After going to Sugercube Corner, Derpy finds out that they didn't get a shipment of the ingredients needed for the best muffins in the world. Derpy goes on a epic quest, and unbeknownst to her, her children decide to follow. Now Derpy, Dinky, Sparkler, and Dizzy Hooves are all on the ride of their lives, and it will involve muffins. Lots and lots of muffins.
Credit to StarryOak on Deviantart for the picture and help with the story. Also credit to hlissner on Deviantart for the locations in the story http://hlissner.deviantart.com/art/Equestria-and-beyond-rev-8-1-253465186
Chapters (2)
EPIC IDEA, this is going to be a fun ride.
Two Words...Road trip!! or in this case Sea trip!!!
I like this story. It has a few grammar issues mostly using the wrong your. I think it could be a great adventure, I am looking forward to seeing more.
this is going to be fun. I can tell!
funny only a few issues, mostly the grammar i.e. wrong your, missing words. Also, what is Ditzy's relationship with the Doctor (are they married, dating, friends) even if he is only a bit player i found this lack of exposition off putting, just personal taste.
PS is Dizzy a thing or did you make her up?
anyway i like this story.
OH GOD! It's gonna be interesting.
Dizzy's from the Cutie Pox episode right? She's the derp-eyed filly? Yeah, Dizzy is definately a better name than Derpsy.
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i believe Dinky Hooves is the one ur refering to, im also confused over this dizzy hooves.
created just for this story?
The origin of Dizzy Hooves.
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as i mentioned before the author describes three children
Sparkler, Dinky Hooves, and Dizzy Hooves, three ponies
i kno that the one in ur image is dinky.
363715 No, Dinky Hooves is a unicorn, the pony I'm refering to is a pegasus.
This is a picture I submitted to My Little Brony.
[img]C:\Users\JoeyXPS15\Pictures\Pony\EpisodeScreenShots\360da853-3e57-4f31-ad47-161690810fad.jpg[/img]
Edit: I don't think that I put the image in right, but 363845 has a similar picture.
Thank you for the comments. I am aware there are a few errors and will fix them when I get the time. To clarify, Dizzy Hooves is the small version of Derpy in the Cutie Poxs episode (She is the youngest), Sparkler is the purple unicorn seen with Dinky at the sisterhooves social (Yes, she is adopted), and Dinky is just Dinky.
The next chapter will possibly be longer than the first (Why is the first chapter almost always the shortest, seriously), and will focus around Derpy starting her adventure.
Again, thanks for the comments and the good feedback. I plan to make this story one heck of a ride, so sit tight,
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Shes the mini derpy in cutie pox
I like this story so far, I hope it continues to be a fun read.
For those who are wondering about the chapter 2a (Derpy), I'm splitting the Derpy and Dinky parts. I felt it just made sense to split them up, that's all. That and I haven't finished the Dinky part in chapter 2 yet
YES! It is here! Prasie the Muffins!
this i like
Oh god that wall of text! Please put a line of space between paragraphs.
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png , fillies and gentlehorse! We are joining you in yet another installation of Stalinview!
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png Today we are looking at the story about muffins!
i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png Mmmmmmm. Muffins....
i39.tinypic.com/35bxab6.png Muffins are good with vodka!
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png Is that muffins are good? Let's dig into "My Kingdom for a Muffin" to find out!
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"It was beautiful. there was nothing but muffins as far as her eyes could see. Derpy Hooves smiled widely, her yellow eyes sparkling in delight. As she pranced happily across the fluffy muffin fields, muffins began to frolic with her, and it was so much fun, she could stay forever"
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png Muffin variation of Spike's ice cream dream?
i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png Muffins!
i39.tinypic.com/35bxab6.png Also, i have read gen I pony comic long time ago. There, Spike got a birthday present from a princess - a MOUNTAIN OF ICECREAM! I think thats where this dream came from. And Spike's addiction to icecream.
"Honey, what are you doing on the floor?" Derpy looked up, only to find her eye meeting with her husbands bright blue eyes, one of her eyes drifting down to the floor. The light brown stallion was looking at her incredulously.
i39.tinypic.com/35bxab6.png Wow. That's something new. Derpy has a husband? Poor guy...
""I fell down the stairs... i'm a clumsy pony, aren't I?" Derpy sighed, frowning. "
i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png Wrong. You're answer must be something like "Trying to make a tunnel to magical land of Nepal"
i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png And make a "You Don't Say" reaction!
"Doctor Whooves" i41.tinypic.com/25q56v5.png
i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png Husband. Doctor Whooves. Indeed, a poor guy. In his twelve incarnation didn't had a marriage, but in his pony one has.
i39.tinypic.com/35bxab6.png Guess he decided to stop this "Tardy" thing
"The Doctors voice rang out from above"
i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png The Doctor's. "Doctors" means there are many doctors
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png Hafta admit, i know a very little about Derpy in fandom. Is it really normal for her to marry and have a kid? i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png How old is she? Thirty? She looks at the same age with Rainbow Dash...
"Sparkler"
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png A who? Sparkler is Rarity's prototype pony. From gen I.
i39.tinypic.com/35bxab6.png Youth potion?
i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png A cunning plan to get a muffin. This is becoming interesting!
"She saw Pinkie Pie at the counter, eating a delicious cupcake, and licking that delicious frosting."
i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png "...And blowing off bits she could've earn by selling this sweets"
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png What are ya, a Kyle Shwartz?
i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png Who..?
i39.tinypic.com/35bxab6.png Nevermind.
"And so they have started their quest. A quest... to follow mommy!"
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png Nice
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"Chapter 2a: The Quest Begins (Derpy)"
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png Hmmm, so you decided to devide our protagonists and give them their own versions of chapters? Smart move, actually
i39.tinypic.com/35bxab6.png GIANT_HEAVY_BLOCK_OF_TEXT_APPROACHING..!
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png Oh god this is heavy... It is hard to read
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png God, Derpy, why are you traveling to foreign country to get muffins? You afraid to be fired from work yet leaving ON ADVENTURE IN FOREIGN LANDS?
i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png Boss. It's Derpy.
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png ...
i39.tinypic.com/35bxab6.png At least she could've asked Doctor Whooves to travel with her to past to get muffins...
"She could be just like Daring Do and cut though vines with her knife! That would be so awesome."
i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png With knife it will be stupid, not awesome. Knif is VERY SHORT. You really should've bought machete...
"A body emerged from the bushes"
i39.tinypic.com/35bxab6.png Wild body appeared!
Okay, OVERVIEW:
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png Very nice little story Stalin likes. Good premace, Derpy as protagonist. Nice!
i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png Although there are some minor problems with pacing and blocky text. You really should concider paragraphing.
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png Anyway, waiting for next chapter!
VERDIKT: recommended for all Derpy fans!
Thanks for the review! Heh, I'll fix that "doctors" mistake.
Like you said, you don't know a lot about the Derpy fandom and the small little bits. Sparkler is the pony with Dinky at the sisterhooves social. The reason why I didn't make Doctor Whooves go with Derpy or the kids is the fact I know little to nothing about Dr. Who. Maybe I will someday. I can imagine him sitting at home wondering where everyone is.
And that big block of text... yeah, i'll get to that soon.
Some parts of the story such as Cranky inviting Derpy to him home seems sorta rushed even for me. We was a bit too willing to take Derpy in. It's not that big of a deal, Derpy will leave next chapter (Three).
Again, thanks for the review and I will be happy to see the other stories you look at.
You know something is an absolutely crazy idea when Pinkie of all ponies is the voice of reason.
and thus I wait for the next chapter
731051 I put the story on hiatus for two reason:
1) I have no pre-reader anymore
2) I've never been in the mood or never been able to write more. Plus, I've felt that the story would just run with the same thing, just going on an adventure with little to no story other than trying to get a muffin. The idea is good, Derpy going on a quest to get a muffin, but I feel people can pull it off much better than me.
I might make a new story soon, possibly about Fluttershy and a mix of characters