Big Macintosh encounters a mysterious mare in the Apple family barn. She needs help! But with what? Against what? Big Macintosh lends a helping hoof. However, helping a mare who has been shut away in the darkness for most of her life might not be the easiest of tasks. The newcomer who has been graciously and unquestioningly accepted has trouble fitting in and trusting others. She needs help as she makes her way through her journey and luckily for her, Big Macintosh is there step by step till the very...end.
Chapters (3)
The description is like high on cocaine
Edit: You went a tad crazy with the descriptions there bud. And HOLY SHEIT you really named your OC Anime LOL
Ok... well then. I believe 3846808 <--- summarized things rather well. Work on that before attempting to continue this story, if you want any kind of success.
I would suggest going here to start with.
3847132 Thank you so much for the feed back :D Yes, lol, My description is everywhere. It appears to be a representation of my personality. But do not fear for this is more of an experiment my friend intrigued me into doing; he was the one who named my OC lol Again, I'm not the most fabulous of writers but, I thank you very much for reading and helping me :)
3846808 I'm so sorry! I'll try to fix it. I'm just such an excited person and that's the order that the phrases came to me haha and Yes, my OC's name is Anime. My friend Scripted Brony named her for me considering I'm a hardcore otaku as well as avid Pegasister :) Atleast the pronunciation is different than anime lol
3847861 Should have named it Hatsune Miku
lol 90 to nothing so country. I think the parts where they stop and stare and get caught up in the details of what's happening make this feel dragged out. They seem to be coming together fairly quickly as well. It's nice to see conflict start to be revealed, however I would like to see Big Mac react more to the silence. try to get more answers or simply say she doesn't have to talk about.
All and all good writing. Pace needs to be sped up a bit.
4030288 Gotcha! Thanks, Script!
OMG! This is a really good Story Nadya! I love you OC's name, very creative and awesome. I also love the detail you put into the story, I can picture whats going on in my head, almost like im watching a movie. I really like how Ani Me and Big Macintosh have a thing for one another! Again, I love this story and please keep the chapters coming! :D
4032183 Thank you so much! It means a lot!
I like this story. I loved the longer chapters though. They are the best. I can't wait to read more about Ani and Mac. This is going to be great.
4036616 Oh thank you! That means so much to me! I will definitely make the chapters longer and Chapter 3 is gonna be here in a few days so keep your eyes peeled and I hope you enjoy the rest! Thanks again
Wow. Great chapter. I guess now we will see who is she afraid of.
4158803 Yes, we shall! This chapter, unfortunately, took forever to write. I'll try to make the next chapter at least longer than the second lol