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So sorry everyone. I actually have been sitting on this last chapter for about four days. Completely forgot about it. So here it is at last. Let me know the hype.
4606306 please don't kill applejack. kill fluttershy! she won't mind!
4606327 Was I going to kill off Applejack? Huh, I hadn't noticed....
4606333 i like to get in my two cents before something happens. it doesn't do any good to be like 'don't kill so-and-so!' if they just died. that'd mean a whole chapter rewrite, and i wouldn't do that to a writer unless the whole chapter needed to be redone.
4606355 I completely get you on that. I'm just making light of my own story. Honestly I have no idea what I am doing, so she might still die or might not, I don't know, and that's part of the fun for me as well. I do so appreciate your concern and comments.
4606400 honestly, out of all of twilights friends, it'd be applejack that would either pull her back from the edge, or keep her from it in the first place. her friends mean more to her than Sombra, but RD is to loyal (and now to blood thirsty) to keep her sane. AJ is brutally honest, and twilight has always respected that, even in the series.
4606415 Yeah you got a valid point on that...Maybe thats way shes dying right now? She's the only one who can save Twilight!
4606420 Well, I'd like to see Twilight's reaction to this. Maybe the death of one of her friends will be enough to make her turn on Sombra, since the black crystals were his doing. Ok, she finds out Applejack is dead and Sombra was the cause and plans to kill him, but keeps it a secret, And when they conquer Equestria, that's when she kills him.
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The way I see it, any character's death is getting on the thin ice. There always has to be reason for it. Reasons can be various usualy to advance plot in some way. Even pointless death by speeding train can be used to describe how flickle life can be. Death is usualy used in bad way, when author gets lost and just kills character he has problems to write. Rest of the cast overcome it in one chapter and he finishes his story.
Also presentation can be important, when character dies, it should be known, that within established timeframe nothing could be done to prevent it. Currently I'm wondering why Princesses don't help in some way Applejack, they fought Sombra before. Alicorn magic can affect time, they might slow timeflow to give more time to doctors. (Or dozens of other things.)
To make some example from My little Portal 5. In scene after fall of Canterlot when Luna sacrifices herself to protect elements while leaving, I did not liked how leisurely she was telling them goodbye just to be attacked at the same moment last pony was entering. To me it looked like animated example from TV Tropes. Her death had reason but it lacked in presentation.
I realy liked how you turned Rainbow's loyalty into fault and used it against her. This is exactly what I like in Dark stories. I call it "grey" moment / scene. Character being given choice with only bad outcomes and trying carefuly pick lesser of two evils.
4608450 I fully agree with you. The last thing I want is lack of presentation. Everything I write is intended to be integral to the story Im trying to tell. When I kill a character their was a valid reason for it, if no action was taken to prevent the death their was a reason for it. If a reason seems strange, a second look may be worthwhile.
On a happier note, I appreciate the praise for the story, and thanks for the advice/comments.
hmm...
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Think two weeks since last chap? right maybe? Yeah, anyway back from vacation so expect a new chap in the next day or two...or three.
Is Sombra meant to be a telepath in this story?