Marcus has a pretty normal life, complete with a job, college, girlfriend, and an apartment. Everyday was the same thing, he gets up, attends his college classes, goes to work, comes home, plays videogames, and passes out. Everything about his life was absolutely normal.
Well, it was for awhile at least...
One morning after a very intense collage graduation party, everything changed. He wakes up to find that he was no longer a member of the human species, but now a stallion from the little girls show, My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic, which has a fan base of male and female teens and young adults. With the entire fan base, a lord of chaos, and some weird guys in black suits and ties trying to get a piece of him, his "normal life" has just gotten a lot more complicated.
*Character tags will be added as the story progresses*
*First-Person perspective story*
*PoE Concept*
*Rated Teen for some adult themes and cussing*
*Gore Tag for minor violence*
This is my first and perhaps my last attempt at a comedy depending on the feedback it receives, so don't forget to let me know what you think of it!
so, I just upload this and it already has two dislikes... yeah... is it really that bad?
4063669 No idea. I haven't read it, and won't read it (not my type of fic) but people might be downvoting because of the title.
4063675 So basically the title sucks, awesome... I'll keep that in mind.
4063669 i like it i cant wat for more
4063774 Three people out of five tend to disagree, and in all honesty, I am probably not going waste my time to continue with a story hardly anyone likes. With a ratio of 2/3 in likes and dislikes, I'd be surprised anyone else even looks at this thing.
Edit: So unless something dramatic happens and I somehow have an acceptable like/dislike ratio. Then I will probably continue it.
Edit 2: So, yeah, that is awkward, something dramatic just happened.
4063894 uhhhhh.... this is awkward...
Actually, the "yet to be edited" part in the chapter title really doesn't do you any favor either. If it's not edited, you shouldn't post it. I know I almost turned away from the story because of that. Ponification can easily be looked down on, since it is both common and not often well-done. Still, while no one can force you to continue updating, the only way to get more upvotes is to improve your work and write more. That's entirely up to you.
Anyway, I did give it a try. It's not bad, but it needs polish. At the very least, it has a good lenght for a first chapter and there's a few intriguing things about Discord's comment. The tone so far looks light-hearted, and a few reactions are WTF worthy, the comedy tag works in your favor there. I encourage you to continue writing, if not this story, then another.
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That... is good to know, I will try to avoid that next time. Thank you that is very good to know.
You have no idea what this comment means to me, to know that my writing is at least decent if not the best. I'll definitely continue to write this story now that I know it is at least enjoyable to read. Thank you.
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It's "college" not collage.
4064749 thanks for spotting that
Very good, just watch your tenses. You sloped into present tense a couple of times
i think you mean "passed out"
Other than that, this is really f
king amusing, Keep on trucking
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Human to Pony fics are generally disliked off the bat, unless they're by a famous author.
Sometimes this fanbase can be cruel...
Anyways, do you by any chance need an editor? *Puts on cheesiest grin ever.*
I offer my services as an editor, if you want them
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Alright, Thanks you guys for for pointing that out!
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Thank you for your offers, I am actually looking for an editor right now, although I am pretty new to this kind of thing and I am kind of confused on how that exactly works.
I assume that means you read over what I write and tell me what needs to be fixed or otherwise better written right? Or is that the definition of a proof reader? Or am I being an idiot?
4066779 A proofreader is someone who looks over the edited piece and provides feedback.
An editor is someone who looks through the story and fixes mistakes and generally cleans up the story.
If you want my help, just PM me.
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If you want my some help, just give me a holler
Yep, that exactly what I mean
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I always have a tendency to group the two of them together
4063914 Ok, You Don't Understand What I Meant... What I Meant, Is I Like The Story... Not I Enjoy The Misery Of This Poor Main Character...
4067838 I pretty sure I understood you correctly, I said this was awkward because people suddenly started liking the story when I though it was going to absolutely fail.
4067861 Atleast It's Nothing Like My Story, It Was My First... It Is A Complete Fail Dough...
please continue this
Duuuuude! Awesome chapter!
WE MUST HAS MOAR!
*picks up shotgun* Didn't say anything about mah boomstick
Don't worry, it was a good chapters
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Army of Darkness FTW
4201837 I'll keep that in mind >_>
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You better
he is an a-hole
4204161 Who's an asshole?
Edit: You can reply. I don't bite, I pinkie promise.
4201837 http://img1.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20100805052839/borderlands/images/2/2d/Fry_Boom_Stick.pngyou mean this boomstick, sir? Took me a while to find...
Iin the words of Garfield, "NEVER ask how things can get any worse. Things will ALWAYS find a way."
This ought to be good. :trollestia