because what they think they want and what they actually want might not be the same).... who knows.
I look forward to seeing where this story will go.
Man she knows nothing of Safe Sane and Consensual does she.
4480311 Well alright, but have you ever heard of the phrase don't just a book by its cover?
This is really damn impressive. Great writing, very unique characters and an utterly original and creative plot. I anticipate future chapters greatly.
4480429 That's the spirit!
Oh, this is just too good! I eagerly await the next installment!
Amazing, this seemed to be an interesting idea that felt far beyond te usual things you would see on the site, and one that took place 300 years before the begging of FIM? Nice! Mideval equestia with all the rampant consorts and cortesians, i always loved this kind I political drama, and in the beginning we get the results of te project, and I cannot wait to see the result, and I caught the line about the "House Armor" heheheh, we are talking about Twilight's family here, this is very very interesting, and your style is well defined with well developed charecters, and I am drawn in by such deep charecters, good job. And I really wanna see how Scarlet Silk met Celestia, sounds like a fun thing to read, a like and a fair ire for you, sir, good job.
Love it! So far so good. Unique take on things. I'm loving that you and Comet Burst both took some realistic views on where each character would be and what they would have to deal with on a day to day basis. It's not all sunshine and rainbows, but not all terrible evil things either. Looking forward to the next update.
Being up to date on a story is rare for me, because i tend to fall behind easily. Now that i am up to date, all i can say is img1.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20130124010325/youtubepoop/images/2/2f/MOAR_Krabs.jpg
MOAR
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MOAR
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MOAR
Please, please, please don't let this story go unfinished. It has too much potential
I have to ask, from how the chapter titles are written as "chains arc" and "sheets arc" I get a feeling that it's gonna be like two different stories in the same universe. But I would really like to have Winding Sheets and Black Lace to interact to each other at some point.
Black Lace interests me, I can't wait to see what Paladin Golden Lance is like, but Chains might be just the type of mare he needs since she'd be tough enough to keep him in line until it became habitual for him.
4562480 I'll talk it over with Comet, but the idea is the two separate story arcs would allow for people to choose/cover all of our audiences preferences and give it flexibility, at the same time catering to each co-authors own preferred character. Hence, we didn't plan any direct interaction between the two, but I'll talk it over with Comet.
4562596 I'll say nothing and ask you to see the next chapter when it comes out :P
4562656
4562741 ok, Thank for letting me know what you were thinking.
4489629
4485440
Well interestingly enough... this plot is a combination of realilsm and a fat lot of fantasy. This program cannot happen in real life. The risk elements are too high (you're putting two unstable people together...). At the same time, particularly for Sheets's scenes which involve a lot more politics, problems (exposure to nobility and all that), I've tried to instill and go into the details of high society, particularly the social danger element.... while some people prefer to go dagger in hoof conspiracies, the subtle out of favor and 'attention'/approval seeking is far more... realistic and subtle, but just as dangerous.
At the same time, I, while writing the political scenes took into account that this is Equestria, a usually utopian society and thus there will be 'good families' or good groups of ponies.
As for the characters... if we printed the skype conversations that Comet and I had over our characters/respective mares, what motivates them, what they want, what they like to do, their fatal flaws (), we'd probably be able to cover an entire stadium... like a world cup stadium. We really wanted them to be very... well not human, but developed to the point that they had greater depths than just being labelled 'heroine'.
Finally read this.
Nice going, lads. Excellent characters, both of them.
So, when will we see a continuation?
4681057 when comet gets his butt to the computer and finishes his second chapter. :)
4681554
We seem to be having an identical issue with that
So this ought to be interesting. But don't let dual-release pairs keep updates held up!
Keep going! ;)