Fixed some weird grammatical errors.

Nice chapter. I'm really enjoying this fic so far. Keep up the great work!
Oh, and I'm not sure if it's just my phone, but I think your link is broken.

This is good. This is really good. No, this is awesome .

You know, I heard that in writing, you have to spell out numbers 1-100. DO NOT TRUST ME!
My intellect is only limited and does not know everything.

Also, it seems a little bit too fast. Yes you've got the part where you got all of the events down but, maybe you should go a liiiitle teeny tiny bit slower. Advice for this? Maybe try to put in some little details into those areas where it helps to make a better image of the scene.

Overall : 8/10 - The pace brings it down dramatically (as said before, too fast).
Don't get me wrong, it's still good.

Kudos to you!

*swoons* this is how i want my wedding night to go!!! oy! where is my Rarity??! LOL