Life in the cottage, especially with Angel, can get way out of hand. After weeks of being tormented and disrespected by her arrogant lagomorph, Fluttershy's friends decide to push the limits of decisions and act towards these abusive actions: they decide to give Fluttershy an all expense payed vacation for the week while they tend to the animals. Fluttershy will journey all of Equestria, meet new ponies, eat new foods, witness new cultures, and embark on new adventures, as well as relax. But will her introverted disposition interfere with this once in a lifetime vacation?
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Alright, a couple of things here. First of all, Twilight trying to be hip?
Drop it. It just feels forced and unnecessary and gets in the way of enjoying the story. Also, the cupcakes reference? Also feels very forced and unnecessary. I suggest dropping it too. You can find something more appropriate and less cliche to fill Pinkie's "wall of text" with. Also also, Fluttershy seems a good deal less shy than she would normally be, and personally, I can't picture her saying "awesome." Maybe amazing would work better? Idk, but that's just nitpicking. As for your writing style, you open with a very description heavy paragraph, but the pace abruptly changes and there is barely any description through out the rest of the fic. I suggest making the descriptions more detailed and elaborate. A little more nitpicking, but it seems like Twilight and co. would at least give Fluttershy a day's warning as opposed to a measly 2 hours. But, overall, I am interested and will track to see where you go with this.
This story has a familiar sense of humor. I can't quite put my finger on it, but I like it.
I kinda agree about the "What's Up" being forced, but instead of chopping the scene, why not simply remove the card bit? Twilight's laughably nerdy explanation should definitely stay, Imo.
Keep up the good work!
Only Rainbow Dash... SHIPPING!
Duct tape solves everything
Holy flank, I though that dragon was going to hop Fluttershy's caboose.
363209 This is platonic shipping.
"My wife!" LOL