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3ternalWait
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3ternalWait
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Disturbing. Yet good.
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I am glad you've enjoyed it.
Well done this chapter made me gain hope that others don't see all gryphons as complete plotholes.:3
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Thank you and yes, that's exactly what I've been intending. While gryphons naturally do give off a vibe of being ferocious and warlike creatures, I don't think that automatically makes them, as you have put it, plotholes.
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Thanks, but I've already PMed someone from the proof-reading group recently, so hopefully the quality of the chapters will be better soon. I should also probably remove from the description that I am looking for pre-readers for now. But thank you for the offer
First contact with a griffon? That's new. Point for originality.
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Thanks. And yeah, I've read enough fanfics on this site to know that most HiE end up (or rather start) with humans at the ponies' doorstep. I just tried something less overused. I hope you enjoy the rest of WHHD
Indeed there is a lot of telling, but you show enough for it to be more than just a description. Well done.
... did he seriously barge in on Jack and Jessica... having adult time?
I just hope they appreciated his concern.
Oh God, that's so fucking rich!
Plot twist!
Also, YOU GOT MAIL!
I have a feeling that "God dammit, Paul!" is gonna be a recurring line in this story...
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Sorry, couldn't help myself
Ok, this deserves a lot of respect from me. Few authors I know would actually go back and change things to make it better. Thanks for also putting this here as I tend to miss a lot of author blogs as I get buried in irrelevant blog posts and kind of just do a quick skim to see if anything important happens...or just ignore them all. Thanks also for putting effort in making this story better and being willing to change the vision you had when it wasn't working.
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Thanks for opening my eyes, so to speak, and taking the time to do so. Also no need to thank me, I am here to learn after all.
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4752553 D'awwww, we should have a group hug! Er, uh... By that I mean a totally manly, and professional handshake near the water cooler to signify the mutual respect between us readers and the author.
Obviously.
(P.S. The next time you willingly post something grammatically incorrect without checking it first, I will eat your arms)
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Sorry about that. Moved to the upper part of the page to hopefully cause less disturbance.
EDIT: Did it with most chapters where I felt it might be causing a disturbance in the
forcereading experience.I POSTED COMMENTS BEFORE IT WAS COOL.
And also before the chapter existed.
Get rekt.
Fuck me. Slavers. CHILD slavers.
Now I wanna see dogs whimpering in their own blood pools.
They're still slavers. And they sure didn't feel like showing that much consideration for the children of their slaves.
I find that the Author's notes are starting to become kinda obtrusive and definitely disrupt the feelings one get from reading, so I'll be doing this by comments now where they won't be so blaring and will ensure easier transition between different chapters for new readers that don'T have to wait for new chapters (until they hit the last one, of course)... probably.
Sorry it took so long again. School is sucking the life out of me, so often I am left with no desire to do anything. Kinda depressing.
Also, I'll probably be creating a group soon for this "universe," as I had said earlier than I want to write at least two more stories based in this universe, and I already have a general storyline for all three stories (WHHD included). I know I don't have many readers, but the group would let me manage any news, problems, story-related questions etc. easier than, for example, doing it in Author's blogs (which no one ever reads) or comments (which can be deleted should the chapter or story, for some ungodly reason, ever vanish). So, you can probably look forward to that.
As always, proof-read by the amazing McStuffins.
So, is he in Equestria, or just close to it?
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Hmm, well. Though it was never my intention, your confusion might not really be a bad thing. I really tried to capture the essence of Peter so that the reader would feel in part as he feels, including the confusion about his surroundings. But because you're not Peter, and you have knowledge of Equestria, I guess it's not anything spoiler-ish (because I never intended it to be concealed), but here's the answer anyway in "[ spoiler"]: He's not in "country" Equestria. I tried to convey that by the mostly lack of ponies around, with only a few here and there, and by the culture that the gryphons have that ponies would never approve of in their own country (the hunting, the leather clothes, etc.). How close is he to Equestria, though? Well, that would be just telling more information than is necessary right now
Anyway, if you have any more questions or opinions, don't be afraid to voice them.
5192489 Ya, I figured he wasn't in Equestria itself, but the unicorn doctors kind of threw me off.
Anyhoo, looking forward to the next chapter
IMPORTANT, PLEASE READ! THANK YOU.
I know, I know. Been hell of a lot of time since the last update. There were some problems on my part, and my proof-reader had a lot of work himself, so it took a while. Another reason was because I decided to do a thing. Yes, a thing. I decided to expand the lore a bit and did a wikia of the universe where I can concentrate on actually creating the lore instead of spending more time cataloguing it in Word documents and whatnot than writing it. Anyway, another news is that I’ve created a group for the universe, which I aptly dubbed in an incredibly cliché name: Ternion of Kings. Anyway, the group is something I would love to utilize, because the comment system on stories are unreliable and author’s blog… well, no one reads it and it’s pretty unwieldy too—all the things that are said are eventually buried so deep no one can find it. That’s why I would love for all the readers which I don’t have to direct any big, complex questions or elaborate criticisms to the group, where things won’t get lost, jumbled or deleted (unless they break the rules) (and where people can partake in discussion of said things without drowning out the comments of others that have nothing to do with said things etc.).
For example, I regret some great criticism (that went into a lot of details and explanations) that was deleted due to me rewriting some parts of the story resulting in chapter deletion. Otherwise just ask or criticise in the comments here. Thank you.
Now, to the chapter itself. Some might call it a filler. I call it a filler, too. But there are those that might call it character development. The next chapter will actually be a story advancer, I can promise that. I’d rather not promise swift chapters anymore. I can’t seem to keep those promises, and that just pisses me off, because I hate when someone doesn't keep their promises. That only makes me a hypocrite. I hate hypocrites. It’s a damn vicious circle, I tell you. I wonder, will it remain unbroken?
Well, that’s 300 words I could’ve used on writing the next chapter. Dammit.
EDIT: Oh yeah, here's the link to the group for those interested: http://www.fimfiction.net/group/205436/ternion-of-kings
Anyway. Sorry it took so long. I wish I had a good reason for being gone for so long. There actually is one: I’ve been working on a different story in my native language, basically a rewrite of my first fanfic ever. This story, once finished in my language, will also be after translation the third major story set in the ToK universe, just like WHHD and WWTLF. Another reason is that I had a lot of other irl stuff and that I am just really lazy. Can’t really say anything about that last reason
This was the thing I managed to cook up a dozen words a day for the last… holy hell, has it been four months already? I planned for writing a lot more, and the more time went, the longer I wanted it to be. So that I could prove that the time I’d spent doing nothing was worth it. Well, see how it turned out.
Anyway, I’ll try to push out the next chapter by the end of the weekend, but that depends on my proof-reader McStuffins. That reminds me, I should probably go see him in the dungeons if he hasn’t died of starvation by now.
As said, so I deliver. It’s about 23:30, so it’s still weekend, right?
This is the last layback, slice-of-life sort of chapter before another major plot point and some sweet action stuff. Some of you will most likely remember. Anyway, hope you enjoy this, because next chapter is at least a two-parter.
Writing while drunk is always fun. But hey, if it brings results, why not? Anyway, not really much to say.
Proof-read by, and I cite, "Mcstuffins the greek god of grammer and kink"
Question: does he know where he is going? Like, are they heading in the general direction of Equestria, or are they just randomly wandering the world?
Cause if they are, well... that would suck.
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Yes to the first question. Back in chapter 7 he was shown a picture of a human child by a pegasus merchant. She showed him where she got the picture on a map, pointing to a big city. Peter decides to pursue this location in search of whomever drew the picture.
Where he's going was also mentioned in Chapter 12 when Peter was looking at the map, trying to find the best path toward the presumed capitol city – the city the pony showed him on a map.
Thanks for asking, though. I edited Chapter 12 with an additional sentence that makes it clear where they're trying to go (as it wasn't really mentioned straight). Happy reading
And don't worry, as has been hinted in the prologue, they'll be visiting Equestria. They're just taking the long way around.
5655619 Damn straight.
I’m so, so sorry about the eyesore in this chapter. There might be some more in the next chapter as the conversations between Dufus and Peter continue, but I’ll try my utmost to space them out so it isn’t one constant formatting nightmare.
Speaking about that, if you encounter an error in the formatting – switched italics and bold, something that should’ve been bold or italic or anything like that, please let me know in the comments. Importing from gdocs doesn’t work properly, so I had to copy the text from gdocs and then redo all formatting. It was a nightmare. There's bound to be something I've overlooked.
Also also, this might be the last chapter in a while again. I am doing some theater the next two weeks, and couple that with school and some work, I won’t have much time to do any writing, considering I am writing three fanfics right now… God.
Anyway, any criticism, questions etc. always welcome.
Proof-read by McStuffins.
Good to know we can have some actual conversations between Paul and Peter now.
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Yeah, tell me about it. It wasn't always fun trying to write around their language differences. But overall I think it was very much worth it.
Hm. This was a pleasant surprise, I'm honestly enjoying this. Fave and an upvote, eagerly looking forward to more.
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I'll now go back to eagerly writing more.
Oh, thank you. Your comment was a pleasant surprise, too.
Keep up the good work though this chapter seems very familiar, have you posted it somewhere before?
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Glad you enjoy my story.
To the question: well, no. There are some bits and pieces I used from one of the chapters before "the Great Rewrite," but about 90% of the chapter is completely new. So that's probably where you get the sense of familiarity if you've been my reader before I did the rewrite.
Also, I don't post my story anywhere else, so I don't know what else could've triggered your Déjà vu.
Ok, I didn’t exactly lie when I said I don’t have much time, but I managed to squeeze some extra time for writing here and there, and this came out. This chapter… well, it’s not really much in terms of storyline progress or anything, but I feel it’s a nice breather after the two last chapters.
I wanted to release this chapter along with an interlude that’s basically one big conversation between our two protagonists, but I didn’t quite manage to get enough time to do that too. Thus, please don’t feel put off with the lack of expected use of Peter’s newfound language experience. So, I at least release what I have now, as there probably won’t be anything for a while now. School and stuff; the bane of every artist’s existence.
Proof-read by the one and only McStuffins.
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That maybe it there.
This story is really amazing. Thank you for sharing it with the rest of us and continue your good work. I salute you. =)
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I second this notion.
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Thanks, I appreciate it.
A few months too late, but still better than never, right? Right? Hehehe... hehe...he. Sorry.
Anyway, since it's holidays I should be able to push out some chapters at a quicker pace. I hope I didn't botch up any formatting in this chapter since the gdocs import doesn't work so I have to do everything manually... yeah. If you see nay mistakes, please let me know. And as always, enjoy this McStuffins proof-read and approved chapter.
EDIT: I also just noticed that the story broke 1000+ viewers! Woot!
Coming in a little late here, figured I'd skip ahead to the latest chapter and see if anything caught my interest, and well...
*Why must I always be the one to say it?* Big cats are, on average, considerably smaller than humans in one very important way. And birds... do I even have to say it?
So basically what I'm saying is that either "Paul" the Gryphon is extremely well-hung and has never seen another Gryphon's junk in his life before, or the human character has a micro-penis.
I really don't get why I see this so very often in fantasy stories. Humans are always the... "smaller" species for some odd, ill-defined reason. In reality, we're actually very large in proportion to our bodies. I remember that in another story I actually did the math and figured that if you were to shrink an equine down to human-size, assuming all proportions remained exactly the same, they would actually turn out to be a little bit smaller than us on average.
I wouldn't really consider those measurements usable, seeing as how they ignore so many potential variables, but they do help illustrate how ridiculous Clop can get sometimes.
In the end it doesn't really matter. It's your story, your show, etc. I guess I'm just curious as to why you decided to do this exactly? Is there a plot-relevant point to all of it, or was it just a throwaway line? I suppose I'm just trying to understand why this is a thing.
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Oh please, you're just over-analyzing this
I thought it was apparent that he was joking. And I don't really consider the size of different species' dicks to be relevant to this story, since I don't expect to write any sex scenes. It was just a little comic relief from the somewhat more serious undertone of the whole story. Don't worry, I don't plan to establish a New World Order of micro-penises unlike some authors I guess, if that's what you're afraid of.
But since you already started, I once read a blog from my one of favorite authors, MadMaxtheBlack, who for some reason (I guess a sex scene he was going to write) researched the sizes and came to the same conclusion as you—that is that with the size of ponies in his HiE universe, a human's dick would be just as big if not bigger than our favorite quadrupled species'. Thus don't worry, I've got this front all covered and researched.
And to your last questions, I guess most people think that size of body = size of their reproductive body parts. Which is, as you said, not always the truth.
Now that we hopefully have dicks out of the way, I still hope you'll maybe give this story a chance even after this unfortunate misunderstanding, but if not, safe travels!
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Oh, I know. I guess I'm just wired that way. I know it sounds a bit like an excuse, but I have a relatively minor case of OCD, and sometimes things will just bug me for no clear reason.
It's as if overnight the whole world became convinced that the sky was now a lovely shade of Chartreuse, and would not stop talking about it. I know it doesn't really matter, that color is an optical illusion anyway, but that wouldn't stop it from bugging the crap outta me.
Jesus H. Christ man, hire a proofreader!
I can hardly even read this chapter, it's like you're writing in moonspeak or something...
Czech your spelling next time.
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Better Czech that privilege, proof-scum. Your proofism knows no bounds! Proofreaders are modern-day slaves who toll from dawn to dusk in their caves built of dictionaries, trying to fix the atrocities these slave-holding scumbag authors let out into this evil, privileged world! Free proofreaders, Czech your privileges! God hates proof-scums!
I admit the equipment size and Czech debates are very amusing, but what really interests me is the 'godly essence' thing that was mentioned. I just have a feeling that little tidbit of information will be important later on.
Yay, another chapter done. Took longer than I thought, sorry. Anyway, the story now has over 75K words! Slowly getting there! Anyway, as always, chapter proofread by McStuffins. If you find any formatting errors, let me know. Porting from gdocs is a pain as always.
I'll be out for a while now, though, due to having to undertake a catheter ablation. So, that's a few days in the hospital of absolute boredom for me. If I can, I'll try to bring my laptop along and write some more horsewords while there. Just in case, however, you should expect a delay.