• Published 15th May 2014
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Do not move - Letter Sent



We have to be quiet, you do not know who I am but you will soon enough. Just. Do. Not. Move.

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Do not move.

Author's Note:

Woohoo, first story written by me, it's a one shot so please tell me what you think.

Do not move, I said do not move or they will find us. Who you ask? Them, you will know who they are when you need to, the same information will be divulged about me at that same point. All you need to know right now is that you are not to move an inch until I say it's safe to do so.

As you should know these creatures are dangerous or I would not be hiding you from them, I've spent too long tracking you down to just let you vanish again. They invade our towns and cities and castles, they even invade us, our homes and everything we own, defiling them, destroying them, making them anything but what the are meant to be.

I do not wish to harm you so stop moving damnit, you need to stay still or they'll hear us, their hearing is heightened above our own you know... Almost sharper than a cat's hearing capabilities, they cannot hear me though, for reasons you will soon find out. I've heard of these things in other lands, each with their own name and traits but they all share a common idea; they are and are dangerous to the inhabitants of any land they are in.

I realize you are getting irritated with my constantly holding you down but you will try to run if I let you go, and don't go through all that bullshit about "No I wont, just let me go and I'll do what you want." Because I know what you will do, I've known you for too long to listen to that crap, now stay down and stop squirming.

The lands were all peaceful until they arrived and began to cause havoc and mayhem all over, but unlike Discord, they worked indirectly, spreading rumors and terrifying ponies, griffins, zebras, dragons and donkeys alike in their dreams and during their days. These things kept making the sunniest days into the most dismal of times in the lands...

I can see you are remembering now, remembering just what these things are, it's flowing back into your mind ever so slowly pouring into your subconscious knowledge, making you realize just what makes them so bad so... Dangerous...

They are shadows... Or that's what most perceive them as, that harmless thing attached to your hooves when you walk around is dangerous and consumes you every night when Princess Luna's moon covers Equestria. It feeds off of your warmth at night, growing stronger more powerful and soon they are strong enough to take us back to where they reside: the afterlife.

Shadows make life at night terrible and terrifying, a truly horrifying time, these shadows were the reason Nightmare Moon came into being. The ponies, fearing the shadows slept to keep themselves safe from the horrors they wrought in Luna's time of office, the night, the time of beauty is the night, Luna's time, the time the shadows are alive...

The shadows are mimics, taking on a similar shape to everypony during the day and consuming all during the night, they are the reason nights are cold and days are warm.Their covering of the lands chills them to the core, terrifying even the very earth we walk on, not even the pegasi are safe, the shadows coat even them during the nights when they arrive.

But it is day you say, yes, yes it is the day time, but today is a special day, a day when an eclipse of the sun was planned by the sisters to commemorate the defeat of Nightmare Moon. This empowered the shadows and now they roam among us as physical beings, making their presence known and making us prey to their powers.

I've already been attacked by the shadows and have been scarred by their evil powers, I am cursed to become one of them, a shadow... That is why I am here to tell you how to stop them, how to scare them, for unlike Nightmare moon they cannot be calmed, unlike Discord they cannot be reformed, unlike Sombra they cannot be defeated, unlike Tirek... They cannot be imprisoned...

You can only scare the shadows away with light, and there is light within us all, we just need to find it and unlock it... this is the hardest thing for anypony to do because it means we have to find the one thing about ourselves we do not like and to embrace it, make it the thing we are known the most for.

Yours is that you are to proud of your skills, too open about them, boastful even, you need to embrace it and abolish it from your subconscious and make it a good thing about you, boast about doing good for others for once, not about your powers my friend...

To find one's light takes time my friend; weeks, months even, so please try as hard as you can to find yours, for me and for everypony else's sake, teach them what I have taught you... I must go now, goodbye Rainbow Dash, my old friend...

As he flew away I could hear his screams of pain, anger and terror all mixed into one blood boiling scream... I saw him fly towards a dark shape and engage in a fight, his body glowing a brilliant white that not even Rarity has seen on her dresses and suits, not even in Canterlot was there a white as blindingly beautiful.

Those words he kept repeating... "Do not move" they stay with me even as I write this letter to you, my shadow has been different ever since, looking more like a stallion than a mare, and I never feel cold at night, it's like there is a veil of warmth at any time, keeping me warm, even on the coldest of winter nights.

I travel around during the night now, helping the ponies I see, unlocking my light and fighting off the shadows I see, teaching Shatterwing's word to all, having them unlock their inner light too, allowing them to fight off the shadows alongside me, I wish for you and your sister to do the same now Princess Luna... From the best flier in Equestria Rainbow Dash.

Comments ( 49 )

Sorry I didn't get back to you. I like it, though. I didn't see any mistakes. Interesting idea, as well. All in all...


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9/10 Mustaches.

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No problem! I view it as my duty to tell the truth. :derpytongue2:

4392126 I just hope people other than you like it. :derpytongue2:

Pretty intreasting, but since it's a one-shot you should mark it as complete unless you intend on extending it.

4392411 Thanks for the reminder, I'm a bit scatterbrained due to it being my first story I've actually put up on a site for all to see. :twilightsheepish:

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No prob, and good luck on your future endeavors.

4392430 Unlike many writers, I don't get many ideas and by the way, shadows are evil, trust me...

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Y̭̩͎̤ͩ͌̐ͮ̅ͩ̏̐Ó̴̢̗̬̑͌͑̐̔̊͝U̸̸̴̺̬̅̒̄͛́ ̖̝̅̿͒̿̔̀K̡͓̲̜̠̍͌N̼̝̗̂ͯ̀ͪͅO̷͉̙̓W̲̦͍̰̜͍̳ͩ͝ ̵̺̜̲̳͔̬̇ͮ̒̓ͯ̚͝ͅT̯͇̹̝̬ͭͪ́̈́ͬ̍̕ͅÓ̶̢͍͓͈̦̰͍̲̯̌ͥ͗̆̎̍O̬̹ͣ̾͒͆͛͗͠ ͖͈̱̹ͮ͛͘M̴̨̛̹̝̘̲̄̓ͥ̆̽̑͛͋Ų͖̫̙̠̪̖̈́̐͞C̷͓͍̉͛͊̅͌͜͞H͖̝̞̲̫̞̳̐ͥ͒̀̾̾!̂͛ͫ̎ͬ̈̀҉̻̻͉̺

4392451 A shadow! You killed Shatterwing, I will get my revenge! :flutterrage:

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Ẃ͖͈i̛͚͖͓L̩͙̀̅l̹̬̹̭͚ͣ̅ ̯y̲̦͚̰͉̽ͬ̈͋Ō͇̩̖̍͌͝ͅuͤ̍̅ͦ ̜̭͙͖ͭ͛ͮ͞Ņ̤͓o̓̿ͨͣẆ̷͛̊͒?̫͙͎̯̒̅ͅ
̧̜̯͗
̸̲͙̺̜͉̺̞͛K͚͎̘̄̅̌ͨ͘ȋ̛͖̦̹͈̹̪̌̾L̜͓͎̝ͫ͛ͭl͓̲ͥͨͬI͔̙̭̲͕̠̻ͭͧ̀̍̂̑̏n̜̘̹̰̝͈ͮͥͬ͐ͭ̋G̬̯͔̬̬̰͂ͧ͗ͬ̈́ͣ͜ ̦̮̳̰̪̩̦͂͋̅̏͊Mͪͩ̈́̍̚͝ȅ̤͌ ̤̬͇̯ͧ͗̌̓ͬ͟ͅS̥̮̤̭̪̤̀h̡̙̪̭̞͉A̬͡l̪̺͔̲̃͒ͪḺ͡ ̱͉͇̙͐ͭ̕ͅn̹̟͈͍̳͍̋O̡̦̼̺͈̯͒t͈̪̠̳̹ͮ̍̒ ̶̮͓̗̠̻̳̯̔ͩ̉B̷̲̻̮̊r̶̗̩̰ͪĨ̞̭̳̭͔͕͝ͅn̫̝͓̹̬̦̊̑̌ͫͥ̀G̱͔̳̽̽̍̎̔͐ͫ ͎͂ͫ͛̍̒͋͆ͅb͎̻̜͕̙̓̇A̪̭̥̙̱̖͗̃͌͂ͨͮ͛c͒ͨ͏K̹̮̜̬͓͚̩ͬ̅͝ ̹̝͍̝̤̓̃́ͫ̅̀t̪̤ͯͫ̅́̐H̬̼̬̙͈͎͇̎ͯ͒̃̆́ȅ̞͔̙ ̩̜͍̳͇̑D̪̞͉͉͡ê̗̝̬̼̰̑Ȧ̿ͧ̌̄̑̍d̪͎̤̝̎̊͋̐ͦ.̸͎̘̳̣̣͍̮͌̓̌̂
̹̦̟̹̺̂̃͒ͧ
͆̔ͮ̈́̆͟Y̫̱̹̦̊̍̐o̶̪̭̱͔͍̣̞Ů̶̩̳̱̯̹̈̽ ̛͔̫̺̦͉̫̿ͪ͐ẖ͖͍̙̰̃̓ͬ̂̃̏̆A͍̣͚͓̅͑͐ͪͣv͖̱ͅE͙̦ͤͪ̾͛ͅ ͕̺̯͎̩̋̏̊̍͗͗̌͡y͚͓̝̮͖̬ͅO̻͚̝͈̊̏̀ͅu̎́R͚̮̖ͬ́͒͊ ̸̘̘͉͍̪͔̈͋ḻ̘̝̲̯͞Ị͔͕͔̞̼̖͜f̜̣͕̘͚̝̭ͤ̅̈́̎̚E,̟̦̻̓ͪͥ ̟̩̻̱̙̏͌ͪ̎̀n̻͇̙͇̤̿̅̇ͪ̓̀O̩ͫ͟ŵͨ͂̐ͯ̆̀ ̮̬͓̳̩̰͂ͧ̀F̨̲ͥͮͣͤͪľ͙ͪ̐̄̕E̳͖ͫͭ͌͂̎ͫe̖͐̄͐̓̄ ͈̲͖̠̤W̧͚̩̺̟̞̝͊i̜̜ͪ͑̍ͪ̔͂T̠̞̩̃͒̎͛̓̆h̩̻̼̣ͪ͒ͤ ̖͙̗̥͈̲̔̆̈́̓Į͙͔t̛ͭͪ̎̓̓.̨̤̯͉̞̣̭͐ͣ̉́ͬͤ ̆͛ͧͣ
̰̆̂͡
̘͈̽ͥ̀Ṡ̶͕̰͇̜̅ͯͥͥ͌h͎͓͖͚͉͕A̫͓͇̮͑̌́̀̆͘d̺̖͈͊̑̌̈͐̄̋O͌ͣ҉̩̣w̤͖͙̬ͧͯ͑͘ ̺͔͇̜̙̤ͦ͘I͇̟͕ͭ̆̈́̍ș̘̇̃͒̈́ ̻̰̃ͪ̍ͣ͜L̦͌̐͂e̩͓͉̝̯͍͍̊̉̈́I̦̞͑ģ̼̩̹̮̪ͅI̛͇̠̣͎̪ͥ̎ͥơ̙̊̓N͔͙̘͓ͨ̄ͯ͐ͦ.̙̻͚ͮ̀̓

4392471 I hope you know I have unlocked my inner light and can fight off the evil that you are!

Nice!

Do I see a bit of Alan Wake in there? Or was that just my impression?

Nice story though, might even be a Headcanon for the beginning of the Apocalypse, but still nice. :twilightsmile:

4393061 Thanks Raven and no, there was not Alan Wake meant to be seen in this. It is just my somewhat creepy take on the childhood fear of the shadows at night, turning them into motherbucking monsters!

Well, that was interesting.

Almost like a rant.

Almost manic.

I walk away with one disappointment, not knowing more. What the cause is, how it ended, how it was in the middle.

4393843

I walk away with one disappointment, not knowing more.

That was deliberate, it's to let ponies speculate about how it happened and why.

4393849

Yeah, I know.

I do it myself.

Horrible thing to do to people! :facehoof:

4393852 Yet so tempting... :derpytongue2:

Totally worth the read! :pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2:

4393881 Do you understand the meaning behind the shadows?

4393883 Perhaps... But maybe not... They to me could be a darkness within the hearts of all ponies. Or they could be a creature that slowly obsorbs from ponies until they finely take over their bodies and minds.

You really did do an excellent job on this story. Cant wait to see what you have in store for us next :)

4393955 The shadows are your childhood fears my feline equine crossbreed.

4395181 Oh snap... This story just got 120% cooler!

my feline equine crossbreed.


And I like how you said this... I wish Foxes where feline...... >.> But they are canine....

OH! Shadows are killing ponies now? :pinkiegasp: Very interesting indeed. I like it.

4395268 I'm tired okay? That was a six AM for me.

4395475 That they are, and if you do not unlock your inner light, they'll get you too.

4395484 thou art forgiven... :pinkiehappy:

4395517 Danke. I hate waking up earlier than I should.:ajsleepy:

4395524 i know this feelll.....

4395524 I just wish my editers where not busy... I have a new chapter that needs a once over and edited... XD... I mostly do all the work but they point out things... busy week lol

4395539 Well if you ever need help I can do it :3

4395567 That... Sounds very welcome lol... You should check out my story thus far if you'd like.....

4395586 Sure! Mail me the link but I'll have to check it at school.

Beautiful piece here, buddy. :pinkiehappy: Sorry, I never commented. :twilightblush:

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A big thank you to all of you and you will now know, there is a sequel coming.

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Very. This was a great story, and I'm glad to hear that there's going to be more. :twilightsmile:

Hmm, nice and interesting story you have here. :ajsmug:

that was pretty good.:moustache:

Hey, not bad! It's a bit short, so it feels kind of rushed, but it's not bad at all. :3

And look! Your story's doing better than mine is xD

4429008 It kinda helps Slendermare has endorsed it twice now :rainbowlaugh:
And kudzuhaiku has endorsed it too, that kinda helps a beginning fic.
Here's what I like to say; shoot for the moon and land among the stars motherbucker!
I shot to get it out there and get it loved by all, so far I have not landed!

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Exactly as I told you~! ^^ Good work, man~! :twilightsmile:

Hmm.
Stumbled across this.
This is actually a pretty good short story!

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This was the first thing I ever wrote, I thank you for giving a young writer's story a look!

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