What would happen if a human were to cross dimensions into an unfamiliar universe, where everything is apparently an Anthro? That human is Rhoe. His world is soon going to change, making him move on of past tragedies. Ready?
4412339 Grrrr.... *sigh* Okay, okay. I'll admit it. I got carried away. This week has been... quite... I don't know how to put it. I acted childish and I apologize for that. It's just that... Man, I feel like an idiot now. I'm haven't gotten a critique like that before and I let my frustation against the truth blind me. You are absolutely right. If I ever do something that others might take seriously, I should take it seriously. As an adult, I solemnly apologize for my attitude and hope you can forgive. Heh, I still got a lot to learn, don't I? You have won the argument and there is nothing I can or will do about it. You are a great person and I really appreciate your help. And was that a Mild Critique? Could you show me a Harsh Critique? It's not a challenge or anything childish, just an example of it if you know one. The characters... Huh. I don't know what to do about them. Maybe I'll come up with something original to it, like a spell or something. This is gonna be hard. Well, I guess the third person narrative is better, but somehow, I feel that way the reader is no longer involved. I'll try to stick to Third Person, but what should I do about the whole 'Reader involved' Thing?
"Your story is absolutely terrible. I'm not going to leave a review here because there is nothing you can do that could fix it. My advice to you is to cut your losses, delete the story, and leave FIMfiction."
Also, I'm getting some serious passive aggressive vibes from your comment...
4412793 Oh, so that's a harsh critique. It's too painful to read. If you had said something like that, I would turn off my laptop, hide it, and get in my bed where I wouldn't sleep at all thinking about how awful my story is. Or something like that.
Meanwhile the passive-aggresive vibes... NOPE. There wasn't any intention for that. Maybe you read it in other way? The comment was entirely sincere and grateful. So chill! No prob'! How about we start over? I rather be on a 'sorta-friend' relation than a 'critic-author' relation since you seem to be a nice guy. Are you okay with it?
I like the overall plot of the story, but please use paragraphs, as that was one big clusterfuck wall of text with capslock thrown in. I got to the point where Luna was sitting on his face and had to stop reading due to how confusing everything is.
4413609 Dreams can be confusing, can they? It was point where insanity was consuming him and he was seeing things or experimenting things that were somewhat.... dirty. Now I noticed people aren't portraying themselves as Rhoe, so I might as well take him differently as I supposed you guys would take it. Not my original plan, but changes are good. And yes, that part has a bit of 'checking sanity status'. Hmm, why do I feel that at any point in the story different people suddenly dislike it? I'm starting to have doubts about this story....
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Grrrr....
*sigh* Okay, okay. I'll admit it. I got carried away. This week has been... quite... I don't know how to put it. I acted childish and I apologize for that. It's just that... Man, I feel like an idiot now.
I'm haven't gotten a critique like that before and I let my frustation against the truth blind me. You are absolutely right. If I ever do something that others might take seriously, I should take it seriously. As an adult, I solemnly apologize for my attitude and hope you can forgive. Heh, I still got a lot to learn, don't I? You have won the argument and there is nothing I can or will do about it. You are a great person and I really appreciate your help. And was that a Mild Critique? Could you show me a Harsh Critique? It's not a challenge or anything childish, just an example of it if you know one.
The characters... Huh. I don't know what to do about them. Maybe I'll come up with something original to it, like a spell or something. This is gonna be hard.
Well, I guess the third person narrative is better, but somehow, I feel that way the reader is no longer involved. I'll try to stick to Third Person, but what should I do about the whole 'Reader involved' Thing?
Wait. Applejack hates me?! Nooooo!
4412575 Not really, she is just mad at you due to the situation you just placed her. And the story is having some... changes.
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"Your story is absolutely terrible. I'm not going to leave a review here because there is nothing you can do that could fix it. My advice to you is to cut your losses, delete the story, and leave FIMfiction."
Also, I'm getting some serious passive aggressive vibes from your comment...
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Oh, so that's a harsh critique. It's too painful to read. If you had said something like that, I would turn off my laptop, hide it, and get in my bed where I wouldn't sleep at all thinking about how awful my story is. Or something like that.
Meanwhile the passive-aggresive vibes... NOPE. There wasn't any intention for that. Maybe you read it in other way? The comment was entirely sincere and grateful. So chill! No prob'! How about we start over? I rather be on a 'sorta-friend' relation than a 'critic-author' relation since you seem to be a nice guy. Are you okay with it?
I like the overall plot of the story, but please use paragraphs, as that was one big clusterfuck wall of text with capslock thrown in. I got to the point where Luna was sitting on his face and had to stop reading due to how confusing everything is.
4412621 oh good. also...
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Dreams can be confusing, can they? It was point where insanity was consuming him and he was seeing things or experimenting things that were somewhat.... dirty. Now I noticed people aren't portraying themselves as Rhoe, so I might as well take him differently as I supposed you guys would take it. Not my original plan, but changes are good. And yes, that part has a bit of 'checking sanity status'. Hmm, why do I feel that at any point in the story different people suddenly dislike it? I'm starting to have doubts about this story....
5# lol
what. the. buck. and i mean buck. did i just read......