Hiatus: Hey readers, don't worry. The story is still being developed, but for now I'm going to focus on organizing my thoughts into a series bible. This started as a fun little writing project, but I'm going to try to finish this story as fast as I can. I'm not going to be uploading any new chapters for a time, but I promise the story will go on! Thanks for your patience. If you have questions, concerns, or feedback on the story as it is now, then feel free to message me here. You can also e-mail me at grendeer.grendock@gmail.com.
An Alicorn from a distant land enters Equestria looking for help. He meets many friends along the way, and perhaps, finds comfort for all the pain of his past. But what exactly drove him to enter Equestria? How will Celestia and the other royals react to the presence of a previously unknown Alicorn?
If anyone would like to help out with the story, I currently need:
A critique (for feedback on the story)
An artist (for cover image)
Disclaimer: The Dark tag is there more as a precaution than actually because the story is dark. I will be adding character tags as characters make their appearances in the story.
Spoilers: Lightning Quill's past is not nearly as happy as the canon arks are. He has lost pretty much everything a pony can lose over the years (gained some of it back, yes, but still lost so much). Hence the Dark tag.
This isn't too bad, but it probably needs work. For once, I'm not going to hold having an alicorn OC against you, as it seems like you might give a decent explanation. Also, the name makes sense, sort of. You don't need to re-describe things that the audience already knows. It would be better if, at some point, you got an actual description of the OC. I'm also OK with the main character having special powers, as it seems like there will be an explanation. Still, most ponies seem to be unable to teleport. Very few characters have ever teleported.
I can only think of Twilight, Rarity, and Celestia off of the top of my head.
I would love to know who thumbed this down, and why. Unfortunately, I doubt that the shields of the anonymous internet will ever drop.
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Sorry for not responding to you in a decent time. I only just now realized how rude that is.
If you don't mind, I'd like to ask a few questions.
1. What is your opinion of the story now that it is a little more developed?
2. How am I depicted characters, are there any interactions that are out of character?
3. What is something you would like to see in the future (other than what you've already specified)?
Once again, sorry for not responding to your comment for such a long time, I promise to do better in the future.