Kirby x MLP : FiM crossover
Started: March 11, 2014 (8:42am)
Finished:
Summary
The denizens of Ponyville, especially the Mane Six, are at a loss of what to do when a small, pink (asocial), puffball crash-lands near their picnic, Will contain predominantly all characters and a little bit of every genre except Romance and Grimdark, (well, maybe a little bit Dark, but not THAT Dark! 
) throughout the story! XD Rated E for now. =3
It's not yet finished in my notes and thus it's not finished on paper, but it will be.
Huh... I don't understand why Slice of Life and Adventure CAN'T go together... *bringing this to my blog*
My own cover will be here eventually! XD
For now, I'm thanking flimsy-cat for the part that contains his or her cover art and warriorcatsrpg.com for the rest of the picture! XD
Working on getting a 3DS; just need to find the gift cards.. [Will be getting the 3DS soon! XD FOUND THE GIFT CARDS! (May 10, 2014) so if I can, I'll draw a cover art for this story using the 3DS (when I get it). --bringing this to my blog! XD
I hope you like My Little Pony - well, of course you do; you clicked on it!
Lemme change that up there; well, of course you do! you're on FIMfiction! And I hope you like dark Kirby too! XD
Not dark, as in grimdark, but just... dark... ya know.... opposite of happy?
I also hope I stuck true to the characters; I'm a little new to the show. ^^;
P.S. I also snuck in a few Portal references and maybe a reference to something else entirely; see if you can find them. =3
Alright, here we go! XDSample
It was a windy day in Ponyville.
The branches of the many trees were shaking; the green blades of grass rippled in whichever direction the wind seemed to go, and the blankets Pinkie Pie set out kept getting blown away so many times that she finally had to hold them down with bricks.
It was also a beautiful day out!
The sun was shining; birds were chirping, and, of course, Pinkie Pie was out waiting for her five friends with an assortment of picnic baskets....
End Sample
XDD Want more? *Pinkie Pie style* clickie clickie on the button for Chapter One! =3
Um... what to say, what to say....
OH!!
Hey! yall!!
I have a feeling we're all gonna get along!
I'll reply to your comments whenever I get the chance, but I have it connected to my phone, I think, so don't go TOO OVERBOARD!!
If you could tell me how to get rid of the written format, like the italicized or bold or centered format, that would be much appreciated. =3
I'll read this later. When the formatting ISN'T shot to hell.
Please, fix this. Center formatting is not easy on the eye, especially in a five-thousand word story.
*Places in read later pile*
4371774 -- bobbananaville
It's fixed now!
The moderators told me my errors and I fixed it yesterday. (I hope)
So now it's approved, thank Celestia! XD
Hope it's easy to read now. =3
Actually, (12:34pm), now that I read it, it's not as fixed as I thought it was... lemme fix that..
(2:05pm) It's fixed now! XD
Read to your hearts' content! XD
OH!!
I forgot to put up something!!!
, tareme means "drooping eyes". 
For those who don't know Japanese
It's over already wwwwwwwwwhhhhhhhhhhhhhyyyyyyyyy!
4373971 --- Nintendohero64
Oh, no~ it's not over! that's just what I mark it. I mark it when I finish a particular chapter.
I started this story back in March, and to be more specific March 11, 2014 (8:42am); it's not ending here.
But it's still not finished finished, so my music is helping me right it.
Believe me! It's FAAAAAARRRR FROM OVER!!
I'm having a little trouble reading this because there aren't spaces between when someone new is talking. I am curious about this story and would like to try it but you need to do something about that spacing. Also, is that Kirby in this fic? Because Kirby is a lot friendlier and doesn't have a scar across his eye, nor does he wear a black cape.
4378245 Oh, problems for you too, eh?
I fixed the problems on the computer... are you reading this by phone per chance? 
4378390 No, off a laptop. The spacing thing is really my only problem, other than that, this story seems interesting.
4379152 Oh I am!
I just have to get Chapter Two near finished.
And nope, not tellin any details!
THERE SHOULD BE MORE HAPPY FLUTTERSHY EMOTES!!
Ahem... okay! =3 Here's the second chapter, everyone!
Well, most of it anyway..
Told ya this story wasn't gonna end soon.
I just need to wrap up this chapter in particular and I'll have that up maybe sooner than later.
I've not gotten my 3DS yet!
But I shan't despair! I shall get it soon, for MY name is VampireFluttershyTails~!
Maybe I'll add music to this later, hm?
EDIT (May 13, 2014): Ya know, I appreciate the faves and the watches!
but, um... 
would ya, ya know, review...? 
I love that!
....please?
Chapter Two is now up.
how can a great writer like me know if there are issues with the reading populace if no one tells me nuthin? 
Or did I really have to tell yall that?
Be sure to review and all that good stuff!
Besides,
Okay, 1) you use the word moderate way too much in this. 2)"the light grayish mulberry unicorn couldn't finish" You do this too much, just say the names. 3) Also pertaining to the above quote, I think you're either color blind or are trying way to hard to get fancy with the description. For instance, you called Rarity light grey, when she is simply white. We all know what the Mane6 look like, so you don't need to try and be hyper detailed. I mean, seriously, "pushed the light brilliant gamboge Earth pony aside" ... Just say orange pony or mare, there's only one in the group, we won't be confused. Oh, and Kirby's eyes are blue, not red. I assume you know this, but just in case you didn't. 4) You indent some paragraphs, but not all of them. Heck, some have a few spaces instead of a single tab. Be consistent. 5) "...Whaddya think that there createah is, Twi?" Just put critter. People do this all the time when they try and write Applejack, completely gargle her speech trying to get it to sound southern. You don't too as bad as some I've seen, but you've slipped from a southern drawl into more of a New Orleans, Creole or Cajun accent a few times. Just try not to over do it like you did here, "Windbags sho din't help mattahs"
You got to be kidding me, let me just read a little bit more.
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Pinkie Pie is the type of Reality Warper who -- Pinkie cuts in: NEVER REVEALS HER SECRETS!!! 
Oh, thank you.
NOT THAT THE OTHERS AREN'T FUN TO WRITE TOO!! I didn't mean that at all! 
Yeah,
-Pinkie Pie pokes me.-
*snaps out of my stupor*
*replies to you*
Oh, I made a mistake ("you're" instead of your")!
I'll fix that!
And I'm glad I portrayed Pinkie Pie perfectly; she was the most fun to write!
And the reason I let this chapter get out on the field is because I wanted you to
squirm in your suspenseread what I had going; I'll finish it as soon as I get out all the knots with the previous chapters and with my fellow gamers on Aeria Games.So, yeah.
Yeah, Kirby... he's been through so much, hasn't he? makes ya wanna hug 'im, eh?
And what was with the other reply?
I don't see it anymore...
4386212 Um... why all the harsh words?
I know I probably overdid it with Applejack's accent and I'll fix it to "critter", okay.
And I'm certainly NOT colorblind and second of all, I didn't really write this story with you all in mind, okay?!
I used the color-descriptions when I thought I needed to use it.
Doesn't matter whether you know what I'm talking about; somepony else could read this and not know what the hay I'm talking about!
No offense, if you took any offense, but your tone with me sure did seem like you took offense with the story above all.
P.S. Kirby's eyes are red for reasons you won't understand until later in the story, and I realize you're trying to help, but please be constructive and respectful/reasonable next time. Okay.
Now, um... who wants treats for those who found the video game references (Portal) in the previous chapter?
Um...
...I hope I didn't scare everyone away....
Because if I did, then this is SO not my day...
LE GASP!!
I UPDATED CHAPTER TWO!! 
It shouldn't be long until this chapter is wrapped up and done, and I'll be working on Chapter Four. 
WHOOHOOO!!!
You guys should be happy!
Spoiler Alert: the perspective starts with Fluttershy! XDOn my own time of course.
Don't wanna wind up in a psych ward again because I *coughcough*was confused*slskldklakhf*on what frequency in which I started....*lost in transmission*WRITING!So, there we go.
Let the reviews (be reasonable and respectful!) commence.
IT IS FINISHED, EVERYPONY!!
Rejoice!
I hope you liked the appearance of
Now, for Chapter Three, for which I have the notes ready and finished.
You'll expect the first part of that chapter, mmm... tomorrow..
Ta ta, for now.
4415825 Forgot to mention, read and review. (like you need to be told that)
And also, I'll add music to the chapters later on. Gonna be so fun!
This is just trial and error; I haven't figured out the works with this chapter yet, but... hopefully it'll line up with what I have in terms of the plotline.
Feel free to pm or review. I won't bite.
Alright, ta ta for now!
*realizes all of that should be in the blog, and chuckles sheepishly*
Oh, well..
Is Kirby going to be a Seventh Element of Harmony or something, or does the warp star sparkle around him because he is the owner?
4417133 Oooh, you are very close...
(*snickers*) 
At least not yet. 
With that first guess, you are... AWESOMELY CORRECT!!
But don't tell anybody you know...
Also, the warp star is glowing around other people other than him, because he's not in the picture with them.
But, yeah, he is one of them, yeah.
*is surprised they figured it out so quickly*
HAS MY COVER BEEN BLOWN?!?!
P.S. Of course the warp star is his; Rainbow Dash found it in his Star Cruiser, yeah?
4417597
NO,
I know that the Warp Star is Kirby's, I was just asking if the reason that it sparkled was because he's its owner and not something else like him being a Seventh Element or something.
4418164 I suspect you didn't read ALL of my reply to you...
But that's for you to figure out, as a reader of this fine piece of material. 
but please read my whole reply 
Yes, Kirby's warp star is reacting to Pinkie Pie, Rainbow Dash, and Twilight Sparkle.
It could mean he's one of them, like Pinkie Pie and Celestia seem to think... or something else entirely...
Your next question probably will pertain as to what particular Element I marked him to be.
It's good that you ask me questions; it really is,
before you go off on a tangent about something that I already addressed.It would've avoided this whole thing, not that I don't like getting reviews.. I do.
Just... yeah... you get the picture.
Right, sonicfan21?
Went back and fixed some formatting and added two pieces of music and a video, that may reflect the feelings of each of the Mane Six (and Kirby too), to the chapter.
I might fix a bit of Applejack's accent, but the main reason for the exaggeration was for humor.
I wouldn't mess up AJ's accent on purpose, of course; besides when I first wrote that scene I was getting into the swing of things (just started watching MLP : FiM at the time) so I was still trying to get AJ's accent right.
But that there with the "Windbag" stays.
Because it's funny.
Oh i would like to read more, i just thought about such a fanfic today, search for it, find it and like it
I somehow hope this is no Twilight love Spike hint.
Did Luna and Celestia know about him? I have not that much against it, but it is a bit silly that they always seems to know about everything, it have to give at least on thing they don´t know.
Well maybe i just understand it wrong, english is not my main language.
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Isn't that exciting?! 
)
Oh, that's awesome Texus!!
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Nope, it wasn't a love hint between Twilight and Spike. It was just Twilight being nice.
Well, it's sorta like a unknownity (unknown entity) right now. Luna knows he's in the Everfree Forest; Kirby doesn't know this (that he's being watched or the name of his location), at this time, however.
Princess Celestia's, however, been watching all seven of the characters (the Mane Six and Kirby) through some method I didn't really get into though I probably should... (Hint: she has a Crystal Ball)
(August 28, 2014: Oh, I just had a Fridge Brilliance yesterday! She sees through the Sun she rules over.
Princess Celestia.... hm.. yeah, she knows about Kirby.. I mean who wouldn't, right?
But she doesn't know anything about him "personally", if you will; hence why she's in the Castle Library attempting to look things up about him.
Added some horizontal bars and some more details to the stinger.
(EDIT: Added a musical video too. Credited to DJ Young Monster Beatz =3)
I should be working on the scenes surrounding that one scene in Chapter Three (that you can't yet see because it's 250 something under 1000 words), but I decided to add a few details to this chapter.
Keep the reviews coming. Don't be shy now.
4421793 Well ok thx for get me the correct information. Sometimes i don´t get it right away, probably because it is not my main language. And yeah i love this fanfic somehow allready.^^
4423190 Oh, that's awesome you love the story!
I hope you keep loving the story, and ask me questions too.
I like answering questions.
Alright, I have to get off now.
It's been fun!
Maybe you could PM me later on or such.
(Should've told you this before, but your English is pretty good. Soon enough, you'll be able to understand events at a mastery rivaling, or perhaps surpassing that of, the English speakers themselves!)
May the Force always be with you.
I KNOW RIGHT?
4425902 LOL!!
Thank you for agreeing!
I mean, it's not like anything's wrong with the genres or anything! lol
Not like I'm gonna do anything "wrong" with them or anything.
4425971 I eventually figured it out, but the notion they can't happen at the same time still bothers me. It's because Slice of Life implies it is a simple 'every other day' and nothing exceptional happening, while adventure is a story with action and other things normal, everday people (unfortunately) don't experience. Which sucks.
4425980 Ah, I see...
)
But still, this is a Slice of Life, with the Mane Six and Kirby going through "average" things, and yet an Adventure too because they're experiencing things neither of the two series (Kirby and MLP) would experience (in canon that is...
I just don't get it....
4426007 I can see that. I've been trying to plan a story like that, too. Something with relative themes, but also a fantasy world that we could all find our destinies in.
Oh no, he's done and gone over the edge again. Idealistic idiot.
I know you have dreams, O'mielly.
4426032
OH! Is O'mielly your alter ego or something?! 
Oh, so I'm pretty much fulfilling your dreams, eh?
Yeah, the only story so far, that's in my favorites, (Smoke and Mirrors) has both tags and I'm trying to see/figure out how she managed to get the mods to listen and grant her that right...
Man, is he a spoil sport, or what?
He sure is, VFluttershyTails... he sure is....
Say, are you a moderator or something? you have a blue outline around ya..
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Pyriel lets his emotions take hold of him too often. Crappy life, that's what he always says he has.
So, I create O'mielly as a medium for my loneliness and I try and see the best in the world. Which can be very hard at times.
4426146 Oh, I see...
to see the bright side of things when so many things happen to you that are bad, but the fact that we're alive and the sun is shining and MLP is here and video games too... that's a good thing, isn't it? 
I mean, Pinkie Pie is happy, isn't she?
Yeah, it can be very hard...
Don't know about GLaDOS -
Hey, do not mention me... I am just on the sidelines like we promised...
Yeah... she's hard to talk to, but she's nice... really!
I told you not to call me nice in public... I have a repute to upkeep...
4426176 Hey GLaDOS, wanna hear my impression of you? You monster.
4426185
See, she's ni ---!! 
especially not Pinkie Pie... 
...Really? that's the best you can do... I pity you...
Whoops, forgot that one rule...
*sighs* It's fine... it does not seem you'd get it anyway...
Hehe... oops...
But it's all in good fun!!
4426208 No, it isn't, but all the other ones would be making fun of your inner feeling and such. I can break people if I know them well enough, imagine what I could do to someone I've been studying such as youself, you overly glorified Ai, you. And, yes Pinkie, it is all in good fun, so I justify the point that I don't want to do that...
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) or happy (
) or sad (
), or angry (
) or sarcastic (
)*...
*pats GLaDOS on her chassis* It's okay... you have me, right? 
I guess...
--> 
Anyway, I've been looking for my story on TVTropes.. it's not there yet.. 
....*is not sure whether to be terrified (
Sometimes I wish they do deactivate me... but I love Science so much I don't want them to.. if only they treated me well... I probably would not have killed them...
... *sighs*
But it will be..
What did you think of the story so far, anyway?
*has to leave in a few minutes; my mom wants to go out and get some items. Hopefully it won't take long.*
4426292 Screw it. What were you r feeling when when you left Chell out in that Prairie outside the lab. We all heard and translated your singing.
Also, I haven't read yet, I just saw it in popular stories or something and agreed with the title. Kirby's in it, though, so it must be good.
4426312 lol
It's why VFluttershyTails took all her time to write this magnificent masterpiece!! 
I'm not THAT good, Pinkie. 
A reviewer even said you hit the nail on the head with me! 
SO you MUST be doing excellently!
SPOILERS FOR PORTAL 2!!
...I was feeling happy for Chell... happy that she passed the test and was free to leave. However, I hope she meets someone else to help her; the world's not as it was when Aperture scientists actually existed...
Plus... Wheatley's... well.. Wheatley's up in space...
I appreciate what you say, but please refrain from using profanity.
It kinda defeats the purpose of a story that's rated "Everyone".
Oh, but you SHOULD read!
Hehe...
Pinkie:
But I am good.
Pinkie:
*pulls a Fluttershy and hides within her mane* <insert emote:Fluttershy-hiding-within-her-mane here>
4427305 Sorry, bad habits. Yes, I'll read, I'm sure of it. There I fixed it.
4427313 That's quite all right,
; be sure not to do that again, please though. 
I'm glad you fixed it!
Oh, and please read, and tell me all your thoughts about it!
I'd much appreciate it.
Added the genre tags "Sad" and "Adventure" to the Story "Set-Up".
If I can't add Slice of Life, then I'd figured I might as well add Adventure, cause that's what this story will entail.
There will be average things happening, which is what Slice of Life represents, but since I can't add that, (which I still think is crazy), I will just take it and see whether or not the mods change their minds over the course of this story.
I think you are writing a good story here, for one or two of them i can understand why they want to meet Kirby so badly, i think for Futtershy he is still part of an Animal maybe.
It would maybe funny if Kirby and Discord have a little catfight or something like that because he seems a bit jealous about Kirby
4428600 Why, thank you, Texus.
) reasons for acting the way they are? 
(I might consider it, however. 
)
)
Cause I don't really get what I just said. 
Yeah, Fluttershy still thinks he's part hybrid - no, wait.. Fluttershy is like that because she's kind overall, and wants to keep and care for him the best she can because, well, in her eyes, Kirby's a mammal.
(Plus those scars on his face and his overall attitude; remember, she reacted with alarm when Kirby jumped at her asking "Are you alright, little one?" *refers you to Chapter One*)
You want to try your hand at guessing Rarity's (and the other five of them if you can.
Yeah, that would be funny, but I have another idea...
But, nah, Discord isn't jealous; he just knows about Kirby, because well, he's a
GodSpirit!(Oh, he might be a tad jealous, but the frown was there mostly because that's his thinking face.
Discord's nice to Fluttershy like that because he knows how worried Fluttershy gets when she doesn't have what (or, rather, in this case, whom) she usually has to care for.
Did you get all that?
Ugh...
Are you kidding me right now?
WOO-HOO!! THIS IS A CAUSE FOR A PARTY!!!
GLaDOS and me: ...Oy...
But it's alright; I've got it planned out and that's all that matters, I guess..
All Mane Six and Kirby: