Even if I had started to feel hungry, I was content, waiting for the Pony of my choice. Thinking of the Ponies, my friends. Whom was I to choose? Pinkie Pie and her antics, Rarity and her fashion, Twilight and her magic, Flutter Sye and her critters, Apple Jack and her farm, Rainbow Dash, and her cool bravado?
I had been left with a tough choice. I had to make the choice, the call is mine, and mine alone. At least, until someone pulls a Pony out, from right under me, if I waited too long? I did not even know, if there is anyone else, ready to make such a choice.
If I couldn't fly, I wouldn't enjoy her to the fullest, and thus, I left Rainbow Dash out. Maybe I'm not into fashion, that left Rarity out. Magic may be fun, but I still left Twilight Sparkle. There is the farm, but I chose to pass her over. The critters wasn't quite pulling me in. Then it was obvious, I chose Pinkie Pie, without any further consideration.
Since I had made the choice, I look intently at the screen, there is the pink dot, I click it, and the path came forth, and I followed it. Soon finding her place, and the shop opened, mere minutes before I arrived, and the pink Pony popped into view as she walked out the door. I simply stopped before her.
“Hiya, Pinkie!” I blurted out as greeting.
“Hi, Hitomi!” she blurted out, as response.
I realised instantly, I had made my choice, and I'm prepared to live by it, I like her, to the point of love. This is what I had been hoping for, even before I knew what I was exploring. Who wouldn't want to find a special somepony?
“How about we share breakfast, unless you've already eaten? On the other hoof, what's your errand?” I then asked.
“Yes, and no. Just out to pick up a few ingredience, like always!” she pointed out.
“Then you wouldn't mind, if I tagged along?” I continued, hoping she was with me.
“Please, company is always right, by me. Unless you're someone I did not like, but I like everypony!” she responded, in a hyper giggle.
“Yes, I guess you do like everypony!” I responded, as I followed her to the store front, where she intended to pick up the baking ingredients she needed for the day.
Pinkie soon found the store, slipping inside with me in tow. I guess I did not mind following her, I do prefer following her, over waiting for her, truth be told. I could as well confess it to myself, no point denying it?
As she picked the list up, on entering the store, I soon helped her picking what she needed. Just for the joy of helping. Never minding the effort put into it, since she already was a friend in the first place.
I found several brands of jam, listed on her note, picking them a few at the time, clearing them with her, while she went over other, heavier packages. I then slipped them into her saddle bags, until her list had been all matched out. From there, we passed the counter and Pinkie slipped the bits up for the required ingredients.
“Thanks!” the Pony uttered, and we left the store.
Even though her bags now were heavy with ingredients, we still managed to get back, before the bakery was opening for business, in part, thanks to my help on the way.
She opened the door, and it slammed behind us, and the chime went off on entry. Then I helped her picking out ingredients, slipping them into their slots, in order to make them available for the days work in the bakery.
“Thaks. Now it's time for breakfast!” Pinkie announced, just as I slipped the last jar in place.
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This made me cry.
3786160
Foreign to the internet?
3786160 speaking of honing skills, I think you may consider doing that.
Starting with elaborating your comment, since it left much to be wished for, on the point of what you're meaning, unless that detail is your personal oppinion.
I know for a fact, not everypony will line one and the same story, regardell of th litterary quality of it.
maybe explain wy you don't like this story, no fan of 'Digimon'? this is something I'm not asking for, it's up to you.
Besides, I hope you do realise, just how new the story is.
3786988 by the sound of it, you're speaking for yourself.
3787339 The reason why people don't like it is because your grammar is absolutely terrible. Like he said, hone your grasp of English to a decent level before posting a story out on the internet. I didn't even read the story, but the description was so terrible it gave me mind cancer.
3787798 the description can be fixed, but it isn't the place I put in the most effort into. Which doesn't mean I'm not going to improve upon it.
I'm working on my English as well, which I'm trying to put moe effort into, but how would you know if you improve, if you're not putting it to the test?
As to that, that's an interesting theory. Where did you grow up? Seriously, that is rethorically speaking.
For a final note; I can improve upon the story by correcting the grammar, but I doubt I'd bother saving a story with spotless garmmar, by changing the story, if you see where I try to go with the question?
Bro, the grammar is bad throughout the story, like it's unreadable at times. I suggest you read high quality fics and look at their grammar.
By the way, Zecora needs to talk in rhyme.
Look not every fic is perfect im sure ponyess is ok with criticism but insulting someone isn't going to help Willie and idmas so for the time I will refer to you guy's as Putas and bendehoes....oh and Mérida heads Your welcome moustache:
3788751 I'll just have to ask somepony to help me reformulate her lines.
Just as I'm going to go over the test in general, including said grammar issues.
3788999 That would be great, best of luck
3789064 Oh yeah. Exasctly.
I liked the detail, as I noticed it. I just wasn't sure anyone would put any Significance to it.
On the other hoof, it is the little details, that makes all the difference in the end.
There goes another one?
3789065 there ought to be someone who is good at Zecorean Rhymes in this large a group of knowledgable ponies?(oups, I hope someone coined it before me?) or not?javascript:void(0);