The End of Days has come to Equestria. The Four Stallions of the Apocalypse ride across the realm. Twilight Sparkle finds a way to safeguard the kingdom, but it will require a grave sacrifice... and some help from her friends.
4080091 You're lucky it's broken up into chapters at all - originally, it was just gonna be a single stand-alone story. Then, 'bout 80 pages in, I suddenly went "Wait... maybe I should put in a chapter-break somewhere." As for breaking it up by ritual-part, that wouldn't work very well, since the rituals are getting progressively longer. Chapter 2 is longer than Chapter 1, even through Chapter 2 is nothing BUT the third ritual... and the next part's probably gonna wind up being even longer, despite my best efforts. Being brief is NOT one of my skills.
4083698 yes sadly every single chapter over 12k words is insane... 4k is a bit short, 8k is nice 12k is the longest you can endure without going mad~~~
sorry bro, but... Split the story in 8k up to 12k chapters everything over 14k is already
4083943 @BlakeTheDrake, of cause our little rent does not mean we reject your story for its content. Your issue is formating, and I have neither the nerves nor the time to offer Editorship. So I recommend to get an Editor or to edit the story your self. there are certain groups who are willing to help.
4083943 (And Leux too, I suppose) What is and isn't considered proper formatting is highly localized. Using paragraphs to denote direct speech is common in some places, and not in others. Either way, it's never been my style. Quotation-marks do a perfectly adequate job of demonstrating when someone's speaking, and I'd rather use paragraphs to denote changes in the action.
Mind, I'm not saying one approach is more 'right' than the other. It's just interesting to see how a particular approach can become accepted as The Way To Do Things in a given community... once you get used to reading stories with a given formatting, all other approaches start to seem 'Wrong'.
I don't think I've ever had to read this much on this site. Still, aside from everyone's "split it into more paragraphs for easier reading!" Arguments, I think this was a great story thus far. Good job.
4084711 Every book I've ever read has new paragraphs for new speakers. It's not a matter of style, it's readability. Seeing three different speakers, one right after the other, is confusing.
Also, there's just too much happening in each chapter. I get that it's an orgy, but good god, there's only so many ways you can describe someone getting fucked in the ass.
You sir are bizarre. Would like your face to meet my hand (repeatedly). When the Apocalypse happens, I'll see you in Hell's pits. Hope you like the heat~.
Oh, for your information I would not have done that to Twilight, and I would have left Armor alone, the sun and moon avatars would have disappeared, and the pink alicorn with that blue heart on her ass would likely be insane.
ouch. already that amount of dislikes for your first story that's 50k words long.
feelsbadbro
chapter are too long should of realest 10000 words then got feed back
4080071
Considering how long it's been up, guess how many of those dislikes have actually read the 50k word story before downvoting?
4080091 You're lucky it's broken up into chapters at all - originally, it was just gonna be a single stand-alone story. Then, 'bout 80 pages in, I suddenly went "Wait... maybe I should put in a chapter-break somewhere." As for breaking it up by ritual-part, that wouldn't work very well, since the rituals are getting progressively longer. Chapter 2 is longer than Chapter 1, even through Chapter 2 is nothing BUT the third ritual... and the next part's probably gonna wind up being even longer, despite my best efforts. Being brief is NOT one of my skills.
4080189
Yeah. This... is too damn long.
4083698 yes sadly every single chapter over 12k words is insane... 4k is a bit short, 8k is nice 12k is the longest you can endure without going mad~~~
sorry bro, but... Split the story in 8k up to 12k chapters everything over 14k is already
Also, for the love of everything oats and apples, NEW PARAGRAPH FOR EVERY NEW SPEAKER!!! It's frustrating as hell as it is now.
4083943
@BlakeTheDrake, of cause our little rent does not mean we reject your story for its content.
Your issue is formating, and I have neither the nerves nor the time to offer Editorship.
So I recommend to get an Editor or to edit the story your self. there are certain groups who are willing to help.
well ready ya later~
4083848 I've seen chapters in other stories with over 60K words each.
... I don't like blood. The virgin hymen stuff is okay, but wars hooks are just... nope.
4083943 (And Leux too, I suppose)
What is and isn't considered proper formatting is highly localized. Using paragraphs to denote direct speech is common in some places, and not in others. Either way, it's never been my style. Quotation-marks do a perfectly adequate job of demonstrating when someone's speaking, and I'd rather use paragraphs to denote changes in the action.
Mind, I'm not saying one approach is more 'right' than the other. It's just interesting to see how a particular approach can become accepted as The Way To Do Things in a given community... once you get used to reading stories with a given formatting, all other approaches start to seem 'Wrong'.
So Fluttershy and Pinkie are gonna get to join in on the gang-rape train?
4084778
Seems like the plan
I don't think I've ever had to read this much on this site. Still, aside from everyone's "split it into more paragraphs for easier reading!" Arguments, I think this was a great story thus far. Good job.
'being brief is not one of my skills'
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Alas it seems linking is not one of mine.
Above should be fluttershy going 'yay'.
4084711
Every book I've ever read has new paragraphs for new speakers. It's not a matter of style, it's readability. Seeing three different speakers, one right after the other, is confusing.
Also, there's just too much happening in each chapter. I get that it's an orgy, but good god, there's only so many ways you can describe someone getting fucked in the ass.
please keep going, I love the story and i like the fact that there are a lot of words.
This shits dark but for some reason I cant stop reading it
You sir are bizarre. Would like your face to meet my hand (repeatedly). When the Apocalypse happens, I'll see you in Hell's pits. Hope you like the heat~.
Oh, for your information I would not have done that to Twilight, and I would have left Armor alone, the sun and moon avatars would have disappeared, and the pink alicorn with that blue heart on her ass would likely be insane.