We enjoyed this story!
It was well written and pretty hot under the collar. Nice subtle use of control and the idea was well thought out. Royal congratulations.

Please finish this!

Please finish this this is one of the best crysails story's i loved the ending

I would be quite greatful if you were to finish this my good writer.

Ah, please do finish the second chapter! I would love to read that, it would be great. Especially if she does what she said, dress him in mare's clothes. Love it, and would love to see Shining Armor being made so very subby to her, ehehe.

Not bad as far as writing quality; particularly for clop. I'd love to see more of this.

Wait, he's captain of the guard. Wouldn't he be Dom for everyone but the princesses?

I would love to read the second chapter you mentioned

Thanks everyone, I wasn't expecting as much positive response as I've gotten and I'm vaguely proud
I'll probably edit chapter one a bit, it could certainly use it.
I'm also just about to restart chapter 2, what I have already doesn't work. Hopefully that'll come out soon.
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Damn, you're right. There goes a chapter idea. I'd say I can't believe that slipped my mind, but I can given chapter 1 was written in a single 'session' I can.
Oh well, at least it's princesses plural.

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In my opinion, it would be even hotter to, instead of programming him to have obvious personality changes when with others, make chapter two about how she keeps his "condition" secret. So she just builds up lots of triggers to control him, but trains him to appear normal. Then you can just have a bunch of sex scenes where she gets him alone (or alone with another pony she wants to ensnare) and then triggers him.

My only regret is the anal in this story, which I'm really not into. But honestly, you've done the Chrysalis/Shining clop better than most, if not all. Good job!