>chapter 1
>over 8000 words

Mother of god.....

Kinda busy, so gonna track for later.

Holy jesus....that was um...descriptive...excuse me for like twenty minutes while I go to the bathroom

You should have just added this as a second chapter so more people who read the first one can see this one. Though a lot of the audience probably came from the directory

328159 You sir, are 100% correct. I debated doing that before I uploaded the story, but opted not to, and then almost immediately regretted it.

Do you think it would help if I wrote a "bridge" to add on to the original fic to point people to this one? I don't want anyone who wanted to read it missing out.

328679 Seems like a good idea. Its a good thing you posted this on fimfiction that has the tracking ability. Also you could just delete and repost this as the second chapter, go upload it to the directory yourself or update the current post in the directory. I guess its up to you though to find the most convenient and/or agreeable solution. Deleting this would lose the current view count and audience and maybe lose some of the new ones you caught... I think it would be better to write that bridge and upload this to the directory. win more viewers, lose none. Then again it could get messy uploading a series whole series in separate posts...

Gah mini rant.

TL;DR

Write the bridge and upload this chapter to the directory yourself.

Trixie? And Princest? Aand Drama?

Adding a small bridge to the other might help, but I think many of those who tracked the other also followed you?

328849 Only about half also followed from a glance. I'm already plotting the bridge. It'll be very short. Hope to have it up within 24 hours--maybe sooner.

Okay, the bridging chapter--appropriately titled "Bridge"--is now in place. It's short, with no clop, but does reveal a bit of plot that I wasn't going to reveal just yet originally. I like the tease it created, though.

"Trixie is going to take you now."

WELL SHIT HOWDY

Trixie is pro seductress. And, you have a tracker.

You gotta wonder how Celestia's going to get Twilight for a pet. I mean, sure, it'll be easy as all hell, when it comes to Celestia, Twilight will sit up and BARK if told, but seeing the process should prove amusing.

So wonder what Celestia has planned other then just switching places between Trixie and Twilight.

With the bridge it looks like it will be some deception aimed at Luna

I skimmed the sex part so just hope i didnt miss any hints/plot points

Okay, this chapter has:

8.000 plus words
A+ grade clop
Drama
Plot

Needless to say, tracked and liked.

Uhm... I don't want to call it realistic, but I think it's as close to a real scene as it can get when you think about magical cartoon unicorns
It was really descriptive and detailed to a level I rarely see, and I also liked the idea with the pattern wheel, though at first I was a bit confused where she suddenly got a wartenberg pinwheel from before I knew what it really was .

The real storyline looks really good as well, and I'm eager to read the next chapter as soon as you're done. Personally I was hoping for a soon confrontation between Trixie and Twilight.

It's as if Trollestia and Molestia were combined into one body, oh my. I hope Twilight can handle it.
Good stuff, Imma keep an eye on this.

Shit just got real...Real SEXY

...Holy Shit. You sir are a clop fic genuis.
Cant wait for more

omg whyyyy soo much teeeext >_>????.......

in one word this was...awsome,no just kiding this was ... fun

You have inspired me to make a human dress.
Red straps with black lace and a non revealing cut around the breasts. Black lace everywhere actually at all of the fabric ends. After the waist is a tiered skirt that cuts off just above the knee. There will be a draping cloth on one side that extends to the floor, still showing the skirt part underneath. The red will be dark and the lace will be thin.

2260575 because... it's a story?

wow what a cliffhanger this is a really good chapter, but there are some minor grammar errors in mlp speech patterns such as in one paragraph instead of ponies you put people I just wanted to point that out but other then that good story.

Damn Spike, you gotta step up your game. Trixie just stole your chick!

I decided to reread your Who Rules? books with the start of your 7th and I was wondering if you were planning on doing more with Trixie? In the Who Rules? series or as an off shot because I forgot how much I loved how you wrote her.

5589156 I second that. Your portrayal of Trixie is kind of 'refreshing' I guess would summise until I find a better word for it. What I'm trying to say is that your version of Trixie is different and a big improvement on the usual portrayal of her.

Kinky. Also, I can imagine Twilight's "WHAT" being audible in the entire solar system.

Cya
Raziel-chan