Hi :) I love you all. feedback is encouraged. I Also do readings of fictions I like particularly well.
A long lost cousin to the Apples of Ponyville (Malus) finds his already miserable life broken, haunted by his past he returns to Sweet Apple Acres to face his demons and his family.
What Malus does not know is that Sweet Apple Acres has not been doing well in the time since he left and his return might just be what the Apple farm and Family need... If Big Macintosh can forgive his cousin that is.
My first Fanfic I hope you all enjoy and feedback of all kinds is appreciated. :)
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Pretty nice story. Skimming it, I only saw a few mistakes in capitalization and punctuation. I like the name malus. Funny story. In Latin one day my classmate accidentally translated malus as "apple" instead of "evil" so the result was "The apple plan pleases the two apples."
I like the story. I feel like this character has a lot of story that hasn't been told yet. I am no super great editor, but I can spot capitalization and spelling pretty well. If you want me to send you a message with some fixes just pm me and I'll get you some. I hope to see updates and will follow.
3850731 I picked the name from one of the scientific names for an Apple tree "Pyrus Malus" and the second portion is the family that Apple tree reside in.
I thought about Malum for a little while but it did not fit as well as Malus does.
. I am looking for an editor, as you can tell I am terrible at editing myself.
Thanks for the comment have a great night
I wonder what else Apple Bloom talks about in her sleep. Great work, I can't check for errors just now, but if you want I can send them later.
4104851 If you would like. My proofreader did a pretty good job but if you can find anything please be my guest. :D