this is actually pretty good . Can you jsut put more details in the gore parts you now like were the blood splatters.
I sidestepped the diving changeling and grabbed its leg then slammed it into the ground. I then raised my foot and stomped it in the stomach, it spit up black blood in my face, and I loved the feeling of it. I grabbed its horn and ripped it straight off, then stabbed it right into its forehead and silenced it forever. I looked up and saw everybody staring at me, the looks of horror on their faces all just staring at me.
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I sidestepped the diving changeling and grabbed its leg then slammed it into the ground with a sickening crunch. I then raised my foot and stomped it in the stomach causing it to spit up black blood in my face, and I loved the feeling of it even giving in a lick with my tongue as it rain down my face."tastes like cherry's" . I then grabbed it by the horn and proceeded to give in a tug using my magic and while the thing was screaming in agony I couldn't help but laugh under my breath. After what felt like hours of pulling I finally was able to remove the horn with a crack, then spinning it around stabbed it right into its left eye causing more blood to come flying out and splashing on to me the black blood almost covering all of my fur. I looked up and saw everybody staring at me, the looks of horror on their faces all just staring at me.
SEE MORE BLOOD AND DESCRIPTION MAKES ANYTHING A LITTLE BETTER
I don't think this will become a popular story honestly. OC stories rarely do...but I will give this a chance.
this is actually pretty good . Can you jsut put more details in the gore parts you now like were the blood splatters.
try this instead
SEE MORE BLOOD AND DESCRIPTION MAKES ANYTHING A LITTLE BETTER