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  • 14w, 1d
    It's been a while

    I feel like I should start by apologizing, since it's been roughly 2 years since I posted anything here. I guess it's safe to say I don't feel especially associated with the fandom anymore. And as far as art goes, I'm more of a visual person as opposed to a writer.

    However, I greatly enjoyed writing, and still do sometimes. After going back and reading some old drafts I wrote well over a year ago I decided I actually really, really liked them. I won't bother with an editor or whatever, so anything I post is going to be incredibly rough. But I figured I'd post everything I have and more or less like. Since I do feel like I owe this fandom something. And uh... to the people that might still be waiting for Writing History to be continued.

    Mostly, I'm doing this because even though I no longer consider myself part of the fandom, I still have stories and characters I deeply love that are rooted in the fandom. And I just wanna throw them out into the world in case someone other than myself enjoys them.

    As for Writing History, which is probably the story most people were reading... well... I don't know if I'll ever pick that up again. I have about 4 more chapters written that I never published, and of course, I still have the general outline of the story in my head. I guess the question remains if there still is someone out there who even remembers that story, and wishes to read the rough, unedited chapters I have for it?

    So yeah... this blog post is a mess :D I'll post the stories I have that I like... and if I ever end up writing more, well, I guess you'll see it appear.

    And in case anyone is interested in what I'm doing most of the time, you can find me on tumblr at

    So yeah... probably forgot some stuff. But this seems to be the gist of it.

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  • 122w, 1d
    The state of history

    Hello there, people hopefully interested in my story! As you might have noticed, the last couple of chapter came out outrageously slow. I'll be going over why that was, and what I will change to prevent that from happening again. If this doesn't interest you and you'll just wait to see when I post the next set of trouble our heroes will get into, feel free to leave now. For those still here, here goes!

    Gee, Gaiascope, why did it take you, like, a month to get a chapter out? No author I know is that slow!

    I know, and I'm not happy with the way things went either. But here is the deal: I went through at least 3 complete versions of chapter 5 before it was half-decent. When I say complete I mean completely written. The first couple of versions had the chapter very different, and actually longer. But it didn't work, not at all. So after a long talk with my editor and bouncing some ideas back-and-forth, I forgot everything I knew and started over.

    So to get things straight, it doesn't take me a month to write a chapter. Chapters of this length (10k words) take me roughly a week to write, and then another couple of days depending on how many scenes end up not working.

    Well, Gaiascope, that's all very interesting, but what does that mean for the rest of the story?

    Good news, hopefully. In the rough month between chapter 4 and 5, I wrote nearly 40k words. So in the future, I'm hoping to be able to actually have those 40k words stand on their own and not as multiple (bad) versions of the same chapter.

    And what will guarantee you won't end up writing yourself into a corner again?

    That's what I'm getting to now. I'm not going to post the next chapter as soon as it's finished. I'm going to write the entirety of the next story arc, which I estimate to be around as long as the story as a whole is now, and only then will I post it. For those of you familiar with "The End of Ponies", that's the model I'm hoping to adopt. Except without the several months in between arcs.

    Vhat?! Nyet nyet nyet! I want more story!

    While I say I won't post anything, the next arc can be broken down in 3 pieces. Depending on how I end up doing it, I might be able to post something before the entire arc is complete. But what I'm hoping to do with this is guarantee that the story overall is of a higher quality, that I don't end up rewriting outrageously long parts, and that I won't write myself into a corner. So, there you have it. The future of Writing History.

    It's too long! I didn't read!

    - Next chapter won't be posted until next story arc is complete

    - Next story arc could theoretically not take much longer than the time between chapter 4 and 5

    - Please tell me your thoughts on this, as they are very important to me.

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  • 139w, 5d
    Introduction and Writing History!

    Oh! Hello there! What's this? A blog, you say? Well then, let's get blogging, shall we? I'll tell you a little about myself and my story, Writing History.

    About me, I'm a brony, obviously. For 3 months now, I should think. Recently got into this whole fanfiction thing, and I thought to myself 'what the hay, why not try it myself?'. It's strange, because I never attempted serious creative writing before this. I guess this amazing community has that effect on people. Apart from writing, I like to draw and make pretty pictures. :3 I study game design as a visual artist, so that ought to help me get better in that regard. (In case you are wondering, yes I made the cover image myself. A high-resolution version, you ask? Why sure, right here!) School can be rather demanding, so I might be forced to take time off writing when homework piles up, I hope you can forgive me should that cause chapters to be delayed.

    Well then, about my one and only story! Writing History. It's my first serious attempt at fiction, or any creative writing in that regard. Some people may think it would a good idea to start with a one-shot, or some other short story. But I say neigh to that! I want my first project to be as ambitious as I am rubbish. That is to say, quite ambitious. The origins of the story are rather funny, if your interested. It all started when I was doodling some random ponies in Photoshop, and caught in the spirit of reading fanfiction, I started making up background stories for the doodled ponies. From there it kind of spiralled out of control, and today I find myself here, writing history! (See what I did there?)

    But I digress (I tend to do that in blog posts or other assorted rambling, this has no correlation to my story writing, I hope :P). With Writing History I am aiming at producing an epic. That is to say, 200 thousand words or more. Judging by the story arcs I intend on doing, and how much words I used to write out the story arcs I already have, I say that isn't a totally unrealistic goal. An overly ambitious goal for my first work, perhaps. But if you don't aim high, you're not going to get high. A huge shout-out goes to my editor, and all-round amazing guy Hellfire657! (Seriously, do you even have an account on here? Make one, you slacker!) The story just wouldn't be the same without him! (No really, it probably wouldn't exist if he didn't motivate me or helped me improve the story.)

    And... I ran out of things to ramble about. I'm sorry, I do am terrible at these blog posts, I never quite know what to say. All I can say at this point, is that I appreciate the kind words and feedback I have recieved so far! And I hope to continue seeing those tracking my story until the end! Let's make it a good one fellows!

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  • ...

My name is Waren Pledgeworth. I am an ordinary pony who sells books, and I guess it’s safe to say I hate steam engines. At least, I was all that until a peculiar mare fell on my roof. Now strange events are piling up one after another. Warring deities? Fanatic terrorists? Sultry Griffins? Maybe I should have just stayed in bed after all…

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First Published
17th Mar 2012
Last Modified
19th Jul 2012

Well. Color me interested!

Very well written.  

It seems pretty good. Personally I don't like first person that much, only if it's been done right. But you sir have done it right. You got my vote.

This seems like it. Will. Be. Epic.

Ah yes.  I love the smell of a well written story.

Thank you for the kind words everyone! This is my first serious attempt at... well, any type of story, actually. I'm glad you like it, and please look forward to seeing more!

I agree with Sorren. I usually try to avoid first-person narratives due to their tendency to be erratic in structure. However, you have not only written this story well, but managed to fulfill all the criteria of a starting chapter. You introduced a cast of like-able and interesting characters and gave them a reason for continuing the story (even if that reason was boredom. A unique reason, but a reason nonetheless). I look forward to reading the next chapter. Keep up the good work.

The single quotation marks might be hurting your viewership of this story, as it's very hard to pick out what characters are saying unless you're really paying attention to the text. Other than that this is a great start to a fic that promises a good deal of adventure. I'll be watching and recommending this.

Waren is . . . an interesting character. On the one hand he's a classical stick in mud constantly waving his hoof in anger at "the young folk," even when it's completely unnecessary. (Seriously, steam being a pollutant? By definition it's just water vapor, and last I checked that was still kosher.) On the other hand though he's clearly a xenophile who is attracted to other species more than ponies, and he does help people out when they need it even if he's reluctant about it.

I do have to ask about Haughbury though. From everything shown in this fic he seems to have raised the quality of life for everyone in Equestria, jump-started the economy of the nation, and his inventions have opened up new avenues of experience previously unavailable to the population of Equestria. (Seriously, I bet Stratos would kill for a pair of those artificial wings.) Yet from the title picture and Waren's (a.k.a. the protagonist's) comments it seems obvious that Haughbury will turn out to be another dime a dozen corporate villain that will want to take over the world because he's greedy, and for a story with so much potential that seems like an absolute waste.

Comments aside, this was a good chapter that continues to set up the adventure that is to come.


Ha ha! Thank you for taking your time to analyse Waren so thoroughly :P The way you describe him is exactly what I had in mind for him, so I'm glad that came across. I was kind of worried his hatred for steam engines would be too much, and it wouldn't be apparent he was biased towards them due to... well, just being a general stick in the mud. xD

As for Haughbury, I don't want to spoil too much, so I'll just say if those are your worries, you have nothing to worry about.

I hope I will see you for the rest of the story, it's good to know people are actually reading and enjoying it. :)


The fact that he was complaining about steam being a pollutant kind of gave away that he was being unreasonably biased. Though, all the same, you should probably stick a disclaimer at the beginning of the first chapter that Waren is an unreliable narrator. Many authors tend to use their works to advance their own opinions, so it would be wise to make it clear early on that your own opinions are not reflected in Waren's narration.

Ah, that's good. Far too many industrialists in fiction are evil when they really have no need to be. Granted, I wouldn't be surprised if he turned out to not be such a nice guy even if his stated actions have been decidedly positive, but as Shere Kahn of TaleSpin proved, you don't have to be a nice guy to be a good guy.

Don't worry. I'll stick it out as long as I am able, and I'll keep rec'ing this story on Spacebattles too. :twilightsmile:

Aha, yes! I am still very much alive. I'm sorry chapter three took as long as it did to get out there. But both myself and my editor found ourselves swamped in school work. But I am happy to announce chapter 4 and 5 are in the editing pipeline already, and chapter 6 is being written as we speak.

I will do my best to avoid long pauses between chapters like in the future, and hope you will stay with me to the end. :) Now, enjoy your new chapter!

Great chapter. I was kind of caught off guard by the introduction, but everything afterwards was fantastic.  I especially loved the shoutout to the Fallout Equestria fanfic.  That, combined with your take on the griffin species, made me wonder what role the griffin empire would have in your story. I look forward to reading more in the future.

0 dislikes? :twilightsmile:

11 views? :rainbowhuh:

I don't understand this. This should have, like, twenty times the views it has.

I really could have done without the Fallout: Equestria references. It's extremely jarring in a fic that is otherwise extremely unique to have one of the major global players a shout-out. The chapter could be reworked to remove the references, and I think that the whole story would stand on its own much better as a result.

That said, I really do have to enjoy everything else about said global player. I went into this thinking that the griffins were going to be the villains, and that Dorothea would be the femme fatale to Waren's noire detective. That could still be the case, but at the moment it looks like the griffins will be the good guys, and I really like that. It's a nice change of pace from the "griffins, and humans, and dragons, and dogs, and [insert non-pony species here]" motif I see in a lot of other fics. Granted, I don't expect them to be angels (as I said in my review of The Humanification Bureau having the Pacifist Sue shoe on the other foot hardly brings any satisfaction), but is nice to see them being portrayed as on the right side for once -- at least, that's what I'm deducing from the their stated goal of containing dangerous magical artifacts and their insistence on acting on some important task.

I like this chapter, and I hope to see more chapters in this story.


Thank you for the comment, and sorry for the late response. I've been a little busy >_< I'm glad you like the griffins. Or at least, how I envisioned them as a race.


Hmm.. It's a troubling point, really. Fallout:Equestria hammered into my mind that the griffins have an authoritative figure to which they refer as 'Gawd'. And in my mind it makes sense for them to consider their leader 'transcended' in a way. I didn't force it in there to give a shoutout to an (amazing) story, but also because it feels right (in my mind). If it bothers you, I'm sorry.

And as to the role of the griffins... that will become clear in the future. Mhuahaha!

EDIT: What I mean, I didn't force it in at all xD It just feels natural to me, and I hope that over the course of the story, I will convince you as well :P


Something like "sovrano" (Italian: adj. sovereign; self-governing; paramount, supreme / nm. sovereign, monarch, ruler, king) or "Papst" (German: the Pope) would be a better title honestly, as it maintains the European naming style seen in the canon griffins and avoids an irritating shout-out that's subject to far too many bad puns.

Also, congrats on being featured on EQD.

Hey Congratulations on getting on Eqd.

(also ch 2 is my favorite)

I'm not one for reading fanfics but this one has definitely intrigued me. I appreciate the backstory of Griffons for once, not many people actually get into it.


Oh I like this! Please do continue!

I think the ending was a little weird:unsuresweetie::facehoof:

Oh lookie. I forgot about this. I remember this story when it as new. Either way. Great job on a good story.

The gryphon plot is rather well crafted here. Dorothea alone has depth to her character. Especially seeing the cute moment at the end with Waren acts as a nice twist to her intimidating side which I'm curious to see developing when you continue the story.  It's also fascinating to have a story crafted from a character's point of view, it leaves space for interpretation.

This earned it's place in my favorites list. Keep up the good work.:raritystarry:

Wow, I realized I praised this fic awhile ago, and it completely slipped my mind to track it.:twilightsheepish:

Thank god it was posted on Equestria Daily.

Still lovin' it, by the way. Keep up the good work!:twilightsmile:


>Griffin plot

That made me chuckle. D: I have a dirty mind.

Thank you all for the words of encouragement! I know I said the next chapter would be out sooner, but things got out of hoof, as it were. An entire chapter got scrapped, the upcoming chapters are nearly double in length of my earlier ones, and my editor is currently very busy. But there is also good news! I have a very good idea of where I want the story to go and once things sort themselves out the time between chapters should go down.

I'm hoping that eventually I can release them bi-weekly, but to make up for the long wait I'll get my currently lined up chapters out as soon as I made the finishing touches. Also, if anypony is interested, I can look into releasing the story in an e-book format as well.

Woah I kind of saw the accident with twilight coming from a mile away but still :pinkiesad2: poor twilight and poor everybody

All we need now is an earth pony who's trying to get into Celestia's School for gifted unicorns and the gang will be complete.

Yet more build-up, wheels within wheels, more backstory revealed, we finally get to meet the canon characters, and our heroes still forget their supplies. Typical. These blokes are just magnets for trouble, aren't they? :trollestia:

Still, leaving aside the fact that this adventure is quickly turning into a Top Gear roadtrip, this chapter does bring up an interesting possibility: that our heroes are going to become part of the new Elements of Harmony. Waren would be Magic since he seems to be the nexus point for all of these friendships, Stratos would be Laughter because she's . . . herself, and Werk would be . . . Werk would be . . . I haven't the foggiest. :rainbowhuh:

Still, thanks for making my Friday heavy on the great updates. I knew Antropology and All-American Girl would be updating yesterday, but this story came completely out of left field and made things all complete. It was a good update too. :pinkiehappy:

Wow !

I apparently like this story more and more with every new chapter :)


And how do you like new cliffhanger of Anthropology ?

I new that there will be cliffhanger, but this was masterpiece :twilightangry2:

I hope Gaiascope will not abuse cliffhangers so often and so... cliffhanging :twilightoops:


Actually, the cliffhanger is one of my favorite literary devices, so I really hope Gaiascope does employ them more often.

The ending was truly chuckle worthy. Poor Waren has to put up a lot with his own plunders. :twilightsheepish:

I assume next stop will be Sweet Apple Acres? Can't wait for the next chapter.:ajsmug:


I was kind of worried how that would be received, actually. One of my friends thinks I'm a cruel heartless person for writing this xD


You're closer than you think :trollestia: Though you'll never figure out what I mean by that, mhuahahaha!


I'm glad I was able to make someone's day complete :) I saw a comment on the story update post on EQD saying someone was waiting for my story to update. It's really little things like that that motivate me to write more and better. And they do seem to have an affinity for getting in trouble :twilightsheepish:


Thank you! That means a lot to me :) I hope I can keep giving you that feeling throughout the story :pinkiehappy:


Poor Waren, he has so much on his mind, he can't possibly hope to remember the apples! I can pretend to be mysterious about the next chapter, but really, if there is an apple related emergency in Ponyville, where else would they go? :)

>>625040 its alright as long as its used to develop characters and not unessential. well great story anyway you have likable OCs which is a hard thing to do :twilightsmile:  

>>625599 I can second that, there is already lots of unessential padding found in here that adds very little to storytelling. Stay focused on ensnaring us to the journey of the characters. Make them likable in their own specific ways. That makes a difference with the good stuff and bad stuff.


There were no updates for a while, so I am just asking if all is ok.

I hope you are not going to abandon the story...


I would first like to say that it means a lot to me people actually care enough to be worried about my story. Don't worry, I have no intention of leaving this story unfinished. It's just that the last few weeks have been rather hectic. But now my summer break has arrived, and I have every intention of filling it to the brim with pony goodness.

The next chapter shouldn't be much longer, and after that I will make a blog post with the state of the story and how I'm going to handle things, because there will be some changes.

I hope you will stay with me until the end of the story, even I don't deserve it.


Thanks for answer.

I'm glad to hear that all is ok.

In my taste - story is good as long as it has live and developing characters and global conspiracy plot do not overwhelm story itself and characters relations (you know  when there are 100500 points of view, 100500 flat background characters and none main character at all because author constantly switch between points of view not giving any character enough attention).

Yours story is definitely good I think :)

So I wish you good mood in writing and stop talking about not deserving reader's attention :)

99% stories at fanficion sites are crap including fimfiction, 'writing history' belongs to that small 1% and I think you are 120% able to keep it there.


Update :)

Very warm chapter it is. Thanks :)))

"Stratos is amazing..."

I say this at least once every chapter. Why is she so amazing?

This update was definitely worth the wait. Except now I really wanna know what Mstiri's (who will forever be typed at Tiri because it's easier) gonna say. And I have to wait D: I hate waiting P:

Hehehe, Warren has to put up with even more ponies during the travel, keeps me anticipative about what happens next.

No, Warren! Resist the temptation of a love triangle! Dorothea already likes you, you really don't need to go chasing after another woman. In fact, the last thing you need is to go chasing after another woman. After all, hell hath no fury like a princess-militant scorned.

Not much else to say here except that I enjoyed this chapter like every other, and I wonder whether or not that dream is foreshadowing -- either future events, or Waren falling out of his tree/ :pinkiecrazy:



Thank you! Once I got it right, it was surprisingly easy to write, so its good to see it works :ajsmug:


Patience, young grasshopper. And every time you compliment my character I have to blush and grin like an idiot. "Oh stop it, you flatterer you." :twilightblush: As for Mstiri's intentions.... yeah you'll have to wait :3 I have already found writing is a lot easier when I'm not worrying about having the chapter out ASAP and just focussing on making the story as good as I can.


Haha, still nowhere near the amount of characters in something like Game of Thrones :P (over 200! Le gasp!)


Why a love triangle when you can have a love dodecahedron?! Mhuahahaha :pinkiecrazy: I find it interesting that you are the first person to mention the dreams. And that is all I shall say about the subject. See you next chapter everypony!

Dear lord, only two chapters in and I'm already dreading this ending. The characters are wonderful and easily relatable, the writing is fantastic, with very few errors (I'm willing to help with this if needed) and the narrative thus far is amazing. I'm looking forward to seeing more of this sir. Keep it up.

The New Lunar Republic, huh? This should get interesting...

The way Stratos talks and acts, I keep accidentally thinking of her as Apple Bloom . . .

Why does a weather unicorn know a repair spell? That's not related to her talent.

And by the way, what sort of pony names are "Waren" and "Werk"?

Ah’m Stratos, and I’m beautiful!

Every time she does that I feel like she's an AI parroting what it's heard in an attempt to have something relevant to say.

Also, I object to her being able to sort Waren's store in under a minute. Levitate all the books? Sure, I can accept that, with how strong her telekinesis has been shown to be, though it's not a guaranteed implication since there's inherent difficulty to levitating multiple object beyond the effort required for their combined weight. But rapidly sorting a store full of books all at the same time requires an incredible amount of focus, and I'd question whether Stratos can even manage an average amount. Even Twilight, you may recall, sorts books one at a time.

Basically, Stratos seems to be unreasonably popular with practically everypony as soon as she meets them, and is unreasonably good at magic. She's hardly the worst OC ever written, but I'm seeing a bit of a Mary Sue in her.

I was wondering if anypony was ever going to remember the apples . . .

And Sweetie, calm down. Kaneigh only made a fool of himself. Trust me on this, I'm from the future.

Also, I was kind of hoping you'd throw in a twist and Twilight would not be Haughbury's dead wife.

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