i'm a fat, lazy, nerdy, geeky (BIG DIFFERENCE THERE) guy at school with alot of freetime and creativity
celestia tells a young mare the story of what actually happened that fate full time 1000 years ago when everything went to hell.
[ thank you for your cretiques i'm probably going to end this here maybe i'll try again when I have a few more stories under my belt yaa I have a bad habit of shooting for the stars when I don't even know how to walk so to speak anyway thanks everybody for you comments and votes good or bad i don't care]
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Well, first off I haven't read yet. However, I am going to guess the word you are looking for is prologue, not prequel.
You're well aware that you are the reason we can't have nice things, right?
3827903 aw why I'm sorry
I don't get all the negative commentary or why this is predominantly downvoted. It isn't the best writing I've ever read but it's far from the worst, and the story seems interesting so far. I will give you an upvote and a word of encouragement because I'd like to see the rest of it.
This is a billion times more interesting than my first fanfic was. Good job, and keep up the writing.
I have yet to read this, but the lack of capitalization in both the title and the description do not bode well.
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Yeah, I'm starting to feel that too. This is going to hurt.
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Really finding it hard to understand not only what's happening, but why I should care about this story.
Are you serious with this? Please show, don't tell. There's no emotion here or anywhere to be found.
I had to read this line a few times just to make sure I wasn't seeing things. It's a jumbled mess between focusing on the character and the thought of him being different. It's almost like that should have been internal dialogue.
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Fire roses!
Why have I never thought of this as a Honeymooners joke?
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Look, if you have any plans on continuing this at all, first I'd fire your friend from being your proofreader because they're bad at it. Second, I'd take a good long look at what you want to have happen in this story because it's honestly not that great. As a first time writer, multi-chapter adventures are not the best because you rarely find those that know how to structure them properly. Even people with experience can have difficulty with an ongoing structure. It's better for you to start small and write short stories.
Try this link here to help you get started and learn some of the pitfalls you want to avoid for future fics. As for this, I wouldn't try moving ahead with it. If you want to, fine, but do yourself a favor and find a new proofreader on the site. One who actually knows what they're doing.
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