Titan Pilot Squad Delta, is one of the most revered squads in the IMC. The members of Delta Squad: Hell, Ares, Snake, and their Specter, Clockwork are deployed to an unexplored plant that is rumored to have a Militia base which is supplying Militia without the IMC knowing. But what they find on the planet's surface will not only change the war, but their lives forever.
I like the story. Other than a few grammer mistakes, it's fine.
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(Also, any constructive criticism would be great help for future chapters and stories!)
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(This is has been a test of the FimFiction comment section system)
I do appreciate you pointing out the grammatical errors with a my story, and I'm sorry if deleting your comment was out of the blue and/or disrespectful. I'm still trying to understand a lot of things with this site because I have not been here long.
For the grammar, my editor's computer broke, so I didn't have the support I needed to make my story as beautiful as I was hoping. Though he should have his computer fixed soon so my grammar shouldn't be so horrible in later chapters. Anyway, Thanks again for the constructive criticism. I always like when people point out flaws in my work, it only means I'll be a better writer for the next thing I write.
I only have one criticism so far. Hell's name, I can see it being a bit confusing whenever the action starts up, People will be saying hell as an expression and it may cause people to think that someone is saying the pilots name. I would suggest if you want to keep his bad ass appeal, naming him something like Hades -which is Greek for Hell- it is commonly used to describe the God instead of the place so it should make things less confusing. Great story so far though and I can's wait to see it continued.
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I understand what you mean the it comes to the name choice. The reason I decided for the name of "Hell" was not only because of it's my username, but because I wanted to be able to throw in a little lol or two like, "What the hell!" or some lame joke like that. I did think of using Hades, but I decided against it because there was already a Greek god's name being used.
I look forward to future chapters, man.
It good so far
So, we wait another three years?
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thats what i believe would be happening.....
the chapter was posted 2016, its now 2018 one more year to go for the third chapter!
woot~!
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