Huh. I think I like this. Your story is moving a bit fast, to the point that it almost feels like you started writing it from the middle and just never bothered filling in the beginning; but the characters are likeable enough that I don't feel alienated by the lack of context. Have a fave and an upvote.
Thank you. I thought it was a bit rushed as well but there was a certain way I wanted to execute the plot so I went with it.
As for the beginning, I wanted to show how RD felt when she was alone, without her friends. I could've started it at an earlier time, but again the way I wanted the plot to go threw that idea out.
Thanks for the remarks, you gave me an upvote and criticism, whereas most people who give me downvotes won't even leave a simple comment as to why
people who give me downvotes won't even leave a simple comment as to why
I know and I hate that. I mean, you just read a free story. For free. Somebody spent time making that story, getting it as perfect as they felt they could, and then posted it for the whole damned world to see. While the reader is in no way obligated to like the finished product, at least respect the work that went into it.
4046903 Yeah it's ridiculous, but then there's always a little bit of the ridiculous in our passions. I mean, I'm a grown man and a vet, yet I'm spending my morning delaying my PT to read about technicolor ponies from a children's show. Ridiculous? Absolutely. But still fun.
Thanks for the follow, even though I don't write for this site. Have some reciprocity.
I try to follow and group up with people of similar ideals to me.
I'm pretty ridiculous as well. I haul a laptop bag laden down with electronics that I've built and a laptop specifically used for checking fimfiction during pre-cal.
I also look pretty goofy wearing a set of circumnaural headsets down the hall, but, as with ponies, I'm passionate about audio. I guess that there will always be that bias and willingness to do anything for your passion whether it be good or bad
thank you. I think I have the antidote to the first chapter rush though....I don't want to announce it here so is it ok if I pm you? I would really love someones help who understands the stories downfalls.
4052180 sure do whatever you like. Though if it, the pm, isn't sent soon I might not be able to answer for a while. I got work and stuff so if I do it'll be later tonight
Huh. I think I like this. Your story is moving a bit fast, to the point that it almost feels like you started writing it from the middle and just never bothered filling in the beginning; but the characters are likeable enough that I don't feel alienated by the lack of context. Have a fave and an upvote.
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Yeah I've always prefered more human in anthro than pony. As I said, I could make the faces resemble ponies, but I don't think it's going to happen.
If I get complaints I'll remove it though.
Thanks for the heads up.
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Thank you. I thought it was a bit rushed as well but there was a certain way I wanted to execute the plot so I went with it.
As for the beginning, I wanted to show how RD felt when she was alone, without her friends. I could've started it at an earlier time, but again the way I wanted the plot to go threw that idea out.
Thanks for the remarks, you gave me an upvote and criticism, whereas most people who give me downvotes won't even leave a simple comment as to why
So I thank you
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I know and I hate that. I mean, you just read a free story. For free. Somebody spent time making that story, getting it as perfect as they felt they could, and then posted it for the whole damned world to see. While the reader is in no way obligated to like the finished product, at least respect the work that went into it.
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So entirely true.
In the time it's taken for this exchange I've received another down vote, but no comment as to why
4046828 Probably the human or anthro tags. Some people like to aimbot those things.
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That's ridiculous. Isn't this a fandom of love and tolerance?
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I say this for the benefit of others. I realize this happens it's just stupid that it does.
4046903 Yeah it's ridiculous, but then there's always a little bit of the ridiculous in our passions. I mean, I'm a grown man and a vet, yet I'm spending my morning delaying my PT to read about technicolor ponies from a children's show. Ridiculous? Absolutely. But still fun.
Thanks for the follow, even though I don't write for this site. Have some reciprocity.
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I try to follow and group up with people of similar ideals to me.
I'm pretty ridiculous as well. I haul a laptop bag laden down with electronics that I've built and a laptop specifically used for checking fimfiction during pre-cal.
I also look pretty goofy wearing a set of circumnaural headsets down the hall, but, as with ponies, I'm passionate about audio. I guess that there will always be that bias and willingness to do anything for your passion whether it be good or bad
I wove dis story!
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I tried to insinuate that this had been going on for a while and that Soarin had just gotten up the courage to talk to her in any respect.
To be totally honest I thought the same thing though. I would love to have a second go at it but at this point it's a bit too late.
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I should've made her seem more drunk because then the situation would have made a bit more sense. People do really dumb crap when they're drunk
4046644 This.
Keep going I'm roving it a fav and upvote as well.
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thank you. I think I have the antidote to the first chapter rush though....I don't want to announce it here so is it ok if I pm you? I would really love someones help who understands the stories downfalls.
4052180 sure do whatever you like. Though if it, the pm, isn't sent soon I might not be able to answer for a while. I got work and stuff so if I do it'll be later tonight