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There have been multiple disappearances in Ponyville; ponies missing without any explanation. The investigation into these disappearances seem to have found nothing, and the Equestrian Bureau of Investigation has long ended the search for these ponies.
Rainbow Dash has had enough of this cover-up nonsense, and wants answers. She suspects there is more to these missing ponies reports and decides to become an EBI agent.
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I must admit, aside from a few misspellings and the like, you seem to be doing pretty well. Something I might like to draw attention to- Rainbow seems awfully open with everypony about her work on the case, but that may be your intent or something? Idk, just a little stylistic nitpick.
One area I had a slight issue with was when Pinkie said she would be hosting the party in the previous chapter- the way it was written made it sound vaguely like she was hosting a big public party for the reopening of the case file, which seems like something you wouldn't want. Other than that? Pretty good
And also: Damn, that prelude.
You have an interesting story going on here. Hopefully you will continue to update so we can see where you are going with it.
NIce more chapters I do not know how I missed them. I will have to go back and read again to remind myself of the finer details...
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I guess it is a good thing I published the last one then. I had actually written up most of chapter 7 long ago, but never finished it. It might be a while before any more new chapters are posted here though because of school.
I apologize in advance for the delay, but I hope you like the story so far.
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Whoa. I cannot believe I missed this comment. I am so sorry for not responding. Thank you for the criticisms though. I have not written anything for this story in so long I hardly remember where it is so far, so I will be going back over to read it and fix any misspellings that you mentioned.
I believe what Rainbow Dash is sharing is only common knowledge amongst the citizens really, though with Pinkie it is a bit different. I will have to read it again to know for sure. Not that Rainbow Dash or law enforcement know much about the case anyway, seeing as how it was closed so abruptly.
Again, I have not read it in a while but I will go back and read through the chapters and see if the party thing is worded strangely. Once again I apologize for not replying to this message until today and thank you for the comment.