Queen Chrysalis is the ruler of Equestria. She has a lover, Shining Armour. 1,000 years ago princess Cadence ruled along side Chrysalis. But when Shining Armour chose Chrysalis over Cadence she went on a ramp page. Chrysalis was forced to send her to exile Island. Now Chrysalis has a loyal student Gilda the griffon, the element of Honesty. Gilda's friends are Octavia, the element of Generosity. Soarin, the element of Kindness. Vinyl, the element of Laughter. Spitfire the element of Loyalty. Sunset Shimmer the element of Magic. On Changeling Day Cadence some how escaped and is now back to take over Equestria and make Shining love her.
A/N: I might have been the only one thinking this but, if Chrysalis is a Queen shouldn't she rule Equestria? This is a part of the Queen-verse
WOW. That was original. Great rewrite. I would say you should go into more detail, but then that is my preferance. Best of luck with book two. Will it feature Discord as a good guy, or will Cadence try to take Shinning again?
Just a minor note; rampage is one word, not two separate words.
Well... This sure is an interesting take. Points to you for making a WHOLE NEW UNIVERSE!!!
Now then, I expect some degree of Romance since CLEARLY, Chrysalis and Cadence are still going to be in conflict once again.
3962640 Hmm.. I've already had an Idea of the story but maybe I can add Discord in it.
3963915 Thanks when I finished it I was on my I pad and it was late so i didn't bother with spell check.
3964120 yes I will add actual romance in the next one.
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Yeah, nice to see my two favorite in-conflict ships, one canon another crack, going to be HEAVILY implied and shown in this universe.
Interesting concept and I like it...until they went to get into the Everfree, then the story, in my opinion stopped being believable. Plus, there were a number of word errors. For example,
fallow=uncultivated land; follow=to go or come after.
I'm not going to downvote this, but this story definitely needs to be edited/proofread and thought out a little better.