When Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie are sucked into a strange desolate landscape, they go through many trials, with Pinkie becoming Dash's only weapon, an unbreakable pink knife. The two will have to find their friends in this warped version of Equestria in order to stop a mysterious white Empress who rules the land with an iron hoof. Yet somethings are not as easy as can be. The pair will have to battle bandits, fight in an army and convince a stubborn old 'friend' to join their side if they ever wish to return home.
Chapters (5)
The Pinkie Blade is swift and keen and always ready for service.
I'm going to keep an eye on this.
Flows much better now ^^
Has potential!
16061Well I just updated!
This is very good. I highly recommend it to anyone.
"Pinkie remembered Dashie saying deserts did not exist in Equestria."
Beg your pardon, but if that's the case then what is Appleoosa in the middle of?
Eh, I'm just nitpicking. Vorpal Blade Pinkie is more than enough to let me overlook that.
16883
Oh man... How could I forget that?
16885
Oh don't worry about it, it took me two chapters to realize it. Everyone makes mistakes.
This is certainly an interesting idea... I'll definitely be reading the rest of it!
This is simply riddled with errors... The plot is there, but it needs some work. If you'd like, I could make some edits for you. I wouldn't be changing anything important, just making your phrasing sound less awkward and changing some errors in conventions.
18423 Oh thank you very much. It's been some time since I last wrote a fanfic and I've rusted. Bad.
I love the idea behind this story, with having only two of the mane six put into another dimension. But your writing is very heavy handed, with extrey fast paced story and mediocre descriptions of what is happening. This story could definatly use more details, and maybe some form of padding to slow the story down a little bit.
16885 witty comeback "that was a great plain, not a deasert, as bison dont live in the desert"
Could use some more through editing, but other than that, its a pretty good story. keep it up!
This is trippy as hell, but I'm enjoying it.
16883 Actually, I'd say Apploosa is more of a Prairie town the a desert town, but that's just me.
Love this story. Hope you continue it soon!
I want a Pinkie shaped knife!
we can has moar storie telling?
DO MOA
is this story dead!?!?!