As the last Big Daddy left in all of Rapture, loneliness had become a constant companion of mine. No memories, no voice, not even a face that I could call my own. I thought it would be like this for my entire existence in Rapture... At least, until
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I want to fave this fic but I'm scared of the romance tag.
3933095 I never noticed the romance tag till you mentioned it... Crap, I'm scared too.
3933444
unless you mean with that EDU of his, dont worry.
besides, think of it this way...he'd have to give up his "immortality' to do...what ever the hell your thinking of.
he cant remove any part of his suit or that SUPER CHIP of his self destructs and leaves him to his own mortality.
and he HATES dieing...in case you haven't noticed
3933922
Ok, I have NO idea where the idea of rape came from. Remember, he may be a Big Daddy, but he's still human. Even in the latest chapter, the reader could see how gentle of a giant he actually could be, and, like I said earlier, that chip of his may be strong, but its not overly powered. Just remember to take that in mind. (I have to say though, I'm guessing a lot of people will be surprised by how this story turns out. Oh well, it'll all be a part of the plan.)
Not sure if it's just me.... but you seem to have an unbounded italics here. Just guessing from how it continues all the way to the end of the chapter? It starts when they enter the bathysphere.
Other than that, superb third chapter! And cutting it before they can get back to the point that he can't talk... And while the Romance tag is being a little creepy, I'd like to find out how Rapture is mysteriously changing location once a year. Although, I guess that's a major plot point, and we're not meant to know yet, are we?
3933922 He might need to do that because of pair bonding with little sister and big daddy's they'll fight to the death and with this guy case until he doesn't have time to repair he's suit or he's in a huge epic last battle with all the splicer and they break something of his suit and then well you know the rest.
3933444 Big daddy's would never do. Like never.
3934143 well he see the ponies p.o.v when they relies they left rarity and fluttershy?
3934336
Yes. Yes we will.
3934185
Thank you for pointing out the italicizing thing, I hate it when that happens. As for the cut off, I figured that they should all be in better settings and at full attention when they start to learn more about him. Besides, a concussion doesn't exactly make for a very attentive pony.
3934143
Stupid forwardeshadowing
very nice
3934376 It was a compliment, dear sir! Cliffhangers are one of the greatest and also one of the most hated of plot devices, but they are completely necessary!
And good luck! You seem to know exactly what you're doing storywise, even if I can find a few holes in your format. That's the more easily fixable of the two anyways.
Not....Bad....Not....The...Best....Shit ... Bre-...Up....
(Not that's it's bad though its not the best)
So very very close to murder Rarity.
Do not say anything like that.
4485381 Oh...
1.21 giggawatts!
is he the one who killed suchong? did he bond with masha and lila?
5255782 ...Hey Jack? Would You Kindly Introduce yourself to TheTimmynator?
Under the sea... Under the sea.... A city so pretty under the ocean take it from me!
4711633
Those two were the two Sisters that one time?