Everyone has heard the stories of Fillydelphia, from the Stable Dweller herself down to the lowliest slaves that survived the unspeakable horrors and hardships. Many forget those who weren't slaves or slavers, but they have stories too...
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I like the fallout stats thing
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Heh, hopefully I won't get tired of drawing Pipgriff and perk images.
So I finally got around to starting to read this, and I really do think this'll keep me well occupied over the next couple weeks. I like the character you've established. Competent, but not overpowered protagonists are often hard to come by, even harder to properly flesh out some times.
I love the squad dynamic already. You seem... familiar with the concept behind a lot of that, the inspection in particular.
That's all for now, I'm sure I'll have more once I get further.
I know his name is Kasimir, not Kashmir, but I still had that Led Zeppelin song stuck in my head for the first thousand words or so. xD
This is neat! I'm interested to see where it goes. I'll probably make more elaborate comments in later chapters. This one was just an introduction, so there's not much to comment on.
One thing to be careful of in the future is introducing too many characters at once. I'm not a very clever reader, so I've already lost track of some of them. I've got Kasimir, "Serge-ent," Glitter, Lt. Blackfeathers, Ida, "the friendly chick whose name starts with C," and one or two others. Obviously, I could scroll up and figure out who I'm missing, but I wanted to point out which ones stuck and which ones didn't.
Those little PipGriff doodles are amazing.
Just started reading this. I really do like that this story is from a griffon's perspective. It's interesting because I haven't seen that often enough and I'm curious why that doesn't happen.
On a slightly different note, I love the pictures you have to go with the perks and traits. They have just the right amount of simplness to fit into Fallout styled images.
Pipgriff is best griff and makes me smile! I thought that it would only be a one time thing in the prologue, a lot of people pulls out the bells and whistles for that one, but I am glad to see that they are a returning part of the story.
Dosn't really have so much more to say, did not find any nitpicks, so that is a pleasant surprise for my pre-reader brain, will properly say some more when I learn the characters a little bit more.