A newly appointed princess, Twilight Sparkle, has struck many with her beauty, but none other than Flash Sentry. An ordinary guard sworn to guard Princess Celestia and other royals with his life. Unfortunately, it is against rules to have "feelings" for anypony they protect. If Flash Sentry is caught loving Twilight, it will destroy his reputation he worked so hard to earn, and be stripped of his position as "Royal Guard".
Flash Sentry must battle his own feelings to keep the job he had worked so much for since he was a foal. As time goes on, it becomes more and more difficult to hold back his emotion and on top of this is an abusive Captain who controls the Royal Guard...
Chapters (1)
I hate how this fic is only getting dislikes because it's a Flash/Twilight shipping, when obviously you worked very hard on it. I, for one, ship Flash/Twi (but not the EqGirls Flash, ugh no) but I don't understand the hate.
Kudos to you, good sir. You deserve a favorite and a waffle.
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Please continue if I dont know what happens next I'm going to die!!!! And dont worry about flash haters your story is good and they are just hating on flash.
3983426 yay!Waffles!Can I have some?
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Why of course!
>> Shimmering Sparkles it was not by mistake, Flash killed the Captain with full intentions, and also due to the fact that the Captain was going to probably kill him as well
3985576 It felt a bit rushed with him having killed his captain and it's still incomplete. But I guess this means that the following chapters will deal with the consequences of this evening.
>> Brawny Seed That's exactly what it is going to be on.
EDIT: I am currently working on the newest portion of this story! Plan to have it done by next week!
3985566 yay!!^.^
I liked your story. I say continue it. You have alot of potential, and i want to see what you can do with this story.
While I'm not a good critic or anything, I wanted to point out a few things about your story. There are several mistakes in your story, grammar and spelling. I would suggest going over this or finding an editor. You have a good plot, and that's nice, but the ending felt kind of weak. Maybe it's just me. It seemed a bit out of character for Flash to fight with Jagged Wing (I honestly thought he might jump out of a window). He could have possibly knocked out the captain instead, and then ran to tell one of the princesses. I don't know. Also, while there isn't much, I would still put a "Gore" tag on this story.
I hope I could be helpful to you.
3992529 Like I said, it might just be me. And I found several mistakes, which might take a while to find them all. I would suggest finding a good editor. I would do this, but I'm currently working with someone else, but I might be able to do just this story (after the Olympics).
3992559 It's not just you... I personally freaked out a little when i saw "Your" instead of "You're".
#FirstWorldPeopleProblems
Best.
Story.
EVER!!!
this story was awesome!!!
I need more of this.
Wait, if it's against the rules for a royal guard to express love for a Royal, then why the fuck did Shining Armor marry Cadence???
4713686 Perhaps you should re-read, and read the sequel to the story. It clears it up later
There a couple problems I have with this. One is the scene with Spitfire: it doesn't really add to anything in the story, and it feels like just filler.
The other problem is Flash killing Jagged Wing. If it were me, I would have just KO'd him and reported him and had him arrested: killing him feels a bit excessive.
Other than that, phenomenal job. Have a like and fave.
Okay this is the second time I've read this and I noticed something different from other flashlight stories; the romance between the to evolves more than in other stories were one second there complete strangers and the next there having fun in bed.
5796072 The Spitfire scenes were a filler at the time they were written, but in these upcoming chapters she will play a pivotal role. With Jagged Wing, if you are in that type of situation where it is life and death, you mainly think of killing your opposition. As a martial artist, I am constantly training to incapacitate, not kill but from a militant's stand-point, killing is all you've done in war, and when put into that situation, your first instinct would be to kill (I was also watching the Shower Scene from the 1996 move The Rock, which may or may not have played a role in the writing :D)
6279171 Yeah it's my first time writing a story, also I'm still not that big on the whole romance idea. So why did I do it? I like FlashLight ships, and just Flash Sentry as a character, fuck the whole "Stealing my waifu!" thing, hes a cool guy
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I agree completely. Heck Twilight was my waifu and yet I'm still pro FlashLight.
6512982 Word brutha
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BTW when is Shadows of the Past going to update?
6514015 Whenever I get around to finishing this last damn chapter. I'm lazy :|
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Maybe I should nag you till you get it done?
6514238 Maybe, I do check this site everyday.
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Wow I've never had somebody willing to be nagged. I now I wouldn't like it to much.
6517513 Heh, well that just ruined it huh.
Hummm... This caught my interest. Already downloaded and will read soon! ^.^