Spike has been away from Ponyville for a long time - Longer than he can remember. Now, he's returned by royal command. He must speak to each of the Elements of Harmony, and it's not good news...
(Romance tag isn't sexual, purely romantic.)
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interesting....
just that sad tag.... hmmm
4340495 Just consider their ages once~ ;)
Oowwwwwe nice fic !!! Pls write more bout this :'D
It was a good story and I can't wait to read more but please write in paragraphs
sounds like a promising story.
4342143 S-sure! *overloaded with comments and notifications and holy cow, this thing got views?!*
4342787 It is in paragraphs. ^^; Sorry, I have a tendency to use longer paragraphs, seeing as a paragraph is considered at least 5 sentences long, or when the dialogue changes, or when a train of thought changes. Each time there's an indent, that's a paragraph. I use a lot less, because my topics change less. It's all in the grammer~
4343297 Thanks~
4343454 I see
Good work! I'm keeping my eyes on this.
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4346315 With the startling amount of favorites, you can bet a good 90 other people are watching it too!~
Thanks for the comment~
That's going on the favorite lines list.
Can't wait for AJ's reaction to Spike.
Cannot wait to meet the rest of mane 6! Great job
Will it be spikebloom? Please, just put a little of it, pwease :3
I loved the chapter, keep it up
I really wonder what sort of business does Spike have with the mane 6. You got me intrigued. The story looks really nice, will continue reading.
4398742 xD God, I love it too
4398755 Working on that chapter as we speak~
4399115 Thanks for the comment!~
4399390 There'll be more than a few broken hearts in this fic~
4399870 ;) More than a few broken hearts in this fic~ Thanks for the comment~
4399998 Thank you for the comment - You won't figure out what he's doing till probably the end of this next chapter.
4400254 Umm... informing them that they will all turn into alicorns and rule as new princesses?
Yeah, I know, you won't answer even if someone does guess, since you don't want to spoil it.
4400262 Of course I wouldn't answer~ <3 But have fun guessing~
4400241 Ranks third place.
Good for A.B. Letting out her crush, and, if I'm reading the hints correctly, becoming the Element of Honesty.
Huh, so that's what it was. Passing on the Elements. Still, why so much sadness? Is it going to kill them or something?
And Spike was really mature in dealing with Applebloom.
Although, didn't you say that a lot of time passed? Enough for Applejack to grow really old and frail? Wouldn't it mean that Applebloom is already a middle-aged mare (at least in her 40's)? That's a lot of time to hold a crush and never meet anyone else. Kinda pathetic if you ask me.
very nice
so, when you say you're looking for a more anthro looking spike, something more like, this?
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By the second chapter its pretty clear where you are going with this, so no surprises. Its been done before, but as with most stories I see some new ideas and such, so it will be interesting to see how that develops. I don't know if this should be a sad occasion in this particular narrative... I'm inclined to say no, it feels like a sense of relief might be more appropriate. AB's confession comes completely out of nowhere and if it stays like this has no reason whatsoever to be in the story. Finally, Big Mac has a wife who likes to help around the orchard? You realize Big Mac is the older brother, right? If AJ is this advanced in age, he should feel the effects of age at least as much if not more. So if he has wife, unless he is Hugh Hefner, she has no business working the orchard either.
Does the bearer have to be a "pony"
?
I think it would have been better if you had explored their (spike and Applebloom) relationship prior to the events of this chapter. I mean, it's okay to ship those two, but this kind of talk (without chapters backing it up) would have only worked if it were between Spike and Rarity because we already know about Spike's feelings towards Rarity in the show. If you want to portray SxAB relationship you would have to give more details to the readers in order for us to feel invested in the scene you just described.
That aside, the chapter was good.
4425072 Probably not, Spike's probably getting loyalty at the end or something.
4425514 If you think about this more, the power can only really go one of two places, to Twilight, or Spike. And if, Twi, is now immortal, as far as time is concerned. I don't see why all the power of friendship wouldn't just go to her. Because I don't see her making close, personal friends like this all over again
.
Fancy!
Who's next? Sweetie and Rare or Rainbow and Scoot?
4424756 ^^
4424776 Rather pathetic, yes, but AB has always been one to crush and crush hard, in my eyes~
Sorry AB
4424870 ^^;; Not showing up
4425070 Well, Granny still helps around the orchard, and thinking about that, they would've had a few grandkids. Of course, you'd be right. ^^; Even the best writers slip up.
4425072 Nope!~
4425431 Thanks. Yeah, their relationship was honestly added simply as something else I thought of. It wasn't even in the original planning ^^;;; I could've done better, and I'm seriously considering editing it out
4425514 Spike will get what he gets~
4425627 Simply because her friends can't all be immortal. ^^ Nopony is truly 'immortal' in this fic. The term is thrown around loosely, but only because they live for long long LONG times. Twilight won't live forever, and her friends have even less time than she does.
The basic premise is, Twilight is the Element of Magic, and though her friends may be gone, there might be hope for others...
4425950 ;) Hold your horses, I'll update soon~
4426242 That sounds like all the elements are going to be passed of
. Interesting
!
4426244 Alright :/
4426210
we'll try it as a link then
Owwwww :'D