When the New Kid and the Boys end up in Equestria, little do they know that their game will have more consequences than they could ever imagined. However, they are too engaged into their game to notice.
This is a great story, hope you don't take to long of making more chapters for it. i need to know what happen next I NEED MORE CHAPTERS FOR THIS STORY.
You know I loved the conversation between Big Mac and Douchebag, Scootaloo complaining about quests, Scootaloo and Apple Bloom insulting Sweetie Belle's status as a glass cannon, Stan abandoning the. Minotaurs, and AB being unaware of the meaning of Douchebag's name. Keep up the good work.
Comment posted by Moongaze14 deleted Oct 4th, 2014
Think you meant flower ponies here. I do enjoy how well you describe the story with the details and then go into the usual South Park humor. With Cartman gaining control over the changelings and I'm guessing the New Kid with the crusaders, I think Asepsis is screwed.
5102051 Worldbuilding is necessary for a good adventure story. Also I want to avoid major plot holes. I want things established so when they become central to the story latter on, it won't seem like I'm pulling it out of nowhere.
To me it's more important to have a plot. I have an outline of this story along of timeline of events and even have the ending planned. So I'm sure I'm done with most of the exposition. The story should be picking up pace now since most of the major characters have been introduced and settings have been set.
“It’s them!” screamed Rose as she pointed at something with her hoof. The New Kid saw that it was a gang of bunnies; each of them was wearing a coat or jacket. Some of them had headbands others were wearing bandanas and a few of them had sunglasses. They were making rude gestures at the flower ponies before running off and vanishing from sight.
Captain Asepsis followed the guard to where room where the creature was. Then when the captain saw her, he couldn’t believe it. Never before had he laid his eyes on such a sight. “Oh my,” he stuttered, “Sh-she she’s so…Kawaii!”
It looks like Silver Star going to need the charms of Princess Kenny to get out of this.
Just wanted to say, so far, this is one of the funniest crossovers I've ever read. I'll make more detailed comments on each chapter later on. I hope you end up finishing this!
Normally Big McIntosh would have scolded the fillies for such language but he was distracted with his conversation with the New Kid to notice. It's rare to find an intellectual that spoke his language.
Oh mah god...
This chapter is best chapter.
And thus, Kenny was found.
Celestia really, really needs to improve the Royal Guard standards. They cannot even plot treason properly.
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Well to be honest, since when has the Royal Guard ever been shown to be competent in the show?
This is a great story, hope you don't take to long of making more chapters for it. i need to know what happen next I NEED MORE CHAPTERS FOR THIS STORY.
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Holy crap your right
You know I loved the conversation between Big Mac and Douchebag, Scootaloo complaining about quests, Scootaloo and Apple Bloom insulting Sweetie Belle's status as a glass cannon, Stan abandoning the. Minotaurs, and AB being unaware of the meaning of Douchebag's name. Keep up the good work.
Think you meant flower ponies here.
I do enjoy how well you describe the story with the details and then go into the usual South Park humor. With Cartman gaining control over the changelings and I'm guessing the New Kid with the crusaders, I think Asepsis is screwed.
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Worldbuilding is necessary for a good adventure story. Also I want to avoid major plot holes. I want things established so when they become central to the story latter on, it won't seem like I'm pulling it out of nowhere.
To me it's more important to have a plot. I have an outline of this story along of timeline of events and even have the ending planned. So I'm sure I'm done with most of the exposition. The story should be picking up pace now since most of the major characters have been introduced and settings have been set.
here comes princess kenny
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I think the Woodland Critters might have something to do with that.
And I wonder what Cartman is doing back at the hive? I bet it be nothing left of Chrysalis's hive like something like this:
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It looks like Silver Star going to need the charms of Princess Kenny to get out of this.
yes, Yes, YES, YES!!!!!! Undoubtedly worth the wait!
So...much...YES!!!!
Just wanted to say, so far, this is one of the funniest crossovers I've ever read. I'll make more detailed comments on each chapter later on. I hope you end up finishing this!
please side the new kid with cartman!.
Omg... I thought shipping New x Bloom was a joke...
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Hahahaha, "Ass pisses"
The secrets of Universe has SOLVE!
he could also talk to Vinyl like that