Yes!! Cross-over!! Love both fanfics, I look forward to the future.

Some of those mares needed years of psychological recondition to even basically function in society again.

reconditioning
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Nice story so far. Although Horserer's stone was a tad lame. I mean you could've used Philosopher's Stone [since MLP has alchemy] or Sorcerer's Stone [don't know if they have Sorcerer's. But both titles where for the first book [UK and US]]. But other than that it's looking pretty good so far.

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What's it a cross over with?

I had thought I faved the story when I made my first comment, sorry argh I hate waiting for the next chapter. Patience is a virtue I was not born with.

sorcer'er's stone still applies dude.

gotta admit this series iis nto bad. the prior story i felt was a little needless, but i wonder wehre this is all going.

4435611 Princess Luna's Suicide Solutions

4436295 Prior story? Shining's flashback?

4436340 the other mistres do well stories you wrote after kaidan's.

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Thanks. I'll look it up.

4436350 Why are those needless? They all further the character development.

With a sad look of concern, his horn lit up, and he cast a sedation spell on her, and she fell into his hooves and he set her as gently as she could on the ground.

"He."

The number thing was a bit jarring, but this was a nice chapter, nonetheless. Shining Armor's back story was an interesting reveal.

KBO.

4436425 Number thing?

4436422 i only meant the story right before this one. it just felt like and addedum rather than truly important to the plot.

4436432 Where you wrote the numbers instead of spelling them out like 6:00 in the morning, or 800 miles, or 10-foot pole.

4436455 Appleshy was developed and Rainbow revealed her still-broken side to Twilight

Don't get me wrong, I am happy to see shiny and twi make up but after the story i was expecting more of a fight...

Well, I love your writing, and the whole MDW-series have been a masterpiece. But then I read your blog and now I must say this one is going a bit fast. You only plan on one more chapter and something terrible will happen, and chapter 2 ends HERE? It feels like youre rushing it.
...you are going to kill someone, arent you? ...Please don't answer that one...

4436861 Wait and see.

As for rushing it, I'm not good at fluff.

4436890 when you say fluff, I guess you're referring to the scene with twi and shining? If so, well yeah... that scene is probably enough, but the thing Rainbow is going through... in one chapter she meets luna, in the other she travels, in the third The end?

I can only assume it will be epic, but still....

His cutie mark was a simple lit candle with a candlestick.

^This was the one thing that stood out to me. His mark re-lit. I believe you said something like wanting this story to take place after PLSS, but it still felt worth mentioning. In a good way!

Other than that, I just read the entire Mistress Do Well series, your alternate ending, and its sequels, it's nearly 3 am now here, but it is worth it.

She got up to answer it, and upon seeing who her visitor was, knew that the wizarding world of Harry Trotter would be waiting for another day.

Twilight seriously should read the book. It's interesting how that Library seems to have an atmosphere of a slightly decorated house with some bookshelves... how many books are there?..

"I forgive you."

move up to previous dialog.
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"I love you, Twiley. Don't ever forget that."

same fix as above.
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“Luna told me you might be coming. The mane kinda gave it away. It's nice to meet you, I'm Noctilucent.”

same as bove.
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I honestly didn't read Shining's first flashback bit. I have absolutely no idea who's speaking /when. Since 90% of it is untagged / no speakers designated.