A colt is brought into a prison for murdering his schoolyard bully. Though everyone considers him guilty, he tries to prove his innocence. The cell has a spell of solitary confinement, and he slowly goes insane. Than, a wild rumor spreads and he is the only one who can stop the evil behind it. Can he prove his innocence, regain his sanity, break out, and stop the evil before it's too late?
Page generated in 0.094 seconds
Total duration
1,053 users online
76,434 hits today, 2,156,967 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
I definitely like the concept. You could do with a lot of proof reading though.
Yeah I need help D:
The italics doesn't work
So. . . He's a young colt still in Cheerilee's class, which would most likely make him an elementary student... And he's being tossed into jail? Not to mention how OOC Twilight is... Otherwise, the story is okay, I didn't see any glaring grammar mistakes worth mentioning.
4173987 I see your point, but I'm assuming Ponyville has only 1 jail, and they throw him in there because they have nowhere else. Still, most stories would be absolutely horrible if everything made sense.
So, They didn't even let him speak in his own defense or let him get his side of the story, seems like a massive breach in ethics
4258874 Supposedly his parents hired a lawyer to speak in defense, but his parents didn't wanted to be prejudiced, so they didn't some. Silver wasn't present at the time because they were worried about him getting angry because of a horrible defense system. So...yeah.
So... you just said he's guilty, and then like two sentences later you establish that the story is about whether he can prove he's innocent?
>he murdered his bully
>he goes insane
>can he stay sane and prove his innocence
are you fucking kidding?
4299528 You're a whore! Stealing my thunder!
4299533
images.encyclopediadramatica.es/thumb/0/04/Doublesbackwards.jpg/180px-Doublesbackwards.jpg
4299533
1. I'm new. I'm not a genius.
2. What I'm trying to say is that society in the story (now) considers him guilty, and he's trying to prove his innocent (chasing after a loss cause)
3. He goes insane and than tries to regain his sanity(subconscious talking "get it together" cliché).
4. Thanks... but you don't have to be mean. You can just point it out and not swear at me for it.
4299541 4306911
Changed it. Happy now?