Brace yourself, haters come.

Welcome to the group buddy!

>>341537341537

Seems a trifle premature. Ooh! Unless you have Pinkie Sense! Quick! What am I getting for my birthday? Please say pony shirt, pleeeeeeeeease say pony shirt! I want the one with Big Macintosh.

Very good I find absolutely no obvious faults with it this far. Now please give me another chapter because I can't wait

ENCOURAGEMENT! :D  Keep it up!

awesome cant wait for more

A strong opening - very cool

Welcome to the FoE sidefic herd by the way

Wow great chapter mate keep up the great work i cant wait for more /)

Also welcome to the fallout community

Thank you all for the words of encouragement! I'll try my best to do this rich universe proud with my next update, which hopefully won't be too far into the future.

I always figured the rainboom was unique to Dash, not because of the speed, I imagine plenty of pegasai can pull off a sonic-boom, she just had magic rainbows tacked onto it because of her coloring.

>>381368381368 I did too, actually, but I noticed when it came up in Fallout Equestria, it was always referred to as a Rainboom, with the exception of Ditzy's Radboom. I do, however, plan to call attention to that in a dialogue in a later update.

I swallowed the lump in my throat as I looked up to meet the eyes of the two mercs I was trapped all alone with. Uh-oh.

Duh, Duh Dum

Great chapter man looking forward to more /)

>>381475381475 Also im really enjoying the outer views of waste landers on a lone Enclave dashite ive never really thought of it Keep up the great work /)

So glad to see Calamity one more little time . And Gawd... Hey, you just know what we want!

Great chapta mah.

Great chapter mate /)

DUNDUN Mach isnt going to accept that theres no way he would

And i quote "What the fuck"

Oooh Nice

welp i feel machs kinda cluster fucked right now

well the situation is absolute FUBAR cant believe Mach accepted it in the first place honestly cant wait for the next chapter

Amazing chapter And  Greaser have a good motivation to folow him.

wow Steel Asswholes I loved that man that made me laugh

WOW Greaser kinda creepy there for a moment

but I still love you

great chapter & story by the way

NUUU not the Rainboom

Great chapta, mate

good chapter dont let Greaser die

He takes chems dosen't he?

>>900166900166

I'm sure I don't know what you're talking about.

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well how else were you supposed to learn to fly yo dingus? good chapter as usual look forward towards the next

He is extremly opposed to chems and doping and when he is forced to take dash due to the situation he suffers a direct backlash by razorbeak not trusting him. Yet he keeps the dash.... wait what? I'm sorry but that is really stupid and out of character even if you take into account that he is afraid he won't be able to do a sonic rainboom without it. Not to mention that the "hero has to fight an addiction" thing has been done by at least half of every other fo:e fic. I realize that you have somewhat allready set the route with the added perk but I am not sure I can stand another story with the same back and fourth arguments about addiction. Wouldn't it be more fun to do something different like maybe greaser could get addicted because she is influenced by how mach used it to save her just like razorbeak warned. And then you could do the addiction thing from the pespective of the friend who is trying to help instead. That has not been done anywhere near as much and never in any real depth.

Sorry for the long comment btw

>>989138989138

Hey, a long, thought-out comment is much more helpful than a disingenuous pat on the back. It's helpful to the creative process, and I'm glad you took the time.

As for your concern, I encourage you to just see where it goes. I've had the plot pretty much all thought out for some time, and I can tell you that it won't be heading in the direction you suspect.

>>989272989272 Well that is nice to hear :) Thanks for reading my comment.

That perk is really sucky. You would get the withdrawal effect for every drug in the game unless you are taking them. You probably at least need to specify that it only applies to drugs you have actually taken.

Anyway, I find it strange how you only have 24 likes. This story is up there with Pink Eyes in terms of quality. I really want to see more of this now that I have actually gotten around to reading it. (62 story long read later list)

>>10405121040512

I can see how the wording was a little murky, so I went ahead and made that a little more clear.

Such high praise, indeed! I feel all tingly inside.

As far as likes go, I really couldn't tell you what the deal is with that. However, it's really all about writing the story for me; I couldn't care less if I had five regular readers or fifty-thousand. I didn't start writing Outlaw to get E-Famous, I did it because writing's been a long-time hobby of mine, and I wanted to pay homage to FoE and Kkat for the incredible ride she took me on with that story of hers, as well as continue to improve myself as a writer.

really good chapter and that dude is crazy looking towards the next

How you only have 29 thumbs is beyond me. You should have more thumbs than that, this is better than Pink Eyes, at least.

YAY FOR MOAR CHAPTERS!!!

I started reading Outlaw only recently and regret not reading it sooner. This is a fantastic story, really well written and executed. I liked the small mention about Blackjack and Littlepip, good job avoiding mentioning Puppysmiles, she didn't show up until later in Blackjack and Littlepip's adventures. There is one tiny detail I'm wondering about, Hoofington is east of the Equestrian Wasteland as is Buckston, but is Buckston more Northeast or Southeast so its farther away from The Hoof? Or is it Eastwards from Shattered Hoof? Sorry for asking, just trying to visulaize where the 'Rolling Thunder' is making a name for himself.

I have enjoyed the story, watched Mach mature (Not change.) and become a more responsible and dare I say driven and focused? Watching him think on Immelmann's actions growing up and the choices he has made is refreshing. Mach doesn't get overly depressed or do stupid shit like some story protagonists (*Cough* Hired Gun *Cough* from Heroes.).

>>10646981064698

It's still early days for this story Syrahl. This is a good story, but competing to be the next major story is kind of hard when their is competition from other amazing stories, such as Murky Number Seven, New Beginnings, Morality of Property, The Last Sentinel, New Pegas & many more which are all deserving of such a status and popularity.

I do hope this story gets more popularity, done my bit to help spread knowledge of the story by adding wiki pages and recommending the story.  

>>11104791110479

Thanks, I really appreciate your thoughtful reply!

You really seem to have an incredible grasp on everything I've been doing with the story so far; it's really reassuring to know that I'm managing to get it across correctly. I tend to worry a lot about whether or not I've been clear enough and if anything I've written could be misunderstood or taken the wrong way. Hopefully, I'll be able to keep my quality equal to or greater than what I've written so far in the future.

As for your location question, I intended for it to be further northeast, the city itself is meant to be right on the coastline.

Now if only I knew who the female griffin on the cover is....

Well that sucks about his dad

Great chapter too

Well now, that just blew me away. We had a mad pony who tried to become an Alicorn, some laughs and fun dialogue, an awesome sky battle scene with Mach (Man he is going to look like a complete, bigoted ass if the Rangers are good guys.) And of course we learn the sad fate of Immelmann. Nice use of Celestia's Grace, good that you put the weapon to good use at a critical moment.

Also when Razorbeak's talon was choking Mach, I couldn't help but imagine Dr.Cox from scrubs, strangling J.D... weird. Would've laughed if he punched through the door rather than ask Mach to open it nicely. Anyway, great chapter overall.

YaY good chapter. I always feel like  your story is slightly rushed. I know he 'cant sit in one place' and stuff like that. But I personaly want to see more details and character development, mate.

oh snap his Dad is dead hes going to be really angst now they really screwed themselves over

Well you did it again Tofu, you blew my mind. Just as I finally update my story, Project Horizons and Outlaw update ^_^. Great scott, if I update more then you and the other FOE authors will update more.

Anyway back to sanity. So I admit, having Mach come to terms with his father's tough love parenting style was a big development for the character. It's a shame Mach never got the chance to say what he wanted to, to Immelmann,  but again this will also help temper Mach's impulsive actions and aggression hopefully. I enjoyed how Razorbeak was also teaching him about the dangers of his anger whilst fighting and landing some cheap shots by stunning him, I half expected Razorbeak to go below the belt and get disqualified, but I'm happier he didn't. Mach's already in too much pain. (Emotionally)

I can say you've given myself and the readers something to look forward to, this Wraithwing sounds like he will be a badass. I'm not sure what to expect, I know he won't be like Deus in Project Horizons and he'll be a lot more competent than the Wonderbolts were against Calamity in Everfree, So I guess I'm hoping for maybe a Pegasus wearing a unique heavy variant of Pegasi power armour, complete with built in thrusters for added speed and shoulder mounted missile pods. Or maybe that is just his help and he is actually the Pegasus speedster that is going to attack Mach after he is exhausted from trying to kill aforementioned power armour pony.

I enjoyed the scene with Rattler and Mach & Greaser's conversations. Learning more about the weapon and how it is both an old friend to Mach and a symbol of his fathers love and smart thinking, the lighter gun obviously hindering Mach less, especially during flight. Cool story about the make and model, as well as Mach's reasoning on the weapon's name. I'm wondering how the Enclave will react when they learn he took out a Vertibuck. As Calamity stated in the main FOE, they don't have the technology to build new Cloudships (Except at Thunderhead, and they charge criminal prices XD.)

I like how you had a division in the Rangers, before the Applejack Rangers splintered off and became their own group. And yay, another story joins mine in the ranks of Stories that have nice/halfway decent or good Steel Rangers. I still would've expected Clam Chowder to perhaps order another Star Paladin to escort a salvage team to Salt Lick, I mean there's a crashed vertibuck and damaged power armor and Enclave tech, surely they would want that, even if they aren't as tech obsessed, I figure some of these Rangers would want to go and recover valuable assets, maybe you can mention it in Chapter 13 .

Also liked the litle reference, red ones go quicker (I see you are a fan of Orkish philosophy.) Red ones go fasta, it's a scientific fact   . Well, I've already written an insane amount and it is surprisingly the first post on this chapter

oh, this is so sweeeeet... I underestimated your writing skill mate. I thought you don't developed Mach+Greaser line because you just do not know what to write. Seems I thought wrong.

ohhhhh someones in love hahaha anyways another good chapter

>>12522751252275

I feel like we have some sort of writer-reader symbiotic relationship going on here, because the way you pick up on every minor detail blows my mind just as much as my writing apparently does yours.

It's refreshing to get a big ol' wall o' text every now and then, shows me you're really enjoying the story and that does wonders for my confidence, so thanks for your reply!

Wow didn't see Red and Greaser getting together so soon I was expecting it 5 or so chapters from now

Glad to see they did

~Reggie

good chapter

Let me guess, Greaser made shot, so she will receive all exp? And no loot dropped Good chapter

Great post mate im really enjoying some good old fallout /)

Ice dragons thats AWESOME

OH and great chapter m8

~Reggie

>>13505961350596

And then they went and killed the only one known to currently exist. :3

Thanks, I try to keep it as exciting as I possibly can.

>>13508131350813

Mach always helping kill nature one endangered species at a time

First of all...WOW! I do honestly mean that, this chapter was amazing. You've got personal conflict and uncertainty which Mach looks at Objectively. We see Razorbeak growing noticeably strained and frustrated from a lack of combat which is why he left Obsidian Equestria in the first place, going so far as to take his frustration/desire to do combat out on the Rangers in sparring matches.

Greaser and Mach's relationship, I was nervous about this. Relationships, particularly romantic ones, can be tricky to write and most importantly, make believable, but you pull this one off well. I also see you took my suggestion about having the Steel Rangers hoard Enclave technology, very in character for the Rangers, can't have them fawning over Mach all the time. Also PAYOFF! Glad to see you didn't have Greaser fix a massive gun for no reason or mysterious ice that reacts in weird ways to unicorn magic, killing a Ice breathing dragon was also fantastic and showed why these Hellbeasts were feared across Equestria and the known world.

Hope to see Mach and Razorbeak return to the Dragon's Den, would love to see what a Post-Apocalyptic Dragon would choose to hoard. Also Lil' Wallaby with Gatling Lasers , Some would say overkill, I say program wallaby to switch between machinegun and lasers depending on the situation. After all Bullets or Lasers? Why not Both

Rock Steady and Bebop!? TMNT references galore ^_^ Yeah, I don't think I got it earlier but now I'm all like OF COURSE!! I originally thought Bebop was a reference to Cowboy Bebop XD.

>>13565651356565

Thanks, Tonto. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Once again, you're on the ball and picking out every detail with surgical precision. I don't do anything without a reason, and while I won't say what the ultimate purpose behind repairing the railway gun is (and trust me, it's a big one), I will say that it's for a reason that will become readily apparent in due time. Its timely repair just so happened to be the most convenient solution to the dragon problem.

I'm also glad you spotted the TMNT reference. I was wondering if anyone would assume that was where I was headed with it way back in chapter 6.

>>13567401356740

I do have a hunch on how you'll use that giant railway gun, but I'm not going to spoil it for anyone. Also kinda surprised the Rangers aren't more curious about Mach's Pulse pistol, would've thought they would drool over that kind of uber-rare technology. Maybe you could have Mach make an arrangement with them, like a copy of the weapon schematic's data that Mach and Razorbeak retrieved or maybe allowing the Rangers to examine the weapon in exchange for access to the Vertibuck. Or he could just offer to help move it. Also mercenaries with Anti-machine rifles? Why isn't Mach more suspicious, like it was a deliberate ambush, something he would do.

Or maybe you're just teasing us with Tidbits until the next chapter. Also wonder if you'll name that Dragon, maybe have an old terminal up in the mountains in his lair he was keeping a diary in, sort've keeping him sane and stopping him from growing bored.

Oh my, Solara will not be pleased.  Of course, this means that we'll get to see Greaser curbstomp her.

This kind of explains why Mach went "What, eew, no." when talking to Greaser about Spitfire earlier.  I guess he's a descendant.

I wonder what the likelyhood that Immelman's the new Wraithwing (I keep reading it as Wingwraith :D ).  There can only be one at a time, and it makes sense that the most famous hitpony would be one who no longer exists.

A double stat increase? Man these perks are really powerful.

Mach's really picking up the nicknames here.  Lieutenant, Redshift, Outlaw, Rolling Thunder... Hey, speaking of Rolling Thunder we really haven't heard from that DJ duo recently.

>>14107881410788

Itemized reply is as follows:

1. Ha, I knew someone would pick up on that, and while I could deny it up and down, there's really no hiding it with how heavily I alluded to it. There will be a point where Mach is cornered into flat-out admitting to the identity of his ancestor; he has his reasons for keeping it on the down-low for now.

2. No comment.

3. I plan on capping Mach out at 20, so I'm going a little hog wild with the perks. I suppose I should tone it down a bit.

4. I don't really consider his prior ranks to be nicknames as such, and Redshift was his old callsign, so it sort of falls into the same category. As for the DJs, they'll show up again, I'm just trying not to shoehorn them in all over the place.

good again and smart move Razor doing that

“Sir, I said to him, is there something I should know about…”

You're missing a couple of quotation marks here...

I think.

Im not too sure what I'm talking about here, but that line just doesn't look right, and it pulled me out of the story. You might want to have a closer look at it.

>>14170591417059

It probably looks weird because the whole line is supposed to be spoken, but I went ahead and changed it anyway. I'd like to avoid disrupting the flow for people. Thanks for pointing it out.

Good chapter

Tofu, you magnificent bastard you. Not only do you answer several questions from the previous chapter, you also give us new mysteries. I'm not sure if you had it planned already or not, but I'm glad to see so many of my previous suggestions were taken and implemented so well. We see Razorbeak give Mach a little 101 on the wasteland in regards to weapons and how guns like Anti-Machine rifles aren't exactly common, their not exceedingly rare, but they are uncommon enough that you'll remember someone using them.

More of Mach's past was also nice, you show what the Enclave learns about Canterlot, and kinda add more reasons as to why they just levelled Canterlot in the main story, rather than brave the Pink Cloud to claim advanced pre-war technology inside the ministry hubs and make use of it. I also like how you fleshed out the Ice Dragon, Hyperion. Not only is Hyperion an epic name, befitting such a awesometacular dragon, but having the ice be something closely tied with the dragon and used as part of a coping mechanism in a bid to retain his sanity. I especially liked how Hyperion was so similar to Spike, but didn't have a goal or virtue to help him stay sane in post-apocalyptia.

You really tug on our heartstrings with Hyperion's mate, cryogenically preserving her in an act of love, only to have her die as part of a mercy killing, performed by Mach. I find Hyperion oddly reminiscent of Mr. Freeze, the cool Mr. Freeze not the terrabad Big Arnie freeze from Batman & Robin. Also Yay, Radwasps, their acidic stings can pierce Steel Ranger armor and they live in swarms + you officially named them. Another dangerous beast added to the bestiary of the FOE universe. I would hate to be an Equestrian zoologist in modern day Equestria with monsters like that.

Ardent Vortex continues his insidious plans, whatever they may be.  I enjoy the amount of appearances you have had him make so far. Would just love to see Mach contend with Wraithwing and Ardent Vortex in a future chapter, kinda like how Blackjack had to avoid both Deus and the Zodiac clan in the battle at Flank. Kinda surprised with Razorbeak's actions with the mercs, but then again, I figured it was probably some kind of professional courtesy, the way they acted fairly civil to one another.

Eagerly looking forward to chapter 15 Tofu.

>>14183011418301

I'll be honest, you got me with Mach's complete lack of mention of the Anti-Machine rifles, that was a complete oversight on my part and when you mentioned it, it was very much a "oh shit, how do I correct that?" moment. Ergo Mach's ignorance of them mirroring my own forgetfulness. Aside from that, you've just been nailing everything I've got planned so far.

It's gotten to the point where I'm asking myself if you're really that astute, or if I'm really that predictable, but then I realize it's really not that big a deal; I'm not changing the story because of either of those things.

Hold on to your pants, because you'll be seeing the Wraithwing make his initial appearance very soon, as well as an update on Vortex's nefarious doings. I won't say which chapter, but neither of them happen in 15, and both occur before 20.

>>14183971418397 I knew you had to use Anti-machine rifles, they're the only accurate rifle that can effectively threaten a Steel Ranger. The only other weapons that could prove to be a threat are magical energy rifles and heavy weapons like the Plasma Cannon, Gauss Rifle, Missile Launcher, Balefire Egg Launcher, Heavy Incinerator, Tesla Cannon or maybe E.M.P mines/grenades. These weapons are pretty uncommon, the heavier energy weapons proving to be exceedingly rare. Plus if Ardent Vortex just up and armed the mercenaries with energy rifles their would be no reason for the mercs not to just run off with the weapons or give himself away, which is what I think he didn't want to do.

I was having a particularly good day/night when I pointed out a lot of the stuff in your story. Also Hyperion has a wiki page now ^^ Hyperion as for being predictable, not really, I'm still unsure of how this story is going to go, besides you always manage to surprise me.

Now I'm finally caught up! Great work so far, keep it up! Keep an eye out for Mach in the next chapter of Memories!

Dude, I JUST GOT CAUGHT UP WHY WOULD YOU DO THIS TO ME D:

Great chapter though. Yay for dysfunctional teams!

You need not command me to stick around for the rest of the story. The story does a better job of that.

Your story is highly engaging and you have amazing characters. I get the feeling Caltrop will be making a repeat appearance at some point.

I still really want to see Mach figure out he quit Enclave because of the Stable Dweller.

Also, spoillerific question but does this story end before or after The Battle of Sunshine and Rainbows?

telling you mares are crazy and scary all my feels towards Razor anyways good chapter

>>14916181491618

I just assume everyone else uses their free time like I do, haha. Two weeks to write one chapter seems like an eternity from my perspective, I always feel like a slowpoke.

Tag, you're it! Looking forward to the next chapter of Memories; curious to see how you're going to handle Mach.

>>14918811491881

Thanks for the kind words, I'm glad you enjoy the story.

If the Battle of Sunshine and Rainbows is what I think it is, (the big battle at the end of FoE, where its an enormous free-for-all between Littlepip, the Enclave and the Wasteland?) then the answer is neither (and that doesn't mean jump to hasty conclusions, either).

Man, I should have realized that unity was behind the misdirection when the missive was an order given in first person plural with canterlocks.  The goddess is absolutely terrible at PR and recruitment.

Mach should've just shot the alicorn in a non-lethal zone again.  Debilitating chorus madness would have made a much more poignant refusal.  I suppose she had to be out of the way for the next bit though.

Hey, I'd totally be down to see them deal with a body swap (as possibly foreshadowed in the beginning there).  Having to relearn limb functions such as wings and horns would be pretty funny, and there'd be a certain amount of drama trying to keep the Wraithwing from destroying Mach's body (along with whomever was living in it).

And is that a Chronicles of Riddick reference I spy?  Good taste, if so.  Please tell me she has a teacup.

>>14928211492821

While I did consider having Mach be his usual asshole self to the alicorn, injuring her would've raised a few issues, one of which was the one you suspect. For another, like the alicorn at Maripony, she would've been perfectly capable of retaliation and a swift execution, while boring next to a battle, was much less likely to wind up in injury and death for the party. Another possibility would be her fleeing and being cut off from Unity by the Goddess, and I wanted to avoid people making hasty conclusions and assuming I was trying to arrogantly make some sort of origin story for Lacunae of Project Horizons.

As far as references are concerned I'm afraid that while I make many of them, this is not one I can claim to have done voluntarily, as I've never seen Chronicles of Riddick. In fact, now I'm legitimately curious as to what exactly I've referenced and where it is in the chapter.

>>14932681493268

I hesitate to explain as it is somewhat a spoiler, but suffice it to say that there is an abrasive character with an unfortunate past that does not like being called "Jack".  This runs some rather strong parallels to "Caltrop", an abrasive character with an unfortunate past that does not like being called "Jacks".

I just got around to reading this chapter, been busy getting caught up and doing my own thing, like trying to get my 19th Platinum Trophy on the PS3. Anyways, I can say I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter and I liked how you have pointed out a serious culture clash between wastelanders and enclave citizens. By that I mean Mach slaughtering a dozen Pegasi in panic would be seen by most Wastelanders as no big deal, maybe. Every story handles these kind of killings differently.

For example, I don't doubt ponies getting killed outside saloons because somepony has had too much to drink or because a pony had a nicer hat/gun is a common occurrence. An of course entire settlements get wiped out by Mercenaries, Raiders warbands, Tribal Clans, Steel Rangers etc. Death in such varying scales is a constant part of wasteland life, which makes Mach's slaughter barely a drop in the ocean of blood covering the wasteland. Might be something you can work into the story later Tofu ^^.

Next I actually like how you portray the Goddess, though I'm pretty sure Unity was still working out the kinks in the Alicornification process which was only a option for unicorns, though I think they had earth pony agents who worked as preachers of their beliefs and ideals. So I think that's something you could mention him having foreknowledge of or maybe Razorbeak and Greaser mention how unicorn slaves are valuable because Red Eye was sending them to the Goddess, I'm pretty sure it was a widely known fact. Though maybe not in Buckston, but I can't be sure, you're the author after all =P.

I liked the Radwasps in this chapter and Mach's phobia being more fleshed out. I also like the little update on Wraithwing, I just have this weird idea of him coming for Mach, with this music playing...

Mach and his allies have like a fortified position and Wraithwing is blowing through each layer of it, dodging mortar rounds and missiles. This really badass full body power armor and a voice like Frank Horrigan from Fallout 2. .

Good to see two co-hosts argue on the radio like real people/ponies. Yeah it doesn't make sense to the reader, but we've been through all Mach's battles alongside the poor schmuck. The guys in their radio tower don't know what is going on, I kinda like the idea of Mach arriving during the middle of a broadcast to clear up the discrepancies. Kinda reminded me of Siskel and Ebert.

One thing I didn't like was the inclusion of Star Metal, yeah I get why the Coilgun rounds are Alicorn killers, but does that mean star metal everywhere does this? I'm not saying don't include it, but use this fact to your advantage. Mach's Coilgun can't just be fired willy-nilly anymore, at least not without finding more ammo or a means to produce more ammunition. In short, the Coilgun should be Mach's Last Resort or used in Last Stand scenario's, or just situations that call for it.  I know Mach is not a scientist, but could you have Mach mention how star metal effects vary? Like Hoofington Star Metal cancels magic whilst Caledonian Star Metal causes necrotic poisoning with no known cure, short of amputating affected areas. Could even have Mach recall a boring lecture or have Ardent Vortex explain it.

Lastly Jack, I like her inclusion. I thought she might've been a reference to Jack from Mass Effect 2 who had similar trust issues and didn't want to accompany Shepard initially. Anyway, overall a good chapter, I hope my comments help you and show my love for your story.

>>14954851495485

All good points, my friend. All good points. Hopefully I can alleviate some concerns and clear things up. First up- the starmetal issue. I am actually planning to explain that. Very early in chapter 16 in fact, so hopefully that will set your mind at ease on that issue.

As for the cultural differences, I will be exploring that as well when (minor spoiler) Mach finally tells Greaser the story of what happened that day, how exactly he got his promotion, and maybe even the rave afterward.

Funnily enough, I was actually briefly entertaining the idea of Mach storming into the studio where the DJs broadcast from and giving them a piece of his mind, so maybe I'll have to include that after all.

And now we come to Unity. I will admit, it has been quite some time since I initially read Fallout: Equestria, and I've been waiting until I'm done with Outlaw to reread it. As a result, I'm foggy on some of the finer details, so I'll have to get a little crafty to handwave this one, though I've got some ideas already; in fact, I may even be able to adapt a scene from the next chapter to enlighten Mach to this. This isn't the last we'll be seeing of Unity; as we've seen, Mach has a way of making powerful enemies and the Goddess isn't going to let this go that easily.

Your comments do indeed show how much you like the story, and I always look forward to them. I like having a review from an objective standpoint, it puts things nicely into perspective.

>>14958091495809

Well if you are looking for a way to enlighten Mach, you could have him stumble across an old war banner from Red Eye's Forces, a Force that Razorbeak and several other factions joined together to repel. Sort of a we don't always get along but we hate that bastard more than each other style of truce as they teamed up and kicked his army's flank. Hence why slavers aren't too common in this area, usually only ballsy slavers. And you could also explain about the unicorn slaves Red Eye was sending the Goddess up until a year ago.

Also if you ever need to check up on some of the finer details, feel free to send me a PM ^_^.

Goddes is still alive and that means there is no chance to see any nice Alicorn character. Sadly. I so fuckin love alicorn characters.

>>15216041521604

I don't want to get your hopes up for nothing, but uh... I wouldn't rule anything out just yet.

Don't read too far into that, I'm just saying I have plans. Plans that cannot be revealed for quite some time.

Awkward...

interesting chapter if I dont say so myself different than the others but good chapter again

GOOOOOD EVENIN READERS!

Time for another in-depth analysis/wall of text.

So first off, Starmetal. Razorbeak giving the exposition on Starmetal, actually makes a whole lot of sense. I think people who read side stories tend to forget that Griffin Talons in general, actually get along pretty well. You showed that earlier with the mercs at that Radwasp nest/cave. So of course Razorbeak would know about Starmetal properties, he's a hardened and experienced mercenary and even if Razorbeak hasn't been to those places, griffins who work pretty much everywhere, would likely share stories about things like Starmetal, The Hoof, etc to other talons from different merc groups. I also like how you took my earlier advice and had Razorbeak point out differences and stories about Star Metal in general.

Next, the Infil-Traitor. I'll be honest and say you really surprised me there. I mean it makes complete sense why they would make it, just the limitations in technology and time put to researching it, prevented it from becoming part of Equestria's arsenal. Can just imagine the level of paranoia the zebra would feel if Equestria had that kind of technology. As for the slavers, I'll be honest and say it was clever how they captured Greaser/Mach and it brings up Red Eye, whom Razorbeak obviously has no love for. Could be fun to see Mach and his companions wipe out the Slavers. As for their system of letting slaves go if they win gladiator fights, it was entertaining and a little cliché, but I still enjoyed it. Mach's final opponent in the arena reminded me a lot of Xenith, only she didn't have the luxury of sparing other ponies.

I'll be honest and say I expected Vortex to maybe "Put the boot to Greaser-Mach, medium style." Perhaps as a way to aggravate Mach, but also to punish Greaser for insulting him and his goals. He's pretty much a villain who takes verbal abuse, because he knows he's going to win, or at least believes he'll win so strongly that it makes him arrogant. It would also have been a bit of a wake up call for Mach if something had happened to Greaser's body, because his temper. No that I want anything to happen to greaser .

So yeah, you've set up some stuff, would like to see Razorbeak maybe go off to deal with the slavers solo, with his own mercenaries. Sort've send the message that Obsidian Equestria won't tolerate that crap. Could also give your News Reporters, something to talk about, pointing out that they already have heroes like Obsidian EQ, and that the Wasteland ponies can't solely rely on lone wanderers like Mach to come and fix up all their problems.

In short, you made a great new chapter and left plenty of room to go to other places and other new directions in future chapters. Nice work.

>>15557351555735

Glad you liked the chapter, man. It was a blast to write.

I knew the whole gladiator bit was cliché going in, but hey, so is body-swapping; why stop at one?

Vortex. Ah, Vortex, our villain of the piece. He really is just that confident, and that is the sole reason that he didn't beat Greaser/Mach just to prove a point. He's deliberately avoided killing Mach during each and every encounter following the first just because he believes he can't lose. Will he win in the end, or will Mach put a stop to him in time? You guys are just gonna have to wait to find out.

Body swap, expected and enjoyed :D  And wow, Mach seemed to be doing his best to get Greaser beat up.  I imagine she won't be too happy when they trade houses again.

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Y'know, it's kinda funny. When I saw you nail it at the end of the last chapter, I thought I'd foreshadowed it pretty good. When Tonto said it surprised him, it shocked the hell out of me. He picks up on everything, even all the stuff I do subconsciously.

We all know Mach though, he's never content to sit around and wait when he can take matters into his own hooves. Even when the whole point of the chapter was to humble him and constantly bring him back down to earth, he still has so much confidence in himself that it lands him in trouble. Will he pay for his recklessness next chapter or not? Who knows, that's the fun!

>>15590601559060 Mach will definitely pay.  Primary protagonists aren't allowed to be Karma Houdinis.  I'm a bit surprised that Vortex didn't really catch on to any of the clues Mach kept dropping in their dialogue (cutting out his heart, superiority of the enclave, etc.), I guess the eye-of-the-storm is blind :D

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Oh god, a TVTropes link. There goes the rest of my night.

Honestly, I did strongly consider Vortex outing Mach, but decided to leave it out in the end. Vortex isn't the type to flaunt his analytical skills. He knows more than he lets on because he knows he has the edge already (whether or not that's actually true is debatable, in certain circumstances). He's the type to let his adversary think he has the advantage, only to strike when his enemy has his guard down.

Wow that was pretty trippie.

Still good chapter mate.

~Reggie

I can't wait to see how things went with Greaser in Mach's body.

This chapter was a bit different from other F.O.E I have read,  but I found it very refreshing.

He return body without a single scratch. This is totally unexpected chapter.   Mach is not very impressible stallion, isn't it? I thought he will shout something like 'AAA.. I have a vagina!!!"

Quite interesting slavers. I have bad feeling for them..

And that Greaser's memory orb... Oh thats too sweet. How it's possible what she meet Mach after all that years? I know. Magic

Keep it up.

0_0 Oh lord i hope Red is ok...as much as you can be for getting shot in the head...

Things are looking up for Mach... or maybe not.

Great chapter Tofu, you continue to use earlier elements of your story, preventing obvious loose ends from becoming gaping character or plot holes. The infamous Wraithwing makes his move or did he? Could this be the work of Ardent Vortex's assassin? Has Mach underestimated his foe as Greaser warned him not to? Nice of you to end the chapter on the big questions .

I enjoyed the mighty Krieg Razorbeak's pro-activeness in making sure his talons are okay and in wiping out a slaver operation running so close to Buckston. Really good character moment, but I think an even stronger one was Mach taking that Dragon egg, I genuinely Never Saw it Coming . Cool idea too, also that was a good explanation for Hyperion's powers, a Balefrost Dragon. Also YES! Mach brings the pain to his slanderer, clears his good name in Buckston and the surrounding region, meets the big unicorn from the arena and realises he's actually an okay kind of guy.

I'm definitely excited for the next chapter, it certainly promises to be a good one.

oh crap Wraithwing found him I bet

>>16375261637526

I do so love to tease and misdirect.

I don't like to generate hype I can't live up to, but at the risk of giving it away given your astuteness, I think you especially will enjoy chapter 18, Tonto. Hopefully it'll live up to my expectations and everyone else's and I wont muck it up too bad.

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I always look forward to your chapters Tofu, I only hope you don't have Mach hatch the Dragon egg next chapter. The reason being that Mach see's raising it as a responsibility, but if he actually wants to raise it, like grows to thinking about the future etc, then I think it's hatching will be all the more powerful an event. Maybe Mach could even mention Twilight Sparkle had a dragon if they taught that in the Enclave or better yet, Watcher finds out about the egg and maybe gives him some advice on hatching it (Greaser's Magic) or is sad to learn of Hyperion's fate. Mach could also correctly guess Watcher is a dragon and so Spike/Watcher ends the connection.

Also Poor Mach, judging from the sounds of that chapter end he may have lost an ear. Also that may or may not have been a tactical move by his assailant to shoot off the ScoutBuck. Which again makes me question who shot him, oh I do love how you tease. Also on a different note, will we see the Cult of Speed again? Despite how minor their appearance was, I'm really curious about the group. I can just imagine them building ramshackle flight machines like WW1/2 fighter planes or B2 bombers like the one from New Vegas.

Anyway I look forward to chapter 18. I'm sure I'll enjoy it.